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Personal Narrative Essay - 7 Points of Peer Review

English Chrystal Slowley February 18, 2015 Peer Review Questions   !. The opener had a s few grammatical errors. I could understand what was trying to be said, but it wasn't concisely said as it could have been. 2. It wasn't clear to me what the thesis statement was; there was a lot of repetition, but no specified point. 3. There didn't seem to be clear body paragraphs, as in standard paragraph form. 4. There weren't enough transition words used in the body paragraphs that would cause  the story to flow. 5. Language was a struggle for me. 6. Paragraph 4: "I migrated to America for a better future, but it seemed as if I was thrown into another struggle." Expand on the struggles you had with your dialect and the American English. Did you feel more prepared with the education you got from Trinidad? Underline your title. Don't put it in question format. 7. Explain  some of the good things that came out of you migrating; what struggles have you overcome?