ENG 1141: Intro to Creative Writing, Fall 2020

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    Jennifer Sears
    Participant

    Use the instructions on the To-Do List for Tuesday Sept. 8 on our site.
    Your poem should be eight lines long.
    Please identify the original poem that you used to “find” your poem.
    See the instructions in today’s Presentation Video.

    #67523

    DanelCabrera2
    Participant

    TEARS, from Health (Max Payne 3 soundtrack)

    (Original lyrics)

    Trust us now
    It’s time to let me go
    Give up on us
    Follow what you want
    Trust us now
    It’s time to let me go
    Give up
    Give us over

    (Original Lyrics with my own find poem)

    Trust us now

    -Are you listening?

    It’s time to let me go

    -Why are you following this path?

    Give up on us

    -Why can’t you move on?

    Follow what you want

    -Just live your life

    Trust us now

    -It’s what we would’ve wanted

    It’s time to let me go

    -It’s not your fault

    Give up

    -So please

    Give us over

    -Just stop.

    (My “found” poem) – For Us.

    Are you listening?
    Why are you following this path?
    Why can’t you move on?
    Just live your life
    It’s what we would’ve wanted
    It’s not your fault
    So please
    Just stop.

    #67525

    Lina
    Participant

    (My New Found Poem) – Breaking Free
    For the same reason, the moon never disappears

    Its as if I feel everyone staring at me watching my every move

    That meaning of anxiety that I struggle from day by day

    But I rather run away from this feeling

    I would have never imagined this would be a struggle to fight within the near future

    Some told me that everything would be okay

    Constantly finding solutions to my madness

    Now I am starting to see a side of myself that I thought I would never see and for that I am hopeful

    Original Song With My Poem- (They Long To Be) Close To You By -The Carpenters
    Why do stars fall down from the sky
    -For the same reason, the moon never disappears

    Every time you walk by
    -Its as if I feel everyone staring at me watching my every move

    Just like me, they long to be
    -That meaning of anxiety that I struggle from day by day

    Close to you
    -But I rather run away from this feeling

    One the day that you were born
    -I would have never imagined this would be a struggle to fight within the near future

    The angels got together
    -Some told me that everything would be okay

    And decided to create a dream come true
    -Constantly finding solutions to my madness

    So they sprinkled moon dust in your hair
    -Now I am starting to see a side of myself that I thought I would never see and for that I am hopeful

    Original Song (They Long To Be) Close To you
    Why do stars fall down from the sky

    Every time you walk by

    Just like me, they long to be

    Close to you

    One the day that you were born

    The angels got together

    And decided to create a dream come true

    So they sprinkled moon dust in your hair

    #67565

    Dahyanerra
    Participant

    (Don’t go back to sleep) – Rumi

    ORIGINAL POEM:
    The breeze at dawn has secrets to tell you
    Don’t go back to sleep
    you must ask for what you really want
    Don’t go back to sleep
    people are going back and forth across the doorsill where the two worlds touch
    The door is round and open
    Don’t go back to sleep

    ORIGINAL POEM WITH MY OWN FIND POEM:
    The breeze at dawn has secrets to tell you
    – Tell me, for I have been waiting and watching
    Don’t go back to sleep
    -Now is the time for me to hear and to see
    You must ask for what you really want
    – I want to be saved
    Don’t go back to sleep
    – If I sleep, I will be forever lost in the deep
    People are going back and forth across the doorsill where the two worlds touch
    – Make your decision now before it is too late!
    The door is round and open
    – I see the light, now I’m certain
    Don’t go back to sleep
    – How can I, When I have found peace!

    #67570

    Andy Escobedo
    Participant

    Large Cities -Sudie Nostrand
    ORIGINAL POEM:
    In Large Cities
    It’s hard to see stars.

    A fountain spreads
    like a white flower

    around us.
    above the shifting traffic

    illuminated doorways
    there are stars

    ORIGINAL POEM WITH MY OWN FIND POEM:
    In Large Cities
    -In a place where the buildings are touching the sky
    It’s hard to see stars.
    -a far distance, the faint stars are lost
    A fountain spreads
    -the sound of water is heard
    like a white flower
    -Trickling down like the cold snowy days

    around us.
    -near to what is close to the discovery
    above the shifting traffic
    -up above the roaring vehicles

    illuminated doorways
    -a light is spotted
    there are stars
    -soon to find a family of stars winking back upon the cities

    FIND POEM
    in a place where the buildings are touching the sky
    a far distance, the faint stars are lost

    the sound of water is heard
    Trickling down like the cold snowy days

    near to what is close to the discovery
    up above the roaring vehicles

    a light is spotted
    soon to find a family of stars winking back upon the cities

    #67572

    Hernan Marquez
    Participant

    Collide by Howdy Day
    (Original lyrics)

    Im open, you’re closed
    where I follow you’ll go
    I worry I won’t see your face
    light up again
    Even the best fall down sometimes
    Even the wrong words seem to rhyme
    Out of the doubt that fills my mind
    I somehow find, you and I collide

    (Original Lyrics with my own find poem)
    Im open, you’re closed
    -Insecure about opening up
    where I follow you’ll go
    -I don’t know what path to take
    I worry I won’t see your face
    -this may be the last time
    light up again
    -there isn’t a spark anymore
    Even the best fall down sometimes
    -it all comes down to an end
    Even the wrong words seem to rhyme
    -sometimes it turns out to be okay
    Out of the doubt that fills my mind
    -there is no need to overthink
    I somehow find, you and I collide
    -for we may still find a connection

    #67577

    Elizabeth Mathews
    Participant

    Grieving (feat. James Blake) by Kehlani

    Asking for space, I’d give my leg for it
    I’ve reached a point, it’s like I beg for it
    I give my seat and tears, damn, I bled for it
    No one would bet that you would lose me like that
    No one would guess I had the strength to fall back
    Now all I want is peace and quiet
    For Piece of mind, yeah
    Need some time yeah, yeah

    My “Found” Poem

    I’m in such need for space, I’ll do anything for it
    I’m reaching my breaking point and I’m begging that you give me what I need
    I’ve given you everything I can give
    No one thought this would happen
    Or that I would be strong enough for this
    All I want now is peace
    I need to get myself and my thoughts together
    I need time alone to grieve.

    #67579

    Oscar Ramirez
    Participant

    Song: Crown The Empire – Millennia (Acoustic)

    Original lyrics:
    I’ve been gone from this world for what seems like millennia,
    Looking for nothing short of a miracle.
    I only ever wanted to come home.
    Please won’t you let me go?
    When I have nowhere left I can run away
    Will you lie to me, tell me I’ll be okay?
    Close my eyes and lay me in my tomb.
    Then pull the trigger and send me home.

    Original lyrics with my own poem:
    I’ve been gone from this world for what seems like millennia,
    -The days seem to fuse and feel bleak.
    Looking for nothing short of a miracle.
    -Will we ever find a cure?
    I only ever wanted to come home.
    -Staying home has become my vice.
    Please won’t you let me go?
    -Being home I can no longer endure.
    When I have nowhere left I can run away
    -The world blocks off and becomes strict.
    Will you lie to me, tell me I’ll be okay?
    -Wondering what comes next is harder to predict.
    Close my eyes and lay me in my tomb.
    -Just give us any ounce of hope.
    Then pull the trigger and send me home.
    -Anything to help us cope.

    My Found Poem:
    The days seem to fuse and feel bleak.
    Will we ever find a cure?
    Staying home has become my vice.
    Being home I can no longer endure.
    The world blocks off and becomes strict.
    Wondering what comes next is harder to predict.
    Just give us any ounce of hope.
    Anything to help us cope.

    #67583

    Ray-Ana W.
    Participant

    My Version

    During the hard times, the burden you carry can be hard
    It is such a heavy burden for one person alone
    That when it is gone you can’t feel the difference
    When it’s gone you don’t even know what to do with yourself
    After all, the burdens are gone and your load is lifted

    As you start to realize the burden is gone
    All the trials and tribulations are coming to an end
    And then you meet the last threshold
    Stay strong and keep your head up
    When you think you can’t go on any long
    Remember that it is only temporary
    And the good times were about a footstep away

    Rainbow(ORIGINAL)
    By: Kacey Musgraves

    When it rains, it pours
    But you didn’t even notice
    It ain’t rainin’ anymore
    It’s hard to breathe when all you know is
    The struggle of stayin’ above the risin’ water line

    Well, the sky has finally opened
    The rain and wind stopped blowin’
    But you’re stuck out in the same ol’ storm again
    You hold tight to your umbrella
    Well, darlin’, I’m just tryin’ to tell ya
    That there’s always been a rainbow
    Hangin’ over your head

    #67584

    Steven Bachoo
    Participant

    Phil Collins – You’ll be in my heart

    Original lyrics:
    When destiny calls you, you must be strong
    I may not be with you, but you’ve got to hold on.
    They’ll see in time
    I know
    We’ll show them together
    Cause you’ll be in my heart
    Believe me you’ll be in my heart
    (I’ll be there) from this day on

    My Found Poem:
    You have to fight and don’t give up on anything.
    Don’t ever give up and keep trying to go
    You will see and always keep going
    You know you can do it
    We’re in this together and we will win
    You are always in my heart
    Don’t ever forget that we’re always a team
    I will always be there forever

    #67588

    Alex Cheung
    Participant

    All Star – Smash Mouth

    Somebody once told me the world is gonna roll me
    I ain’t the sharpest tool in the shed
    She was looking kind of dumb with her finger and her thumb
    In the shape of an “L” on her forehead
    Well, the years start coming and they don’t stop coming
    Fed to the rules and I hit the ground running
    Didn’t make sense not to live for fun
    Your brain gets smart but your head gets dumb

    My “found” Poem

    – The world plays trick on you.
    – I’m not that smartest one here.
    – What’s that on your forehead?
    – Oh, you’re a loser.
    – Years go by fast.
    – Tired of the rules so I’m gonna avoid them.
    – What is life if it’s not fun?
    – You get smarter but you also get dull.

    #67595

    Jason Liu
    Participant

    Juice WLRD & Marshmello – Come & Go

    I try to be everything that I can
    -Everyday is a day I try to improve
    But sometimes, I come out as bein’ nothin’
    -It never works out as planned
    I try to be everything that I can
    -Failure is a sign to move
    But sometimes, I come out as bein’ nothin’
    -Onto the steps of success
    I pray to God that he make me a better man
    -Today I won’t be a perfect version of myself
    Maybe one day, I’ma stand for somethin’
    -I’ll put yesterday behind on the shelf
    I’m thankin’ God that he made you part of the plan
    -The future holds something valuable that I don’t know
    I guess I ain’t go through all that Hell for nothin’
    -And for that reason alone, I will continue to grow

    My Found Poem
    Everyday is a day I try to improve
    It never works out as planned
    Failure is a sign to move
    Onto the steps of success
    Today I won’t be a perfect version of myself
    I’ll put yesterday behind on the shelf
    The future holds something valuable that I don’t know
    And for that reason alone, I will continue to grow

    #67596

    RonaldF
    Participant

    Bad Day by Daniel Powter (Original lyrics)

    You had a bad day
    You’re taking one down
    You sing a sad song just to turn it around
    You say you don’t know
    You tell me, “don’t lie”
    You work at a smile, and you go for a ride
    You had a bad day
    The camera don’t lie

    (Original lyrics with my own poem)

    You had a bad day
    -A bad day does not last forever
    You’re taking one down
    -How many more?
    You sing a sad song just to turn it around
    -Always trust the process
    You say you don’t know
    -Never forget the reason why you started
    You tell me, “don’t lie”
    -Do you think you are alone?
    You work at a smile, and you go for a ride
    -You must keep going
    You had a bad day
    -A bad day that is about to end
    The camera don’t lie
    -Never run away

    My Found Poem:
    Enjoy the Journey

    A bad day does not last forever
    How many more?
    Always trust the process
    Never forget the reason why you started
    Do you think that you are alone?
    You must keep going
    A bad day that is about to end
    Never run away

    #67597

    Jing
    Participant

    Pray For Me – The Weeknd, Kendrick Lamar

    I’m always ready for a war again
    Go down that road again
    It’s all the same
    I’m always ready to take a life again
    Who gon’ pray for me?
    Take my pain for me?
    Save my soul for me?
    ‘Cause I’m alone, you see

    My poem

    My gun is reloaded
    I’m waiting for the old enemy to come back
    I’m well prepared all the time
    I’m not afraid of failures
    Don’t need anyone to pray for me,
    because no one knows the pain of me
    My soul is like a broken mirror,
    but I can see the victory reflected on all the pieces

    #67599

    Orion McCaine
    Participant

    Notorious BIG, Juicy

    Super Nintendo, Sega Genesis,
    When I was dead broke, man, I couldn’t picture this.
    50-inch screen, money-green leather sofa,
    Got two rides, a limousine with a chauffeur.
    Phone bill about 2 G’s flat,
    No need to worry, my accountant handles that.
    And my whole crew is lounging,
    Celebratin’ every day no more public housing.

    My Found Poem

    I was lucky to have just one.
    It’s hard to imagine what you can’t have,
    Such a great feeling when you can afford the nicer things.
    Why stop at two when you can get three?
    It’s nothing if you’ve got the means.
    What’s 2 grand?
    You don’t have to worry anymore.
    You finally made it out.

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