In my essay, I talked about the connections between cheating and my highschool experience. At first, i talked about my first encounter with cheating and how even though it was easy to copy homework and taking shortcuts, they didn’t benefit me at all , in fact was hurting my education. During peer review ,i received many helpful feedbacks, but the main problem to it was it’s lack of dialogue. Dialogue would help the reader feel more into the story and gave them a sense of what i was experiencing. The dialogue would also make the essay more storytelling and less of an “assignment”.Not only dialogue but i feel as my essay was extremely rigid and too formal. Another issue I realized was the lack of transition in my essay, it feels rushed and unfinished. As Prof Hall told me, she didn’t quite understand how some parts of my essay correspond with others and my reflection on the essay was unclear. From the part of me copying homework to finding out my friend cheating on the SAT, it didn’t give the reader a clear sense of what the point of the essay was. My audience, who I am speaking as will remain the same but the structure and the small details will need to be changed.
