Marijo Alves

November 27.2014

Peer Review: Amera Etsyyim

Opener: “Modesty is so beautiful.”  (Strong Opener the reader is going to want to know why.

Thesis: Women who cover themselves should be treated equally to women who do not wear it, as well as knowing the beauty behind hijab, along with its purpose, also knowing why Islam is the fasting growing religion in the world.

Sun topics: 1) Women who cover themselves should be treated equally to other women that don’t wear hijab. They shouldn’t be judged, because they have the right to cover their hair. It’s a sign of modesty. They aren’t bothering anyone or hurting them. It’s also a great thing to signify who Muslim women are.

1. The hijab was worn thousands of years ago. It isn’t something new. It was generally the examples of Lady Fatima, and Lady Zainab (peace be upon them), but the first was Mary.
2.  Islam is the top fasting growing religion in the world. Everything that is written in the Quran makes sense, and it has a purpose to it. It’s not to humiliate women and not give them any rights as the media says, it’s the total opposite. The Quran has given freedom to women centuries ago. It gives women many rights, it protects women, also guiding them to life.

Do they have sub-sub topics how is it structured? YES

Transition: Also, because,

Quotations:  1)   “And say to the believing women that they should lower their gaze and guard their modesty, that they should not show their beauty and ornaments except what must ordinarily appear thereof; that they should draw their veils over their bosoms and not display their beauty.”  (24:31) this is enough evidence for Muslims to follow this obligation and wear the hijab.

• “The Hijab is a source of protection, it’s the ultimate preserver of dignity, and it literally forces people to judge us by our personality, character, and talent. (www.islamicinsights.com).

 

 

 

 

 

 

Society ruins relationships

1. Society shows and boost about how women should look, flat stomach,  nice butt,big hips, perky lips therefore women are not being loved for them they are trying to be something they’re not and if they don’t loom a certain way they get lack of attention from their men and another woman who does look that way will get her attention.
2. With the modern technology society makes it seem so cool on having nobody is paying each other any mind let alone communicating
3. Social media without social media you miss out a huge part of life only because society put nothing but life on the social media no people can find it easier to cheat and hide things from each other.
4. NO ONE REALLY CARES DEARLY ABOUT ANYONE THESE DAYS IT’S MORE OF WHAT YOU HAVE CARS MONEY ETC. SOCIETY MAKE SURE TO SHOW ON BILLBOARDS AND TELEVISION AND IN MUSIC VIDEOS ALL THE COOL CARS ANSWER WHAT CAN BE DONE WITH IT BUT NOBODY SHOWS THE GAS MONEY THAT HAS TO BE PAID EVERY COUPLE OF MILES OF THE AMOUNT OF MONEY IT IS TO KEEP AND MAINTAIN A CAR
5. SOCIETY MAKES IT SEEM OKAY TO HAVE MULTIPLE WOMEN IT’S SHOWS ON THE SINGERS AND RAPPERS THAT’S WHO PEOPLE LOOK UP TO THE MOST WHAT THEY DO EVERYONE FOLLOWS SOCIETY BOAST ABOUT THEIR PERFECT LIVES SO MUCH THAT EVERYONE WANTS THAT LIFE

6.IN THIS WORLD MONEY IS A HUGE FACTOR OF LIFE YOU NEED ENOUGH OF IT TO HAVE WHAT YOU NEED AND hi THAN ENOUGH TO HAVE WHAT YOU WANT FAMILIES GET DESTROYED BECAUSE THEY DON’T THINK THEY HAVE ENOUGH FOR WHAT THEY NEED THERE COMES CHEATING OR ABUSE OR EVEN MISERY

7.SOCIETY SHOWS THE WORLD ALL OF THESE RAPPERS ACTRESSES AND ACTORS AND SINGERS ENTERTAINERS AND ALL THEY ENTERTAIN IS SEX SO CHILDREN THINK SEX IS COOL MEN AND WOMEN DO IT FOR FUN NO ONE IS THINKING ABOUT THEIR FAMILY CHILDREN OR EVEN YOUR SISTERS BOYFRIEND (MAURY JERRY SPRINGER ) ALL THESE SHOWS ARE WHAT PEOPLE FIND ENTERTAINING AND FUN

8. NO ONE CAN TRUST TRUST BECOMES BROKEN

9 SOCIETY GIVES THERAPY AND ALL THESE COUNSELING BECAUSE THEY KNOW WHAT THEY ADVERTISE RUINS RELATIONSHIPS Period