Revision 2 Final Draft

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Interlude:

This song is dedicated to international students or teenagers that had to make sacrifices to pursue their dreams and are simply missing home. Maybe it isn’t your actual house that you miss but your family, friends and even the routine you did before moving away. Maybe you didn’t move far away but you just entered adulthood and had to say goodbye to the carefree version of yourself. Whatever you may be going through, you are not alone. I know that it feels cold but it will get warmer eventually, I promise. Roads may seem blocked, skies may look dark and time seems to pass by too fast. Everything you are facing right now is just another phase that you will overcome and conquer. If you feel like giving up, don’t. Do you know that if you are able to withstand everything that life has thrown at you so far then you can do anything? You are unstoppable. Don’t just let me, your friends or your family tell you that. Tell yourself that you can and you will succeed. You will be able to make your family proud and accomplish anything your heart desire as long as you DON’T GIVE UP. Now keep these words in mind, positivity, patience, and perseverance. Remember to be positive, be patient and to try your best to persevere.

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Verse 1:

My days get harder to bare
Especially when I’m alone
I laugh the pain away
I wipe my tears secretly
But that’s a part of growing up

Can I turn back time
To when I was five
When daddy held me and said
I’ll be your superman

I remember having
Race cars and Nintendo’s
Mommy in an apron
Oh I never thought I’d miss the sight of that

Pre-chorus:

But as I grow older
I learn that maybe sometimes
Letting go is better than holding on
Darling remember that even if you fall,
I’ll take your hand and lift you up

Chorus:

And I know you are strong..
Yes it might be hard
You miss the feeling of home
But home is where your heart lays
Don’t be scared to cry
I’ll lend you my shoulder
When roads seem way too dark
Look up I’ll be right there
Ten thousand miles might seem so far
But we’re so close at heart~

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Verse 2:

Take a breath, close your eyes
Take one step at a time
Don’t look back
And wonder why
Keep moving forward
For a better time

Mom and dad
I’ll come back home
I’ll make you proud
And buy you a car
Maybe a brand new house
With a huge backyard
What do you say?
Can you wait for me

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Pre-chorus:

There’s no mountain high enough
No ocean deep enough
Can break what we have
Because we’ll walk in this path
Without looking back
And one thing’s for sure
We’ll be okay

Chorus:

And I know you are strong.
Yes it might be hard
You miss the feeling of home
But home is where your heart lays
Don’t be scared to cry
I’ll lend you my shoulder
When roads seem way too dark
Look up I’ll be right there
Ten thousand miles might seem so far
But we’re so close at heart~

Bridge:

Even when your world feels like it’s crumbling down
Look into my eyes and find the silver lining
Please don’t give in to the voices inside your head
Because I’m here for you
And you are stronger than you think

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Outro:
At last, when I knock on your front door
And I can start smelling your cologne
You’ll see the light shining through my eyes
And I’ll be able to see you smile
As tears start strolling through your face
I’ll say “Mom and dad I’m home”

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Response on music review

1) I think overall, you mentioned how my structure of this essay is different and that I don’t really need to say that certain scenes symbolize something. I think I worded it wrong but I guess I was trying to say what those scenes and colors meant to me in my point of view.

2) I was wondering what you meant by that I should attribute the Korean lyrics?

3) The feedbacks were actually helpful and I feel like it helped me understand better as to how my song/song lyrics should be like. When I writing the third paper I was aiming for a different structure and to not go all informative but a mix of everything. I’m just sort of struggling of making my revision at least 600 words. I do have a plan of including an interlude before the song so it sets the mood of what the song is going to be about.

Revision 2 Proposal

I plan to revise my paper from unit 3 writing about art, “April and A Flower”. I also want to push myself out of my comfort zone and take the challenge of changing it into a song. I hope to reach teenagers around my age (17-24) that are feeling homesick and in need of motivation and strength. Teenagers that might have traveled across the world to pursue their dreams in exchange for a brighter future not only for themselves but for their family as well. I hope that by making it into a song, my audience will realize that they’re not alone. Every one of us goes through rough patches and we all have to make sacrifices but we have to remember that in every dark tunnel there will always be a ray of light shining at the end. I also wish that my audience will be able to feel and relate to the lyrics even if their situation is not exactly like mine.

Unit 3 Final Draft

Zevanya

Carrie Hall

English 1101

May 2, 2019

April and A Flower

April 28th, 1979 a flower named Patricia Lauretta Viola was born. Started off buried in the ground and slowly grew out of the soil forming a stem, a leaf, and finally a fully bloomed flower. This beautiful flower went through hurricanes, rainfalls, and landslides but it did not dismantle her. On April 10th, 2001, her very own offspring bloomed and that offspring was me, Zevanya Margareth Francien Sibarani.

“젊고 아름다운 당신의 계절
여길 봐 예쁘게 피었으니까
바닥에 떨어지더라도
꽃 길만 걷게 해 줄게요”
(you gave up your youthful and beautiful season. Look at me, I have bloomed prettily. Even if I fall to the ground, I will make you walk only on flower paths)

The song “Flower Road” was released on November 22, 2016. The song is sung by a South Korean singer and actress named Kim Sejeong. She is a former member of the girl group I.O.I and a current member of the girl group Gugudan. She is under the label of YMC Entertainment but on November 2016, she participated in Jellyfish Entertainment’s music channel and released the famous Korean ballad “Flower Road” as a soloist (Kim Se-Jeong). The song charted really well throughout seven huge Korean music sites and she also received a trophy on Show Champion ( a music show where they rank the top 5 songs released each month and award the first place a trophy). Her single “Flower Road” was released on November 2016 and was actually produced by the famous South Korean rapper, record producer, singer-songwriter Zico from the boy group BlockB (Zico (rapper)). In 2015, he appeared as a producer in Korea’s famous rap competition tv show “Show Me the Money”. Throughout the years, he’s won multiple awards such as “Song of the Year, Artist of the Year, Best Male Artist, etc..” (Zico (rapper)). Zico was highly inspired by the letters Sejeong and Chaeyon (her former member from I.O.I) wrote to their mothers. It was known that Zico writes and gives his music to people he truly feels could make an impact and portray the emotions of the song well.

In the music video, you could only see the image of a mother as it represents Sejeong’s family background. Her parents were divorced when she was little and her mother raised both her and her older brother alone. I felt as if she was speaking for me through this song. My parents got divorced when I was younger and I’ve been raised by my mother alone too which made me feel like she could relate to how sorry I actually felt towards my mom. My mom worked day and night supporting not only me but my grandparents and her sister’s family as well. People always thought because she was the youngest child she would become the most spoiled but in reality, she’s carrying the weight of three families on her own. Which is why I am always proud to say that Patricia Lauretta Viola is my mother and there’s absolutely nothing this woman can’t do if she puts her mind to it.

The music video was composed of split screens and parallels which compares the daily routine of the singer, Kim Sejeong, during the past and the present. In one scene, the screen on the left showed Sejeong tucking herself into bed while the opposite screen showed a woman or a mother tucking a little girl (younger Sejeong). The soft and warm colors deeply reflected the presence of the mother even though the mother’s face was not seen throughout the music video. As you can see, the left screen has a brighter color palette compared to the right side. I personally think the warmer colors represented the feeling of being safe and calm as she was still under her mother’s wing. The brighter colors seem to portray a sense of growth and independence but still filled with the feeling of calmness as blue is known to be a calming color.

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Nearing towards the end of the music video, the mother was holding onto the little girl’s bike and eventually lets go as she rides the bike on her own. I believe this was to show the mother letting go of her daughter so she can grow, shine and make her own path. I was personally really touched by this scene because it reminded me of when I gave my mom the last hug before I left for my flight to New York. The words she said to me was, “I have raised you well. You are brave, smart and wise. Always remember no matter how far or long we’re apart I will always love and support you. You keep me going and I’m beyond blessed. God gave me the best gift I could ever ask for so remember if you miss me, I’m always a call away.”

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At the end of the music video, Sejeong was holding an umbrella and reaching her hand out to check if it was still raining. The sun was shining and it was probably the brightest filter in the entire music video. I think this was to symbolize that even though the rainy days the sun will come out and things will get better no matter how hard it gets.

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As I mentioned earlier, Sejeong received a trophy from Show Champion which showed how well the song was doing. After she received the trophy, she gave a short speech while crying and thanked Zico, the staff, her fans and last but not least her mother and grandfather. Her eyes watered even more when she mentioned her mother and I couldn’t help but cry along with her because I was able to feel her sincerity. Seeing a very beautiful and strong woman openly talk about her family and her love for her mother makes me so happy. Her voice suited the song very well and when watching her live performance you can tell that she meant every word. It wasn’t just a typical ballad song about a breakup, it was a song about a mother’s love and her child promising a brighter future for her mother.

Patricia Lauretta Viola is my motivation and my flower. She gives me hope and she helps me persevere. I believe that’s how Kim Sejeong feels whenever she thinks about her mother. She feels gratitude yet her heart aches knowing she will never be able to fully give back the love and support she received. She cries on television shows when hosts ask, “what does your mother mean to you?” She never fails to thank her mother for every achievement, may it be huge or small. To the woman who went through nine risky months to give birth to me, the woman who sacrificed her youth just so I can have an amazing childhood and never experience poverty and lastly the only woman who made me feel beautiful and loved, I promise to only let you walk on a flower path when I get older.

Works Cited:

Jacob, Ryan. “Sejeong’s ‘Flower Path’ Is a Much-Needed Healing Song This Season.” Seoulbeats, 30 July 2017, seoulbeats.com/2016/11/sejeongs-flower-path-is-a-much-needed-healing-song-this-season/.

“Zico (Rapper).” Wikipedia, Wikimedia Foundation, 11 Apr. 2019, en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Zico_(rapper).

“Kim Se-Jeong.” Wikipedia, Wikimedia Foundation, 1 May 2019, en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Kim_Se-jeong.

Footnotes: All lyric quotes are from “Jacob, Ryan. “Sejeong’s ‘Flower Path’ ”

Flower Road and SOAPSTONE

In the article “Sejeong’s Flower Path is a Much-Needed Healing Song This Season”, Qing wrote “In the present, a grown-up Sejeong goes about her routine alone, dressing and tying her shoelaces by herself, taking her own height (and cheating by tiptoeing), making her own toast. These scenes are processed to emphasize cool colors in comparison to the warmer sepia tones of the scenes of the past. These points of contrast bring out a lingering sense of loneliness that comes with growing up and gaining independence.” In other words, in the music video, the screen was split into two parallels comparing Sejeong (the singer) when she was a child and as grown up. As an audience, you could see how the music video showed Sejeong having her mother do all these things for her but now that she’s growing up she becomes more independent but feels lonely at the same time which is what the warmer colors represent. The scenes from the music video made me sad but touched at the same time because it perfectly described my current situation. Sejeong was raised by her mother alone and the song represented how she only wants good things for her mom and promise to let her only walk on “flower paths”. The song talks about regret and hopefulness which is how I feel towards my mom because she sacrificed so much for me that I hope in the future I will be the one protecting her and walking on the crooked and broken roads for her.

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Rough Draft

Zevanya

Carrie Hall

English 1101

April 14, 2019

April and A Flower

I was seventeen when I flew across the world on my own. It was a step of adulthood for me because I was leaving my friends and family behind. People asked me, “why waste so much money for college in America when you can just go to one in Jakarta.” I used to ask myself the same question but there never was a specific answer. I just remembered that my heart was telling me to go back home. People called my parents crazy for letting their one and only daughter fly 16,167 kilometers away and it wasn’t just any city, it was the Big Apple. Whenever people asked they always replied, “it’s because she’s my only daughter that I have to let her go. You let them go because you know they’re ready to make their own path instead of following a paved one. Just like how a caterpillar becomes a butterfly, I’m not going to hold her back just because of my greed.”

It was one of the hardest decisions I’ve ever made but I was beyond excited to start my new life in New York. My flight was on a Monday afternoon and my friends promised to come by the airport to send me off. My family and I arrived earlier at around 1 pm because check-ins take forever. After checking in we ate at a restaurant near my gate while waiting for my friends to arrive as well. We just sat there in silence. We didn’t need to say much because we understood and realized that this will be the last time we’ll be able to enjoy each other’s presence. The silence was more than enough to convey how we felt that very moment. An hour later my friends started arriving and we were talking and hugging in front of my gate. They gave me letters to read on the plane and my best friend gave me a teddy bear. I started feeling really emotional because I was usually the one sending my friends off but now I was the one saying goodbye.

It was finally time for me to check-in and say my last goodbye to my friends and grandparents. None of us cried because it wasn’t a day to cry about so we waved goodbye with smiles on our faces. My mom followed me inside until I entered the waiting area. I was still a minor that time so she was allowed to accompany that far. Before I scanned my airplane ticket and passport we stood in a corner and she gave me a last hug. I was very overwhelmed and my eyes started itching but I promised myself not to cry. I felt all her love and support from that final hug and she whispered to me before I let go, “I have raised you well. You are brave, smart and wise. Always remember no matter how far or long we’re apart I will always love and support you. You keep me going and I’m beyond blessed. God gave me the best gift I could ever ask for so remember if you miss me I’m always a call away.”

I finally took my hand-carried luggage and scanned my passport. As I walk to the waiting area I saw my mom with a wide smile and waving goodbye until we couldn’t see each other anymore. It just hit me then that I was actually on my way to New York. As I waited for the doors to enter the plane to open, I sat and pressed shuffle on my playlist. It caught me by surprise when “Flower Road” by Kim Sejeong started playing. I looked out the window and saw my plane and as I listened to the lyrics, tears started to come out.
“세상이란 게 제법 춥네요” (the world is so cold)
“당신의 안에서 살던 때 보다” (colder than when I lived in you)
After listening to this song for a hundred times, the hundredth and one was when I truly felt and understood what it meant.

“젊고 아름다운 당신의 계절
여길 봐 예쁘게 피었으니까
바닥에 떨어지더라도
꽃 길만 걷게 해 줄게요”
(You gave up your youthful and beautiful season. Look at me, I have bloomed prettily. Even if I fall to the ground, I will make you walk only on flower paths.)

Just like the lyrics, my mom sacrificed everything for me and nothing could ever replace my mom’s love. I promised her and myself that when I get older she will only have to walk on flowers.
Kim Sejeong is a South Korean singer and actress born on August 28, 1996. Her single “Flower Road” was released on August 2018 and was actually produced by the famous Zico from BlockB. The song was made by Zico based on the letters Sejeong and her group member (from the girl group I.O.I), Chaeyon, wrote for their mothers. In the music video, you could only see the image of a mother as it represents Sejeong’s family background. Her parents were divorced when she was little and her mother raised both her and her brother alone. I felt as if she was speaking for me through this song. My parents got divorced when I was younger and I’ve been raised by my mother alone too which made me feel like she could relate how sorry I actually feel towards my mom. The song charted really well on Korean music sites and during the promotion of “Flower Road” she performed the song and ranked number 1 on Show Champion (a music show where they rank top 5 songs released during the month and award first place a trophy). As she was giving her speech, she started crying and thanked Zico, the fans, her staff, and company for giving her this amazing song and the chance to win. Lastly, she thanked her mother and grandfather and her eyes started to water even more as she mentioned them.

Seeing a very beautiful and strong woman openly talk about her family and her love for her mother makes me so happy. Her voice suited the song very well and when watching her live performance you can tell that she meant every word. Ever since that day, I viewed the song differently. It wasn’t just a typical ballad song about a breakup, it was a song about a mother’s love and her child promising a brighter future.

“여길 봐 예쁘게 피었으니까
바닥에 떨어지더라도
꽃길만 걷게 해줄게요”
(Look at me, I have bloomed prettily
Even if I fall to the ground
I will make you walk only on flower paths)

Works Cited:

Jacobryan. “Sejeong (세정) of Gugudan – Flower Road (꽃길) Âť Color Coded Lyrics.” Color Coded Lyrics, 25 Oct. 2017, colorcodedlyrics.com/2016/11/sejeong-flower-road.

“Sejeong’s ‘Flower Path’ Is a Much-Needed Healing Song This Season.” Seoulbeats, 30 July 2017, seoulbeats.com/2016/11/sejeongs-flower-path-is-a-much-needed-healing-song-this-season/.

Revision 1 Final Draft

Zevanya

Carrie Hall

English 1101

April 4, 2019

Too Cool for School

“ Hey! Can I copy your homework? I was really busy yesterday.”
Busy? But your Snapchat story says you were at the karaoke.

“ Why is our math teacher mad all the time? Does she know we all have a life?”
Why? Probably because 95 percent of the class never submits the homework.

“ I can’t believe I failed!”
Why is it hard to believe you failed when you put zero effort into studying and cheated off someone else?

Must be nice living under a three-story house with three maids and not worry about anything because mommy’s credit card got you covered. Honestly, why are you even in school? Why are you guys so proud of wearing branded clothing from head to toe when your parents were the ones who paid for it anyways. Instead of wasting time on trivial things like “should I buy Coach or Gucci”, start thinking about your future. Stop being spoiled teens that take education for granted because there are thousands of kids in Indonesia that are willing to die for one.

Before I moved to New York, I attended an international school in Indonesia. My school adopted Singapore’s education system and we also followed the Cambridge examinations curriculum. In this system, we were taught solely based on textbooks and worksheets. I don’t entirely agree with this method of teaching as it creates a closed discussion on other possible answers and theories. Nevertheless, the school was still known to excel students in academics and human skills. We were taught advanced mathematics, chemistry, biology, and physics during the eighth grade. Later on, during the ninth grade, we were split into two majors: business and science.

I admit that the school gave us a very narrow choice but regardless of which major we chose, all of us entered college with our own desired majors instead of just “business and science.” In fact, I was able to use my knowledge from my science classes into my hospitality courses. I was able to ace my college math class and understand some food science theories thanks to my biology class. My friend, Yolanda, experienced the same thing when she drifted to interior design in college. She was able to understand certain interior design concepts that were related to physics. Sometimes I look back and think to myself “what if our school had already planned everything? What if they knew that these two majors would be beneficial in any field the students go to?”

I can’t say this is or will be the same case for every student that goes to my school because it depends entirely on the student. I’ve had numerous classmates that couldn’t care less if they had to repeat the same grade because well, their parents could afford it. Seeing them waste not only their parents’ money but also their hard work really bothered me. Earning money isn’t easy regardless if your family owns their own company or manages their own business. It still takes hard work and dedication to keep the business alive. On the other hand, I can’t entirely blame the kids because their parents were the ones who raised them to become spoiled. They’ve always given their kids the easy way out and never taught them how harsh and competitive the real world is.

In Indonesia, numerous children around the age of five to thirteen are unable to receive an education. They had no choice but to help their parents earn money by selling water, tissues, and cigarettes. Also, you would find numerous kids on the streets in Jakarta playing the role as an unofficial parking ranger. Keep in mind that the government does not pay these kids, they receive their income from small tips from people riding cars, motorcycles or trucks. Around four years ago my mother’s company held a volunteer work trip. My mother asked around ten kids what their future goals were and every one of them replied the same, they all wanted to go to school, wear uniforms and learn something. In the article “Children at Work” by Sharon Bessel, a 14-year-old girl said, “my parents are dead, I have to support myself, how can I go to school when I must work?” This proves how even if these kids wanted to go to school they simply can’t. The article also mentioned that “factory children, usually girls aged between twelve and fourteen years, routinely work eight to fourteen hours a day, six days a week.” In other words, these children have no choice but to give up being a kid and start living as an adult. Do you guys know what it’s like? Of course not. The only struggle I’ve seen you guys had was choosing between iPhone X and iPhone 8.

It broke my heart to hear that these kids only wanted something so simple but was something most of us took for granted. Gatto states that “your children should have a more meaningful life, and they can.”(5) I am aware that not all schools are like my school and private schools are indeed not on the affordable side but I was able to have a more meaningful life because I actually learned. Not only did my school help students excel in academics, but they also promoted fund-raising events to help the less fortunate. We would visit orphanages and hold talent shows where the students themselves would put on small shows like singing or acting. We would also come to school earlier to make packaged meals for the kids and staff. It was also the school’s idea to chip in a few extra changes from our pocket money to donate for families living in the villages that needed assistance for giving their children a chance of receiving a proper education.

My classmates that were “too cool for school” never really participated in these events so they weren’t able to visually see what the less fortunate were going through. The teachers thought holding activities and events like this would open the students’ minds and for those who actually did participate, it built a whole new perspective for us. I matured sooner than most people my age, learned to appreciate more for what I have than what I don’t and applied what I learned in high school into college and the real world. I’m not asking you to change the world or donate all of your parents’ income to these kids but small things really do make a change. We live in a world where one way or another we depend on each other. We millennials blame Gen Y for passing down the chaos that we have to fix yet we’re doing the same to the generation after us. I’m not filthy rich but my school showed me how sharing my knowledge and wisdom helped these kids. It gave them hope.

The Jakarta Post Academia Opinion

Works Cited:

Gatto, John Taylor “Against School”

Bessel, Sharron. “Children at Work.” Inside Indonesia, www.insideindonesia.org/children-at-work.

REVISION 1 ESSAY

Revision 1 rough draft

Zevanya

Carrie Hall

English 1101

April 4, 2019

Too Cool for School

“ Hey! Can I copy your homework? I was really busy yesterday.”
Busy? But your Snapchat story says you were at the karaoke.
“ Why is our math teacher mad all the time? Does she know we all have a life?”
Why? Probably because 95 percent of the class never submits the homework.
“ I can’t believe I failed!”
Why is it hard to believe you failed when you put zero effort into studying and cheated off someone else?
Must be nice to have parents that can afford your tuition even when you have to repeat the same grade twice. Must be nice living under a three-story house with three maids and not worry about anything because mommy’s credit card got you covered. Honestly, why are you even in school? Why are you guys so proud of wearing branded clothing from head to toe when your parents were the ones who paid for it anyways. Instead of wasting time on trivial things like “should I buy Coach or Gucci”, start thinking about your future. Stop being spoiled teens that take education for granted because there are thousands of kids in Indonesia that are willing to die for one.

Before I moved to New York, I attended an international school in Indonesia. My school adopted Singapore’s education system and we also followed the Cambridge examinations curriculum. In this system, we were taught solely based on textbooks and worksheets. I don’t entirely agree with this method of teaching as it creates a closed discussion on other possible answers and theories. Nevertheless, the school was still known to excel students in academics and human skills. We were taught advanced mathematics, chemistry, biology, and physics during the eighth grade. Later on, during the ninth grade, we were split into two majors: business and science.

I admit that the school gave us a very narrow choice but regardless of which major we chose, all of us entered college with our own desired majors instead of just “business and science.” I chose the science major and ended up choosing hospitality management in college but that didn’t affect me negatively. In fact, I was able to use my knowledge from my science classes into my hospitality courses. It was mandatory for the science students to take advanced mathematics and thanks to my school I was able to understand and ace my college math class. Another example is my friend, Yolanda. She was in the same science major as me and drifted to interior design when she started college. Surprisingly, she said that she was able to understand certain concepts of interior design thanks to the physics class we took. Sometimes I look back and think to myself “what if our school had already planned everything? What if they knew that these two majors would be beneficial in any field the students go to?”

I can’t say this is and will be the same case for every student that went to my school because it depends entirely on the student. I’ve had a few classmates that couldn’t care less if they had to repeat the same grade because well, their parents could afford it. The way they spend their money has no correlation to me in any way but for some reason, it bothers me seeing them waste not only their parents’ money but also their hard work. Earning money isn’t easy regardless if your family owns their own company or manages their own business it still takes hard work and dedication to keep the business alive. On the other hand, I can’t entirely blame the kids because their parents were the ones who raised them to become spoiled. They’ve always given their kids the easy way out and never taught them how harsh and competitive the real world is.

In Indonesia, numerous children around the age of five to thirteen are unable to receive an education. They had no choice but to help their parents earn money by selling water, tissues, and cigarettes. Also, you would find numerous kids on the streets in Jakarta playing the role as an unofficial parking ranger. Keep in mind that the government does not pay these kids, they receive their income from small tips from people riding cars, motorcycles or trucks. Around four years ago my mother’s company held a volunteer work trip. My mother asked around ten kids what their future goals were and every one of them replied the same, they all wanted to go to school, wear uniforms and learn something.

It broke my heart to hear that these kids only wanted something so simple but was something most of us took for granted. Gatto states that “your children should have a more meaningful life, and they can.”(5) I am aware that not all schools are like my school and private schools are indeed not on the affordable side but I was able to have “a more meaningful life” because I actually learned. Not only did they help students excel in academics, but they also promoted fund-raising events to help the less fortunate. We would visit orphanages and hold talent shows where the students themselves would put on small shows like singing or acting. We would also come to school earlier to make packaged meals for the kids and staff. It was also the school’s idea to chip in a few extra changes from our pocket money to donate for families living in the villages that needed assistance for giving their children a chance of receiving a proper education.

My classmates that were “too cool for school” never really participated in these events so they weren’t able to visually see what the less fortunate were going through. The teachers thought holding activities and events like this would open the students’ minds and for those who actually did participate, it built a whole new perspective for us. I matured sooner than most people my age, learned to appreciate more for what I have than what I don’t and apply what I learned in high school into college and the real world.

Works Cited

Gatto, John Taylor “Against School”

Revision 1 Intro

“ Hey! Can I copy your homework? I was really busy yesterday.”
Busy? But your Snapchat story says you were at the karaoke.
“ Why is our math teacher mad all the time? Like does she know we all have a life and the amount of work she gives us is crazy”
Why? Probably because 95 percent of the class never submits the homework.
“ I can’t believe I failed!”
Why is it hard to believe you failed when you put zero effort into studying and cheated off someone else?
I’ve always wondered what was going through their mind when they rant about how the school is pointless and teachers suck. Must be nice to have parents that can afford your tuition even when you have to repeat the same grade twice. Must be nice living under a three-story house with three maids and not worry because mommy’s credit card got you covered. Honestly, why are you even in school? All you guys do is eat, sleep, be obnoxiously loud and skip classes. Stop being spoiled teens that take education for granted because there are thousands of kids in the world that are willing to die for one. Instead of blaming the system and teachers, take a good look and ask yourself “have I been learning anything?”