English 1101 Fall 2019 Section 413
Composition 1
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I love the lessons learned in your story and how you told it, although you have minor grammar mistakes with the capitalization of the letter “I” , and essay structure but overall great story.
I think your example was good, Your work displays The Reality of Peer Pressure I like your introduction and how you had joined so many clubs that impressed me, a suggestion would be there past tense problem and some word aren’t needed, Consider changing disappointed with my mother to disappointed my mother.
I think your example was good, Your work displays The Reality of Peer Pressure I like your introduction and how you had joined so many clubs that impressed me, a suggestion would be there past tense problem and some word aren’t needed, Consider changing disappointed with my mother to disappointed my mother.
I think your example was good, Your work displays The Reality of Peer Pressure I like your introduction and how you had joined so many clubs that impressed me, a suggestion would be there past tense problem and some word aren’t needed, Consider changing disappointed with my mother to disappointed my mother.
I think your example was good, Your work displays The Reality of Peer Pressure I like your introduction and how you had joined so many clubs that impressed me, a suggestion would be there past tense problem and some word aren’t needed, Consider changing disappointed with my mother to disappointed my mother.
Hey Dagianny, I thought your essay was really nice and I understand how it might have felt when things changed without you really noticing. I don’t have any issues with your essay, I thought it was great.
This was very interesting to read because my highschool experience was so much different from what you described.Going to parties was the least of everyones worries in my highschool year. It would be great if you could include where your highschool was located and how transportation was (I don’t know if this affected how you got home from parties and if it was dangerous at night going home,I’d like more details about stuff like that).
Everything is clear in your essay. I like the part where you talk about fun fact about high school. Your essay was reminding me my high school days.
Your essay was the outlook of how I wished my high school experience was so I gladly enjoyed reading it. There are a few minor grammatical errors but overall great details and loved the learning experience.
I like your story because it’s so relatable for a lot of people. We all know a person, or we are the person, that has been distracted from school by parties. It doesn’t necessarily even have to be parties, but you get the idea. Great lesson.
Really loved and enjoyed the essay. You really gave us readers a real image/picture on what peer pressure is actually like. Grammar could’ve improved a little more but besides that great work you displayed.
Dagianny, reading your educational experience was very much enjoyable. Your story and experience shows just how different everyone’s high school experience are. Great lesson learned. proof read your work and fix grammatical errors.
Thank you for sharing this. I can see a lot of high school students relating to it. I’ll just say look over the grammar a little bit.
I like your story a lot i feel like many many people can actually relate to this, a lot of people get caught up in partying and they forget what their priority should actually be, its good you realized before hand and didnt go down that path, still finished hs. Your story was very enjoyable due to the fact that many many can relate to this, ive seen it happen a lot
really enjoyed reading your essay i think you were well detailed and specific about how you changed as time passed. god job