Final Portfolio

Unit one: E + R = O ?

 

Twenty percent of our population are students but they makeup hundred percent of our future. A teacher is the first person we encounter as students other than parents. We spend more than forty hours a week with teachers. So yes, it’s important what teachers think about us and what relationship we have or try to develop with them. I was blessed to build a great friendship with staff that can help me through a crazy roller coaster named high school. Mrs. Guash and Mr. Ghie was dean and guidance counselor in my high school. They were my school parents. I could always keep it a buck fifty with them and always had lots of respect for them. They both understood my story as a student and my behavior problem. They introduce to equation that I didn’t believe was helpful until this very moment. E+R=O simple solution to all my problems and the key to my stress free day. 

 I struggled in history for many reasons it probably was that fact I had class the second to last period of my school day I was always tired. I was in class full kids that can care less about this class. Had a teacher that made the subject boring not interesting. Pretty much the odds were against me. I felt Mr. Bux wasn’t the greatest teachers. He found time to waste during class to check other students behavior Venus from checking them after class or letting their grade suffer. We only had 45 minutes per period we never as a class got alot done because of other students taking advantage of the teacher. He was one of those teachers that had to stop the whole class to check one student and their behavior. I mean how annoying is that when you are half tired and just want to go home. Which out of 45 minutes it takes 10 minutes for everyone to come in calm down it takes 5 minutes just for him to finish correcting students. Leave us with not a lot of time to learn new materials or even review older ones for quizzes and exams. I was always lost in class, when I told him he tries to accuse me of talking to peers about things off topic is the reason why “ i’m having trouble” which was far from the truth because I didn’t like anyone in class so why talk to them ? Mr.Buxs and I always bumped heads in class.

This day I went to U.S History class Mr.Buxs assigns a group project gives a due date that is different from whats on pupil path. So I tell Mr. Bux “you do know that there is different due date on pupilpath then what you verbal said to the class” so he looks on pupilpath and it turns out I was correct.  Instead of apologizing for it saying its an error and warning other kids. Mr. Buxs tells me “there is no reason why I need to act so cocky and arrogant“ at this moment every student heard exactly what he said. I was put on the spot in front of the whole class embarrassed is an understatement in this case.  So I told him “ who the f**k are you talking to and how am I cocky and arrogant for helping you out.” 

  “ Amaya, I’m tired of you and your outburst during class, you are distracting the whole class from learning you need to learn to have self control, if you don’t stop im calling your mom and i’m calling school safety escort you out of my class” Mr. Bux  says I reply back “what are talking about I don’t care if you call my mom im not waiting for you try to make an example out of me which is unfair.” He calls safety so they can come I told him” I’m not leaving class because today you acting like a complete d**k, just because you had a shitty day doesn’t mean you make mine one too.” When I look up at the door two safety agents and Mr. Ghie was there. It was a sense of relief because finally someone can witness this dumb stuff and not think Im making it up. He tells me “Amaya come to my office your not in any trouble we need to have a little conversation so bring your belongs please come with me.” I didn’t fight or argue with Ghie even though I was a tiny bit disappointed that Ghie didn’t put him in his place. But nevertheless I still just got up went with him the whole elevator ride down to his office I was so mad and frustrated. At myself mostly because I let him get underneath my skin, that made me so angry I missed out on my purpose for being in school which is to be present for the review. Instead I’m on a one way ticket heading to the dean’s office because of him.

  Ghie brings me into Mrs Guash office we both sit at a round table in her office. I gave them a play by play on what happened. Both of them started laughing because they knew earlier that day before I went to class I was not interested in going at all. I felt his vibe would be bad, I wasn’t there for the shenanigans he got going on because he couldn’t find a park that morning so the fact that not even 15 minutes and yes 15 minutes after the late bell rings . I’m back in her office yelling “Guacamole this teacher picked the wrong one, on the wrong day to f**K with me”  had the whole office laughing. 

  Now remember that simple equation I brought up in begin watch how this dramatically changed my life. Mrs Guash looks at me and see the anger underneath the humor I had about the situation. I got so angry that I started to cry. So she asked me what is your goal when you walk in that class I said “prepare for the regents “ do you think want just happen in class helped or harmed you and your goal I said to her “no it harmed my goal. ” She then tells me teachers have upper hand of students because they are responsible for your grades. Teachers are human and make many mistakes, they are normally out number in classroom so when you call him out after his bad day of trying to find a park. You my darling is the straw that breaks the camel’s back, this doesn’t make it right . this isn’t even the time to try to argue with him since it is the last week of the marking period she follows up with another question “but you only have control of who?”  I said “ myself “ so in the event you want a positive outcome your response has to be positive right ? I agreed so do you believe in this event your response was positive or negative I said while rolling my eyes “it was obviously negative” Ghie jump in like its a teachable moment and says E+R=O. Event plus response equal outcome. So next time you are put in this situation think about your outcome, you can’t control event but you can change your response so you can get the right results and outcome you want. 

 Little light bulb went off in my head and it explains a lot of the disconnect from other teachers. So that point on I made a mental note sometimes not saying anything can make you win in the event you need to respond. To wait process information on event you are not in any hurry to make a choice, weigh out your option if you pick one option over the other what is your result ? And how is it different ? Is this the result you are trying to achieve if not what are you trying to do to change your results. At that very second everything made more sense than before, I left her office with a better understanding of everything. So after that day, I promise I won’t let another teacher get up under my skin. I’m in control of my education and my life I won’t let the event control me to the point I lose focus of my goal. Since that point I never argue with any teacher when it happens I just listen, wait after class to respond. So no one is pressure to act a certain way it has worked for a while, I pass it to all my friends when I have advice to give, because it has helped me so much on my daily interacting with other people but more so teachers. 

 

         Unit 2: Curiosity Report Final Revision 

 

Let’s take a moment to talk about something that nobody really wants to talk about domestic violence. This topic is one of many that can be viewed from a one-sided lense like women are the only ones that get abused in relationships or there is no such thing as same sex relationship to abusives which is totally not true and completely bias.  Normally you hear the same version of the same arguments why is bad ? what can we do to stop it ? I’m pretty sure there are many alternatives answers to these common questions asked about domestic violence. Instead I’m going to ask the question that nobody really wants to ask or even thought of. Why is it so hard for victims to leave their abusive relationships ? Ha, I’m pretty sure you don’t have the answer do you? It’s not a yes or no question so I bet you didn’t even think that far ahead right, I didn’t think so but that’s fine I will help you get educated so you can spread the word and  knowledge that you and I are curious on this report why is so hard for victims to leave their abusive relationship?

 

Sources 1: National Domestic Violence Hotline

 

People believe that abusers have a type but that’s incorrect also they don’t normally see color or race. What they do pay attention to is your confidence as a person and your vulnerability. Why you ask ? because when a victim is in relationship with abuser normally the abuser believe their superior demand respect from the victim. My source the National Domestic Violence Hotline describe the abuser tactics as a wheel of power and control. The abuser at one point or another uses one or all of the points on this wheel. But before we get into that we need to be on the same page about what is domestic violence is before we can go any further. Domestic violence is a pattern of behavior used by one partner to maintain power control over another partner in an intimate relationship (national domestic violence hotline:whats is domestic violence?/Is this abuse ?). Abuser uses the power and control to intimidate victims to make them feel less than, inferior by abusing their partners. There are many types of abuse, some are more common than other like  physical abuse, emotional abuse which are all forms that we see on tv at one point or another. People are aware of what physical abuse is choking, hitting, slapping, pinning down, pushing. Emotional abuse another common one but a little bit harder to pick up on as an outsider emotional abuse consist of putting down someone, name calling ,isolation These are just the common one, they’re still a lot that people aren’t so familiar to that fall out of the usual ones. That’s mainly because you don’t see them unless you are behind closed doors with the couple.Reproductive abuse, this sounds exactly what it is controlling a person when they can or can’t get pregnant by controlling their birth control, purposely breaking the condom forcing them to have a baby. Financial abuse another type of abuse that you won’t see so often this also consist of forbidding you to work, maxing credit cards in your name without your knowledge or permission and many more If you ask me this makes it extremely difficult for someone to escape under these circumstances. Victim already have a hard time leaving due to the fact their extremely scared of their partner or In denial of the fact their in an abusive relationship. Controlling the people their  around or money flowing in the house so I won’t be able to get the help I need and be afraid to ask for help.

 

Now is it credible you ask ? Yes they’re National Domestic Violence Hotline is secondary sources they use people’s real life situations to come up with their facts by comparing and contrasting different victims stories support them with many examples. This sources help all readers see the warning signs in an abuse relationship. They aren’t one sided because they make sure to put the option of pronouns like he /she or him/her. They sometimes eliminate that option all together and only address them as victim and abuser being sensitive to all people, their identity by staying neutral unbiased as possible.  This source also answer my question by explaining to me all elements of abuse and supports the claim of victim normally have a hard time leaving due to the fact their extremely scared of their partner or In denial of the fact their in an abusive relationship too afraid to ask for help.

 

Sources 2:  There A Stranger In My House By Tamia 

 

In the song “ There A Stranger In My House ”  songwriter Tamia sings about how she unaware of this new person that’s in her home,  It’s her husband she was talking about. She refers to him as a stranger because he wasn’t acting like himself loving, caring, supportive instead he is being sneaky, jealous, argumentative . In the lyrics of her song the chorus  states “ Cause he wouldn’t touch me like that, and wouldn’t treat me like you do, He would adore me, he wouldn’t ignore me , So I’m convinced there’s a stranger in my house “ ( There’s a Stranger in My House songwriter Tamia ) which leaves a lot of gateway space to take prior research, apply to my other source to this situation. Reading in between the lines of metaphors, Tamia paints a beautiful but yet sad picture for her listeners in her song. Her husband being a stranger to her, it’s someone she does not recognize at all because he isn’t acting like himself ignoring her,  blaming her for his cheating even hitting her which are all signs of abuse. But for her as his wife that’s out of his element in her eyes. She in denial of the fact her husband is basically abusing her. But Tamia also has a conflicting conversation with herself, she tries to remind/convince herself asking is that my husband doing? must be someone else. But in fact it is her husband she as stated “ I’m checking your clothes And you wear the same size shoe You sleep in his spot And you’re driving his car” (There’s a Stranger in My House songwriter Tamia) she is completely aware of that’s her husband but isn’t himself because he is building behaviors as an abuser 

 This relates to my question because it shows the mindset of the victim and leaves possibility of why a victim wouldn’t want to leave or struggle to leave because she believes he will change his emotions and actions as a husband but doesn’t. Or the fact that is my husband and I need to stay,  I have to stay to fix him because that is my husband. This source I believe is credible because she is talking about an event that happened to her in the past this is basically coming straight from the horse’s mouth. who lie about such a thing. Tamia does have a direct audience and point of view and she speaking to all the ladies in the house trying to connect with them through poetry.  Some say she being bias but I think she states her opinion on it and supports it with experience which I believe very true and raw and credible 

 

Sources 3: Instagram post from Theshaderoom evelynlozada

Many victims struggle with removing themselves from this toxic relationship because they don’t have support from others about further steps they should take to remove themselves from the problem. Victim normally go through many conflicting thoughts when coming forward. Victim blaming can be one of the reasons why victims have a hard time leaving their relationship. According to victim reality TV star Basketball Wives Evelyn Lozada posted on instagram clapping back to people that had an opinion on her domestic violence case against former football player and ex husband Chad Ochocinco. Who after 45 days of tying the knot with Lozada get into a heated argument with former husband Ochocinco. Ocho Head bumping in her face leaving with a huge busted forehead and nose. That marriage came to a halting stop after this incident. After referring to herself as a survivor and not a victim Lozada believe that victim blaming makes it hard for them to step forward.  As stated in her post “ victim blaming culture discourages domestic violence victim from coming forward. The fear of being judged and shamed is enough to make anyone stay quiet and suffer in silence” (Theshaderoom:evelynlozada) which makes it harder for them to leave their spouse. Lozada also believe when victim build up enough courage to “speak their truth”(theshaderoom:evelynlozada) many people don’t believe them don’t support them on the fact that they spoke up especially if abuser has higher social media following people believe the victim are clout chasing. People had reason to believe Lozada was doing it for notoriety and this was just another relationship that went flop. Which is pretty cruel if you ask me what happen to innocent until proven guilty that doesn’t just work inside the courtroom it should be applied everywhere. Then wonders why victims don’t come forward, who wants to be told their truth is a lie? . 

Now due to where I got my source from many may say its not credible because anyone can post on instagram and that’s correct anyone can post on this social media but truthful I believe depend the story how many elements are supported by true facts. Instagram can be credible, its credibility shouldn’t be questioned due to where it came from as far as the app but more about who said it, who would believe someone that has the scars to prove it. walk with them everywhere she goes, she has insight on something she lived through and choose to speak up and not stay silence  

 

Sources 4: Legal Articles Domestic Violence Spousal abuse charges/ Francine Hughes Killed Her Abusive Husband—And Changed U.S. Views on Domestic Violence.

So let’s play a game of what if,  so say one day a victim comes forward and tells their side story of the abuse they have been going through with his or her spouse to the police. Now they want to start a case against abuser, There are many different penalties of domestic violence offenses it all depends all on evidence in the case. Statewide penalties for domestic violence change from being a simple misdemeanor to a harsh felony due to elements the case presents. According to my sources “charges depend on the severity of the injury offense being charged and whether the defendant has a criminal history, age of the victim. Many states also will upgrade offense if the victim is a child.” Legal Articles Domestic Violence:Spousal abuse charges) each offense may get a different penalty some can be as simple as a fine or community service or something more harsh and severe like restraining order supervised visits with child or completely terminating parental rights lastly up to ten years of imprisonment. Unless it’s Spousal abuse this abuse gets a totally different charge and penalty oddly enough it’s not the same as domestic violence but is similar. The difference between both of them is your relation to your abuser. Spousal abuse is the most common abuse. According to my Source “ charges and penalties for spousal abuse depend on whether the acts result in serious bodily harm, have been continual, or if the accused has a history of abusive behavior.” (Legal Articles Domestic Violence:Spousal abuse charges) meaning that charges can change due to damaged created by abuser. It’s clear our legal system has an order they try to follow its gladly appreciated. but it only works if you suffered from physical trauma or emotion trauma. If it was any other type of abuse like financial abuse or it wouldn’t be able to be proven under spousal abuse charges. FoAlso this system wouldn’t work for long because its not proactive on the violence but really only reactive on it. On top of the fact, this only works if the victim is willing and not afraid to come forward. And police completely believe the severity of the allegations you the victim are putting forth. So the legal issue is does the crime fit the punishment?  does this secure the safety of the victim if abuser only gets serviced a small amount of time jail comes back out after servicing his time because he only got charged with a misdemeanor.

Even sometimes the police react too late because police completely overlook the severity of the allegations victim are putting forth. A  great example to use is Francine Hughes case, many of you are probably like who is this lady?. Well hold your horses because I’m going to give a little back story. Francine Hughes wife and mother to four beautiful children was happily married to her former husband James “Mickey” Hughes. After being fed up with the fact Mickey constant physical and emotional abuse being under the influence of alcohol. She files for divorces him, when she noticed the behavior will never change. Mickey refuses to sign the paper and decides to pay Francine a visit. With in this visit Mickey manages to rape and beat Francine in front of the kids for the last time. Francine snaps and manages to break free and not run away from him but kill him. Yes I said it Francine kills her ex husband. According to my source “ Francine Hughes stood outside her Michigan home, watching it burn. Inside was her abusive husband …. She stood watching the fire, then turned and entered the car where three of her children cowered in fear. Then she drove herself to authorities and turned herself in.” (Francine Hughes Killed Her Abusive Husband—And Changed U.S. Views on Domestic Violence.) that is crazy right ? But before this happens Francine did make attempts to get help according to my source “ Francine called the cops, but they refused to arrest Mickey since they had not witnessed the abuse themselves—even though he threatened them and told her “it was all over” since she had called for help. When they left, he continued beating her and raped her. Afterward, he fell asleep.” (Francine Hughes Killed Her Abusive Husband—And Changed U.S. Views on Domestic Violence.) In 1977 Hughes was charged with murder, sentenced to do several years in prison even after pleading for a motion of insanity.

 

With all the research I made I have learned a lot about the topic of domestic violence that made basically an expert on the topic itself. With each source there was a different genre it gave me a different point of view on domestic violence as a whole. And made me look at this topic in a different light than before.

Unit 3: Proposal 

 

The audience im trying to reach is the young adults between ages 15-25 year old that are in relationship so awareness is spread among the young adults about all the things that are associated with domestic violence and it won’t be social expect from others when seen 

 

Talk show I believe it will reach the largest amount of people in my targeted age range this message is for and how it will impact my audience better because i’m already connecting with my audience by using modern technology 

 

Posting online my subject which people can have a chance to ask anonymous questions on the subject posted I will answer them to the best of my knowledge in tonight’s talk show. This doesn’t have to be only a TV show you can also use it for a youtube video like a question and answer video which follows the same temple.

 

Unit 3: How To’s Talk Show 

Ingredients You will need 

Social media profile 

Social media following/Follower 

Cell phone Pen/paper

 Patients

An Open Mind

 

So there’s no manual to this and anyone can do it and there’s no wrong way or Right way of  doing this normally Youtubers just casually go onto any social media profile such as Instagram Twitter or Facebook anyone Will do. you only want to use these platforms because you will need to get a wide range of questions but it’s all up to you and your choice This part is optional you can pick a random subject so that you can narrow down your search for questions after doing that you must let your followers ask questions or a statement based on subject because this makes your job a whole lot easier and You don’t need to have high follower count you just need active followers that Are willing to respond and free to respond just know you It’s up to you what questions you do or don’t want to answer it’s all up to your comfortability of the question make sure all questions are open ended meaning you can answer the question with something other than yes or no if so try to strengthen your response with your reason after you got all your questions the last final step is to record keep in mind the responses you could possibly get from the responses you got from the questions keep in mind of all rules try to be sensitive to the issue and don’t speak on something that you don’t have facts on  after you have recorded all the stuff post away and this could be anywhere it could be I Snapchat IG TV Twitter video or Facebook Leslie YouTube 

 

                                             

                                           Unit 3: Script BROOKS’ SHOW  

                                   Domestic Violence Episode Final Revision

 

 

Maya: Welcome back,  my name is Amaya Brooks. You are here watching from your couch from my studio the talk show called The Brooks Show. Where we always find somehow someway to keep it real.As you know on the show we always have guest host every thursday so give a round of applause and a warm welcome to Shania Romain 

 

  Shania walks on the set, the audience stands up and applause. Shania smiles and waves at the fans and hugs Amaya and sit in the chair next to her. 

 

Shania: Hey girl, how are you 

 

Amaya: I’m good girl, for some of you that dont know Shania and I go back 

 

Shania:  Wayyyy back, from freshman in college back 

 

Maya:  (starts laughing ) Well are you ready to have girl chat?

 

Shania:  Yes girl born ready 

 

Maya: So those of you that don’t know what is it, Girl chat is when we go through our social media letting our followers ask us questions that they want us to answer. All we have to do is keep it real, Are you ready Shania ?

 

Shania: I’m ready for this so spill the tea girl 

 

Maya: So we have a tweet from anniesocrazy5261 saying:

  Hey ladies, I need some sisterly advice from both of you on what I should do with regard to my best friend. She has been married for the last 5 years and I notice a shift in her behavior. We go to the mall, we see some oh so fab shoes. She was so in love with those shoes, I just knew she was going to buy them. But instead she told me she can’t, before I could even ask why not ? She says shortly after her husband said “ she is not allowed to buy anything without his permission” because he says “that’s his money she has to wait on her allowance from him”  also notice that she has been very jumpy around girls and I. She always has bruises on her body there always new one never not old ones. 

So the question is this okay to do in a relationship ? 

Should I ask her what’s going on or is this overstepping my boundaries as a friend ?

  

Maya: (look over to shania ) What you think Shania? 

 

Shania:   Well Maya I don’t think this okay I wish my man tells me what and what not to spend, I mean I thought when your married you share funds between both of y’all ?

 

Maya: Don’t get me started girl I’m not married I’m single (wink into the camera ) as Pringle I’m too busy waiting on Trey Songz to scoop me. ( Maya looks into the camera and whispers) call me

 

Shania:   I don’t think this okay at all, this seems very controlling in my eyes seems like domestic violence if you ask me. (Maya shakes her head and agrees) If you are her friend you should help her, but ask first when she is not around her man so she can feel like its a safe enough zone for her to vent to you.

 

Maya:  Well Shania I couldn’t agree with you anymore, this sounds exactly like domestic violence. Annie, I would just ask her if she even wants help because some do not.  Some are also so unaware of the problem at hand they don’t want to leave they think they can change them and can’t. When they realize and accept the facts it’s too late.

 

Maya:    According to the Domestic Violence Hotline Domestic Violence is a pattern of behavior used by one partner to maintain power control over another partner in an intimate relationship. Many people think domestic violence is only physical like choking punching hitting or even slapping.  But in fact there is many more than that, people are not aware of such type of abuses sexual abuse emotional reproductive and financial abuse. People don’t know that there is even a such thing of a thing that exists. All these types of abuse are the first step three to four steps before the abuser even hits you in the first place.

 

Shania: Wow that’s crazy, reproductive abuse ? Girl didn’t I tell you I learn something new everyday 

 

Maya: (Maya starts to laugh and looks at Shania ) Shania you are to funny. Many victims are scared to leave this abusive relationship for reason like they share children together they don’t know how to be independent without spouse. They believe that the abusers actions are on the bases of love, victims are too afraid to come forward. because they think they will be victim blamed no one will believe their story or B just plain fearful or abuser actions overall. 

 

Shania: Wow, Victim blaming I mean who wouldn’t believe someone and think the victim is causing the problem of abuse. Who would think something like that ? I mean that’s nothing to play with at all it’s a serious matter 

 

Maya:   I totally agree with you Shania. I’m hundred percent on your side with this one.

 

Shania: I mean that’s going to create larger problems in the long run of things that’s how you can possibly create a killer or  make the victim emotional or physical snap

 

Maya:    No, come on you are dragging it right now, I think it would get that far would it ? 

 

Shania:  Come girl you the story about francine hughes and her husband. She literally tied her husband to bed, ( the audience looks in disbelief ) Yes she set fire to the bed  while her three children were in the car looking from the outside. She snapped and she just didn’t do that out of nowhere she was pushed and she was ignored. When she called the cops they didn’t believe her story  and never made an arrest because no one saw him abuse her. What happened she gets locked up for losing her shit and pleads guilty under the notion of victim insanity it lowers her jail time but she was still having to do the time nevertheless. That is not fair at all. 

 

Maya:   Oh yeah I completely forgot about that cases, that case changed a lot stuff regards to spousal abuse. Didn’t that start a movement in the late 70s early 80s ?


Shania: Yes girl, it did its called the Battered Women’s Movement. 

 

Maya: Domestic violence which all falls under the same umbrella as spousal abuse. But gets a totally different penalties in the courts. I mean it changed lots of laws far as I know I think as a people that just sit and observe bad stuff happening everyday we should just catch the signs early.  

 

Shania:   Yes I agree being aware of the fact that your friend is being Isolated by her spouse or she not herself when she around her? Is she happy around? Is this relationship or marriage one sided etc. Don’t be afraid or scared of asking questions if you feel something going on because you might be the one saving your friends life.

 

Maya:   Well you are completely right Shania,  if you have anymore questions you can look on our website www.brooksshow.com/ domestic violence awareness that’s all the time we have today thank you shania for stopping by for some girls chat  ( lean in ands hugs shania )

 

Shania:   No thank you for inviting me it’s always cool sitting and talking to you don’t forget to invite me again 

  

Maya:   Of course  Shania anyways remember be true and be you see you next time on the brooks show have a fabulous night. (Theme song comes on. Audience stands up claps for the two host on stage) 

 

            

                         PART 2: Two Low-stake Homework #1 

Task: Read and Annotate Mother Tongue by Amy Tan, type 250 word response on how Amy Tan experience relates to you?

 

 Amy Tan did things to help and protect her mother by interacting with others when people didn’t understand her “Broken English“. Tan believe that as a child coming from an immigrant chinese based household that her mother english is “perfectly clear, perfectly natural” that’s her mother tongue. Her mother influenced and inspired her career of choice which was writing. From watching her mother struggle on daily task interacting with others and how she needs her to help her so people can take her seriously. Tan also believe that the only reason why there isn’t many asian american choosing creative writing programs is because people convince them to stick with subjects they’re better at like math and science. She choose to still follow the odds and put everything on the line for writing. Tan and I share the same journey how we picked our career of choice. people believe girls west indian or even african americans are known to be good at math or science thought I should be a doctor or a nurse and that is something needed to be. I choose the odds which was being a lawyer even I knew reading was not my strong suit which didn’t stop me from wanting to be apart of change in government like how she wants to be the change in literature show that ”broken, limited and simple english” didn’t stop her from wanting something. 

 

 Homework #2 

Difficultly sure that is something I can say for sure that the declaration of independence rough draft and and final draft both had. Reading both copies waved language borders which only made me this a lot harder to read and just to focus on the main idea of the central idea. Many sentences I had to reread 3 or even 4 times just to find out that it didn’t even make the final draft how frustrating can that be the whole time reading this I try to stop myself from falling asleep between lines of hard word like” abdicated “or other words that “arbitrary” words that dried out the document that I believe didn’t add much value to the independence with it. It confused me and probably many other readers making harder for us to understand what they want for their new government to be like in this new world without having prior knowledge about it. But in reality we are in an era where people replace the word no cap for no lie but it keeps the interest in the other people to listen to what you are trying to say and ideas your trying to show this point of view.

 

PART 3: Reflection  

Have you ever just stopped and took a moment to breathe after a long semester of hard work and grinding, my professor. Professor hall gave me the easiest task in the world which is to   stop and reflect think and appreciate give yourself a little pat on the back for all the hard work you have done this whole semester. How far you have came as a writer.

 

Before the semester started, I had reason to believe that was a poor writer. That I didn’t write appropriately, looking back at it now I realize that I have my own personal writing style something that keeps the reader listening laughing and simultaneously learning something at the same time.  If you ask me I’m a writing genius. Yes, I have my flaws I don’t know how to spell for the life of me. My punctuation sucks just as bad as my spelling but according to professor hall you can’t teach spelling and grammar as long as you keep writing you’ll learn as you go and see your errors more often. I mean I’m the queen of capitalization I mean sometimes I do it just because it looks pretty in the middle of my paragraph. Girl, don’t you know I love me some run on sentences without a comma or period. 

 

  When I’m writing I have a tendency to write like I’m texting someone or I’m venting to a close friends about a situation. For instance in my unit one paper talking about my no good very bad experience with my horrible teacher Mr. Bux in this paper I wrote after being picked up from my dean Mr. Ghie. I had the whole office laughing at what I was saying  as I entered the room “Guacamole this teacher picked the wrong one, on the wrong day to f**K with me” This is one of many times my personality shines through my writing. I’m pretty sure I had my reader responding back to many of my comments I wrote or just simply laughing at me because I kept it real and said exactly what he or she was thinking the whole entire time reading my short story. Trust and believe me it’s a blessing and a curse to have this type of writing style.Yes there were times during my road of being a successful writer where I found myself lost confused on how to start or where to begin, who is my audience How do I keep them interested in my writing while keeping an appropriate not so childish. This happened A lot mostly during my unit two paper, man the struggle was real.  Some call it writer’s block but for me it felt worse than that I called it a writers’ worst nightmare because not only was I not able to produce anymore writing. But I felt like the writing I had on my paper wasn’t something I was proud of i couldn’t write my name next to that. On top of the fact, time was not on my side it was a frustration paper to write, read and revise. No matter what I did to this paper I felt It didn’t scream Amaya brooks when I read it. When really all I needed was a push and little motivation. As a writer you learn to ask for help within your peers. Sometimes having your classmates read your work helps to give you insight on your work. A fresh pair of new eyes will notice the glows and grows of your paper. Their feedback is very much needed, it gives you just the right amount of push you need in the right direction makes you really think on your writing as a writer. Whether it’s clear who your audience is? It your point of view clear within your paragraph or does it get lost in the sauce? These are all questions you have to address within your writing or it will be a complete waste of time to read. 

Sometimes you are asked to step out of your comfort zone and adapt. Talk about something that nobody else really wants to talk about but still keep it as your writing style. It’s hard and not easy, it test your ability as a writer. Unit three Genre was out of my comfort zone writing a talk show script is something that takes finesse. And can intimidate any rider because it’s not their usual type of writing but can be tweet into something similar. But when I read it out loud it sounds completely up my alley. I feel I have grown a lot as being a writer, adaptability language punctuation and spelling are all the things you need to have to be a great writer developing the skills will make you an unstoppable writer. Your writing genre will not be limited because you can master not only creative writing but master others.                                                                                                                                  

 

Snapshot of my writing reflection

Have you ever just stopped and took a moment to breathe after a long semester of hard work and grinding my professor. Professor hall gave me the easiest task in the world which is the stop and reflect think and appreciate give yourself a little pat on the back for all the hard work you have done this whole semester. 

Before the semester started, I have reason to believe that was a poor writer and that  That I didn’t write appropriately looking back at it now I realize that I my own personal writing style something that keeps the video listening laughing and simultaneously learning something at the same time if you ask me I’m a writing genius yes I have my flaws I don’t know how to spell for the life of me and my punctuation sucks according to professor hall you’ll learn spelling and grammar as long as you keep writing you’ll learn as you go I’m the queen of capitalization I mean sometimes I do it just because it looks pretty in the middle of my paragraph. girl, don’t you know I love me some run on sentences without a comma or period. When I’m Writing I have a tendency to write like I’m texting someone or I’m talking to my friend. But I struggle to write formally like for my law or something

 

Domestic violence Unit 2

Amaya Brooks

Eng 1101

11/2/19

Unit 2

 

Sources 1:

When a victim is in relationship with abuser normally the abuser believe their superior demand respect from the victim. The abuser can be anyone it doesn’t see gender or race. My source the National Domestic Violence Hotline describe the abuser tactics as a wheel of power and control. The abuser at one point or another uses one or all of the points on this wheel. Domestic violence is a pattern of behavior used by one partner to maintain power control over another partner in an intimate relationship (national domestic violence hotline:whats is domestic violence?). Abuser uses the power and control to intimidate victims. Make them feel less than or inferior by abusing their partners. There are many types of abuse. some are more common than other like  physical abuse, emotion, financial, etc these are all the most common ones. A lot of people are aware of physical abuse which is choking, hitting, slapping, pinning down, pushing.Then there is some that aren’t so familiar like Reproductive abuse, it sounds exactly what it is controlling a person when they can or can’t get pregnant by controlling their birth control or purposely breaking the condom forcing them to have a baby. Now is it credible ? I believe so national domestic violence hotline is secondary sources they use people’s real life situations to come up with their facts and support them with many examples. This sources answer my question by explaining to me all elements of abuse and supports the claim of victim normally have a hard time leaving due to the fact their extremely scared of their partner or In denial of the fact their in an abusive relationship too afraid to ask for help.

 

Sources 2

 

In the song there a stranger in my house  songwriter tamia sings about how she unaware of this new person that’s in her home it’s her husband she was talking about. She refers to him as a stranger because he wasn’t acting like her house lyrics in the chorus of the song states “ Cause he wouldn’t touch me like that and wouldn’t treat me like you do He would adore me, he wouldn’t ignore me So I’m convinced there’s a stranger in my house “ which leaves a lot gateway space to take prior research apply it to the situation and reading in between the lines of metaphors of what tamia is painting for listeners. Her husband being a stranger to her because he isn’t acting like himself ignoring her or even hitting her which are all signs of abuse. But tamia also has a conflicting conversation with herself tries to remind and convince herself that must be her husband because she as stated “  I’m checking your clothes And you wear the same size shoe You sleep in his spot And you’re driving his car” she aware that’s her husband but isn’t himself. This relates to my question because it shows the mindset of the victim and leaves possibility of why a victim wouldn’t want to leave or struggle to leave because she believes he will change his emotions and actions as a husband but doesn’t. this source I believe is credible because she is talking about an event that happened to her in the past this is basically coming straight from the horse’s mouth. who lie about that on top of the fact because she is telling her story and no else is this is a primary source holds weight to my research question

Sources: 3

Many victims struggle with removing themselves from this toxic relationship because they don’t have support from others about further steps they should take to remove themselves from the problem. Victim normally go through many conflicting thoughts when coming forward. Victim blaming can be one of the reasons why victims have a hard time leaving their relationship. According to victim reality TV star Basketball Wives Evelyn Lozada posted on instagram clapping back to people that had an opinion on her domestic violence case against former football player and ex husband Chad Ochocinco. After referring to herself as a survivor and not a victim Lozada believe that victim blaming makes it hard for them to step forward.  As stated in post “ victim blaming culture discourages domestic violence victim from coming forward. The fear of being judged and shamed is enough to make anyone stay quiet and suffer in silence” which makes it harder for them to leave their spouse. Lozada also believe when victim build up enough courage to “speak their truth” many people don’t believe them don’t support them on the fact that they spoke up especially if abuser has higher social media following people believe the victim are clout chasing. Which is pretty cruel if you ask me what happen to innocent until proven guilty that doesn’t just work inside the courtroom it should be applied everywhere. Then wonders why victims don’t come forward, who wants to be told their truth is a lie? . Now due to where I got my source from many may say its not credible because anyone can post on instagram and thats correct anyone can post on this social media but truthful I believe depend the story how many elements are supported by true facts. Instagram can be credible its crediblity shouldn’t be questioned due to where it came from as far as the app but more about who said it, who post this story is it factual the author is what matters.

Sources 4:

So let’s play a game of what if so say one day a victim comes forward and tells their story of the abuse they have been going through with his or her spouse to the police and now they want to start a case against abuser. There are many different penalties of domestic violence offenses it all depends all on evidence in the case. Statewide penalties for domestic violence change from being a simple misdemeanor to a harsh felony due to elements the case presents. According to my sources “charges depend on the severity of the injury offense being charged and whether the defendant has a criminal history, age of the victim. Many states also will upgrade offense if the victim is a child .”  each offense may get a different penalty some can be as simple as a fine or community service or something more harsh and severe like restraining order supervised visits with child or completely terminating parental rights lastly up to ten years of imprisonment. Unless it’s Spousal abuse this abuse gets a totally different charge and penalty oddly enough it’s not the same as domestic violence but is similar. The difference between both of them is your relation to your abuser. Spousal abuse is the most common abuse. According to my Source “ charges and penalties for spousal abuse depend on whether the acts result in serious bodily harm, have been continual, or if the accused has a history of abusive behavior.” meaning that charges can change due to damaged created by abuser. It’s clear our legal system has an order they try to follow its gladly appreciated. but it only works if you suffered from physical trauma or emotion trauma. If it was any other type of abuse like financial abuse or it wouldn’t be able to be proven under spousal abuse charges. Also this system wouldn’t work for long because its not proactive on the violence but really only reactive on it. On top of the fact, this only works if the victim is willing and not afraid to come forward. So the legal issue is does the crime fit the punishment ? and does this secure the safety of the victim if abuser only gets serviced a small amount of time jail comes back out after servicing his time because he only got charged with a misdemeanor. My sources relates to my question because this gives another reason why it might be difficult for a victim to come forward and get the help they need to escape this abusive relationship al Abuse Charges and Penalt

UNIT 3 Script

BROOKS SHOW  

Domestic Violence episode

 

 Maya   Hey my name is Amaya Brooks you are here watching from your couch and your television of the Brooks Show where we leave the bullshit at the door and only speak facts as you know on the show we always have guest host every thursday so give a round of applause to Shania Romain 

 

  Shania walks on the set and the  audience applause shania smiles and waves at the fans and hugs amaya and sit in the chair next to her 

 

Shania  Hey girl how are you 

 

Amaya  I’m good girl for some of you that dont know shania and I go back 

 

Shania  Wayyyy back from freshman in college back 

 

Maya  (starts laughing ) Well are you ready to have girl chat so those that don’t know what is it but girl chat is we go through our social media ask our followers on questions that they want us to answer we have to keep it real and keep it honest as possible are you ready ?

 

Shania  Yes girl born ready 

 

Maya   So we have a tweet from anniesocrazy5261 saying hey ladies, I need some sisterly advice on what I should do with regard to my best friend. She has been married for 5 years and I notice a shift in her behaviors we go to the mall and we see some oh so fab shoes  she was so in love I just knew she was going to buy them but instead she told me she can’t her husband said to her she is not allowed to buy anything without his permission because he says that’s his money also notice that she has been very jumpy around girls and I,  we notice that she always has bruises on her body there always new one not old ones so the question is this okay to do in a relationship? Should I ask her what’s going on or is this overstepping my boundaries as a friend 

  

Maya (look over to shania ) What you think Shania 

 

Shania  Well Maya I don’t think this okay I wish my man tells me what and what not to spend, I mean I thought when your married you share funds between both of y’all ?

 

Maya  Don’t get me started girl I’m not married I’m single (wink into the camera ) as Pringle I’m too busy waiting on Trey Songz to scoop me 

 

Shania  I don’t think this okay at all this seems very controlling in my eyes seems like domestic violence to me if you are her friend you should help her but ask first when she is not around her man so she can feel like its a safe enough zone for her to vent to you 

 

Maya  Well Shania I couldn’t agree with you anymore this sounds exactly like domestic violence and you should ask her if she even wants help because some do not and some are also so unaware of the problem at hand they want to leave when it’s too late 

 

Maya   According to the domestic violence hotline  domestic violence is a pattern of behavior used by one partner to maintain power control over another partner in an intimate relationship many people think domestic violence is only physical like choking punching hitting or even slapping  but there is many more that people are not aware of such as sexual abuse emotional reproductive and financial abuse people don’t know that therer is even a such thing exist all these type of abuse are the first step 3 to 4 steps before the abuser even hits you in first place 

 

Shania  Wow that’s crazy 

 

Maya   Many victims are scared to leave this abusive relationship for reason like they share children together they don’t know how to be independent without spouse  they believe that the abusers actions are on the bases of love lastly victim is afraid no one will believe their story or just plain fearful or abuser actions overall 

 

Shania  Girl didn’t I tell you I learn something new everyday, thats crazy I mean who wouldn’t believe someone if they were saying something like that ? I mean that’s nothing to play with at all it’s a serious matter 

 

Maya  I totally agree with you 

 

Shania  I mean that’s going to create larger problems in the long run of things that’s how you can possibly create a killer 

 

Maya   No , come on you are dragging it right now I think it would get that far 

 

Shania  Come girl you the story about francine hughes and her husband she literally tied her husband too the bed and set the bed on fire while her three children were in the car looking from the outside she snapped and she just didn’t do that out of nowhere she was pushed when she told someone her story no one believed her and no one saw him abuse her what happened she gets locked up  for losing her shit and pleads guilty under the notion of victim insanity it lowers her jail time but she was still having to do the time nevertheless 

 

Maya   Oh yeah I completely forgot about that cases, that case changed a lot stuff regards to spousal abuse and domestic violence which all falls under the same umbrella but gets different penalties in the courts. I mean it changed lots of laws far as I know I think as a people we should just catch the signs early  

 

Shania  Yes I agree being aware of the fact that your friend is being Isolated by her spouse or she not herself when she around her ? Is she happy around in this relationship or marriage one sided etc 

 

Maya   Well you are completely right shania  if you have anymore questions you can look on our website www.brooksshow.com/ domestic violence awareness that’s all the time we have today thank you shania for stopping by for some girls chat  ( lean in ands hugs shania )

 

Shania  No thank you for inviting me it’s always cool sitting and talking to you don’t forget to invite me again 

  

Maya  Ofc Shania anyways remember be true and be you see you next time on the brooks show have a fabulous night 

 

How To make a Q and A Video

How to make a Q And A video 

 

Ingredients You will need 

Social media profile 

Social media following/Follower 

Cell phone 

Pen/paper 

Patients

An open mind

 

So there’s no manual to this and anyone can do it and there’s no wrong way or Right way of  doing this normally Youtubers just casually go onto any social media profile such as Instagram Twitter or Facebook anyone Will do. you only want to use these platforms because you will need to get a wide range of questions but it’s all up to you and your choice This part is optional you can pick a random subject so that you can narrow down your search for questions after doing that you must let your followers ask questions or a statement based on subject because this makes your job a whole lot easier and You don’t need to have high follower count you just need active followers that Are willing to respond and free to respond just know you It’s up to you what questions you do or don’t want to answer it’s all up to your comfortability of the question make sure all questions are open ended meaning you can answer the question with something other than yes or no if so try to strengthen your response with your reason after you got all your questions the last final step is to record keep in mind the responses you could possibly get from the responses you got from the questions keep in mind of all rules try to be sensitive to the issue and don’t speak on something that you don’t have facts on  after you have recorded all the stuff post away and this could be anywhere it could be I Snapchat IG TV Twitter video or Facebook Leslie YouTube 

Proposal Domestic violence

Q and A video / social media video post 

the audience im trying to reach is the young adults between ages 15-25 year old that are in relationship so awareness is spread among the young adults about all the things that are associated with domestic violence and it won’t be social expect from others when seen 

 

Youtube or instagram tv I believe it will reach the largest amount of people in my targeted age range this message is for and how it will impact my audience better because i’m already connecting with my audience by using modern technology 

 

Posting online my subject which people can have a chance to ask anonymous questions on the subject posted I will answer them to the best of my knowledge in later video   

Sources for domestic violence part 1

Why is it so hard for the victim to leave their abuser well according to my source the national domestic violence hotline there are many elements that play a part of the wheel of power and control the abuser at one point or another uses one or all of the points on this wheel to paint this picture for its victim that they’re Superior and victim is inferior. they have no control over the relationship or situation. They bring up great points of all types of abuse some that are obvious and some not so. Most common one that a lot of people are aware of physical abuse which is choking, hitting, slapping, pinning down, pushing.Then some that was unfamiliar to me like Reproductive abuse it sounds exactly what it is controlling when a person can or can’t get pregnant by controlling their birth control or purposely breaking the condom forcing them to have a baby. Now is it credible I believe so national domestic violence hotline is secondary sources because they use people’s real life situations to come up with their facts and support them with many examples. This sources answer my question by explaining to me all elements of abuse and supports the claim of victim normally have a hard time leaving due to the fact their extremely scared of their partner or In denial of the fact their in an abusive relationship too afraid to ask for help. 

 

Sources 2 

 

In the song there a stranger in my house  songwriter tamia sings about how she unaware of this new person that’s in her home it’s her husband she was talking about. She refers to him as a stranger because he wasn’t acting like her house lyrics in the chorus of the song states “ Cause he wouldn’t touch me like that and wouldn’t treat me like you do He would adore me, he wouldn’t ignore me So I’m convinced there’s a stranger in my house “ which leaves a lot gateway space to take prior research apply it to the situation and reading in between the lines of metaphors of what tamia is painting for listeners. Her husband being a stranger to her because he isn’t acting like himself ignoring her or even hitting her which are all signs of abuse. But tamia also has a conflicting conversation with herself tries to remind and convince herself that must be her husband because she as stated “  I’m checking your clothes And you wear the same size shoe You sleep in his spot And you’re driving his car” she aware that’s her husband but isn’t himself. This relates to my question because it shows the mindset of the victim and leaves possibility of why a victim wouldn’t want to leave or struggle to leave because she believes he will change his emotions and actions as a husband but doesn’t. this source I believe is credible because she is talking about an event that happened to her in the past this is basically coming straight from the horse’s mouth. who lie about that on top of the fact because she is telling her story and no else is this is a primary source holds weight to my research question 

E + R =O ?

         Twenty percent of our population are students but they makeup hundred percent of our future. A teacher is the first person we encounter as students other than parents. We spend more than forty hours a week with teachers. So yes, it’s important what teachers think about us and what relationship we have or try to develop with them. I was blessed to build a great friendship with staff that can help me through a crazy roller coaster named high school. Mrs. Guash and Mr. Ghie was dean and guidance counselor in my high school. They were my school parents. I could always keep it a buck fifty with them and always had lots of respect for them. They both understood my story as a student and my behavior problem. They introduce to equation that I didn’t believe was helpful until this very moment. E+R=O simple solution to all my problems and the key to my stress free day.

     I struggled in history for many reasons it probably was that fact I had class the second to last period of my school day I was always tired. I was in class full kids that can care less about this class. Had a teacher that made the subject boring not interesting. Pretty much the odds were against me. I felt Mr. Bux wasn’t the greatest teachers. He found time to waste during class to check other students behavior Venus from checking them after class or letting their grade suffer. We only had 45 minutes per period we never as a class got alot done because of other students taking advantage of the teacher. He was one of those teachers that had to stop the whole class to check one student and their behavior. I mean how annoying is that when you are half tired and just want to go home. Which out of 45 minutes it takes 10 minutes for everyone to come in calm down it takes 5 minutes just for him to finish correcting students. Leave us with not a lot of time to learn new materials or even review older ones for quizzes and exams. I was always lost in class, when I told him he tries to accuse me of talking to peers about things off topic is the reason why “ i’m having trouble” which was far from the truth because I didn’t like anyone in class so why talk to them ? Mr.Buxs and I always bumped heads in class.

       This day I went to U.S History class Mr.Buxs assigns a group project gives a due date that is different from whats on pupil path. So I tell Mr. Bux “you do know that there is different due date on pupilpath then what you verbal said to the class” so he looks on pupilpath and it turns out I was correct.  Instead of apologizing for it saying its an error and warning other kids. Mr. Buxs tells me “there is no reason why I need to act so cocky and arrogant“ at this moment every student heard exactly what he said. I was put on the spot in front of the whole class embarrassed is an understatement in this case.  So I told him “ who the f**k are you talking to and how am I cocky and arrogant for helping you out.”

           “ Amaya, I’m tired of you and your outburst during class, you are distracting the whole class from learning you need to learn to have self control, if you don’t stop im calling your mom and i’m calling school safety escort you out of my class” Mr. Bux  says I reply back “what are talking about I don’t care if you call my mom im not waiting for you try to make an example out of me which is unfair.” He calls safety so they can come I told him” I’m not leaving class because today you acting like a complete d**k, just because you had a shitty day doesn’t mean you make mine one too.” When I look up at the door two safety agents and Mr. Ghie was there. It was a sense of relief because finally someone can witness this dumb stuff and not think Im making it up. He tells me “Amaya come to my office your not in any trouble we need to have a little conversation so bring your belongs please come with me.” I didn’t fight or argue with Ghie even though I was a tiny bit disappointed that Ghie didn’t put him in his place. But nevertheless I still just got up went with him the whole elevator ride down to his office I was so mad and frustrated. At myself mostly because I let him get underneath my skin, that made me so angry I missed out on my purpose for being in school which is to be present for the review. Instead I’m on a one way ticket heading to the dean’s office because of him.

          Ghie brings me into Mrs Guash office we both sit at a round table in her office. I gave them a play by play on what happened. Both of them started laughing because they knew earlier that day before I went to class I was not interested in going at all. I felt his vibe would be bad, I wasn’t there for the shenanigans he got going on because he couldn’t find a park that morning so the fact that not even 15 minutes and yes 15 minutes after the late bell rings . I’m back in her office yelling “Guacamole this teacher picked the wrong one, on the wrong day to f**K with me”  had the whole office laughing.

           Now remember that simple equation I brought up in begin watch how this dramatically changed my life. Mrs Guash looks at me and see the anger underneath the humor I had about the situation. I got so angry that I started to cry. So she asked me what is your goal when you walk in that class I said “prepare for the regents “ do you think want just happen in class helped or harmed you and your goal I said to her “no it harmed my goal. ” She then tells me teachers have upper hand of students because they are responsible for your grades. Teachers are human and make many mistakes, they are normally out number in classroom so when you call him out after his bad day of trying to find a park. You my darling is the straw that breaks the camel’s back, this doesn’t make it right . this isn’t even the time to try to argue with him since it is the last week of the marking period she follows up with another question “but you only have control of who?”  I said “ myself “ so in the event you want a positive outcome your response has to be positive right ? I agreed so do you believe in this event your response was positive or negative I said while rolling my eyes “it was obviously negative” Ghie jump in like its a teachable moment and says E+R=O. Event plus response equal outcome. So next time you are put in this situation think about your outcome, you can’t control event but you can change your response so you can get the right results and outcome you want.

            Little light bulb went off in my head and it explains a lot of the disconnect from other teachers. So that point on I made a mental note sometimes not saying anything can make you win in the event you need to respond. To wait process information on event you are not in any hurry to make a choice, weigh out your option if you pick one option over the other what is your result ? And how is it different ? Is this the result you are trying to achieve if not what are you trying to do to change your results. At that very second everything made more sense than before, I left her office with a better understanding of everything. So after that day, I promise I won’t let another teacher get up under my skin. I’m in control of my education and my life I won’t let the event control me to the point I lose focus of my goal. Since that point I never argue with any teacher when it happens I just listen, wait after class to respond. So no one is pressure to act a certain way it has worked for a while, I pass it to all my friends when I have advice to give, because it has helped me so much on my daily interacting with other people but more so teachers.

Long term effect on abuser and abuses ?

What makes abuser a abuser ?

Police officers are normal the first responder to incidents when dealing with domestic victim you must follow procedures according to New Jersey criminal dept keep victims calm keep acknowledging how difficulty of the to tell there story be as accurate as possible many victims become very fearful of just people of authority so trying not to talk very loud or even raising your hand up too fast would be things not to do so you can get  accurate and useful testimony

Difficultly sure that is something I can say for sure that the declaration of independence rough draft and and final draft both had. Reading both copies waved language borders which only made me this a lot harder to read and just to focus on the main idea of the central idea. Many sentences I had to reread 3 or even 4 times just to find out that it didn’t even make the final draft how frustrating can that be the whole time reading this I try to stop myself from falling asleep between lines of hard word like” abdicated “or other words that “arbitrary” words that dried out the document that I believe didn’t add much value to the independence with it. It confused me and probably many other readers making harder for us to understand what they want for their new government to be like in this new world without having prior knowledge about it. But in reality we are in a era where people replace the word no cap for no lie but it keeps the interest in the other people to listen to what you are trying to say and ideas your trying to show this point of view