- Opener- uses a quote and uses an article as the source
- Thesis is stated clearly and sub topics and they are clear and capturing
- All paragraphs have sub topics in it. I like the format of the essay, but why give all 3 sub-topics in a row and then added the sub-sub topic in the end?
- Transitional phrases are in every paragraph except on the 3rd paragraph, making the research even more powerful.
- References are in every paragraph and are clear and in MLA form
- Grammar just needs a few adjustments to it. She uses “so” as the beginning of the sentence. Its like using “and” or “but” for starting a sentence.
- She had a strong conclusion, but went over the ‘4 page’ limit by a little.
Overall, I’ve enjoyed reading this research essay.
