English 1101 Fall 2019 Section 413
Composition 1
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Jahim, I thought your essay and I definitely get the idea that you were going for. I can relate on how moving to a new place can be a bit difficult to adapt. all in all, the story was great but beware of the grammatical mistakes.
Jahim, the order and structure of your essay is amazing. I love how you did not miss a point or get lost in the story but go in such neat order, however, revise for grammar mistakes.
This must’ve been a very hard obstacle you had to overcome and I’m glad you got through this, also this was very pleasing the eye to look at also.Very organized.I think you could also include what went through your head that time ,whether you thought about just giving up or not.
I definitely get the direction you want to go in. I think you should go over the grammatical mistakes more and also you should be more descriptive. Loved the idea though.
Jahim, your essay was heartbreaking to read. It must’ve been a very hard time for you but, I am glad you recovered from Gullian-barre. Nice essay, Just revise it more, proof read and fix grammatical errors. Good Job!
I enjoyed your writing because i could relate to your story as a immigrant my self my parent made me memorize words and multiplication table too.One suggestion would be Grammar problem.
I like the idea you were going for. I can also relate to moving to a new place and having to adjust. The only thing I would really change are some of the grammatical errors you have
The structure you give in the essay it was good. You have some grammatical mistakes jest fix those.
Jahim I like the structure of your essay and how detailed it was. And I enjoyed your essay because I can relate to it. Nice work.
Jahim your story is well put together and very inspiring, but maybe you can be a little more clear with what the educational experience was.
I enjoyed your story many can relate when it comes to moving to a different place, that just makes it hard to learn new things because everything is different and strange to you, just fix a very few grammar mistakes you have
i can see where your coming from with everything bro i feel you its not always easy.watch out for grammatical issues though