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Week 4 Assignments
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This week, we will be thinking about and working on revision!
- Week 4 Assignments
- Group Assignments DUE by MIDNIGHT, Thursday, October 2
- RWA and LJ DUE by MIDNIGHT, Monday, October 6
- LEARNING JOURNAL 4
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Please spend 5 to 7 minutes free writing about any thoughts, feelings, or experiences you have about Revision. I’d like you to first think about this word and what connotations it has for you. Can you recall any particular experiences when you have had the opportunity to re-see something, e.g., see something in a new way or from a new perspective? What was that like? Could that experience inform your understanding of revision in writing? Why or why not?Group Assignment 4:
- Revision through Rewriting: Please choose one paragraph from your RWA2: Responding to Reading assignment and answer the following questions: What is this paragraph about? What is the purpose of this paragraph? As written, how well does this paragraph fulfill its purpose? What questions might a reader have about this paragraph as it is currently written? After answering these questions, please re-write your paragraph FROM SCRATCH. Then, post 1/ the original paragraph, 2/ your answers to these questions and 3/ the re-written paragraph as a comment to Professor Rodgers’ GA4: Revising Paragraphs By Rewriting Them Blog Post
- RWA4: Preparing a Finished First Draft
College Writing
Professor Rodgers
To complete this assignment, please do the following:
First, read over your literacies narrative essay draft and take notes on it. What is it about? What is the “story” that you are trying to tell? What are some of the most interesting passages in your draft? Do these support what you think your personal essay is about? If no, should you perhaps change your focus to make it possible to include these passages?
Second, once you have read through your first/exploratory draft, taken notes on it, and noted any places where sentences may not be clearly communicating to your audience or your points may not be clear, please complete the Personal Essay Reflection Questions below.
- What is your essay about?
- How well does your title reflect the content of your essay? Does the title capture the reader’s attention? Why or why not?
- Who is the audience for the essay? How is that evident in this draft (word choice, style, other?)?
- What do you believe makes the draft unique both in terms of its content and the style of the writing?
- Do you feel that this draft fulfills your purpose for the essay and this assignment? Why? Why not? What might it need in order to better fulfill its purpose?
- Are there any points or sentences that you believe your reader may be confused by? If yes, please place a question mark beside each point or sentence and re-write the point or sentence to answer the following question: “what is it I am trying to say here?” and/or “what point am I trying to make here?”
- Does each paragraph support a central point? Are there paragraphs that support multiple points and should be broken up into two paragraphs? Are there paragraphs that are too “weak” to stand on their own as paragraphs? If so, please make revisions to these paragraphs as appropriate.
- Reviewing this draft alongside Professor Rodgers’ book, particularly pp. 10-13 and pp. 31-36, please write down any questions that you have about college writing based on your work drafting and revising this essay.
Third, please look over your draft again alongside these notes, the notes from your peer editor on the “Peer Editing Worksheet,” your answers to the above “Personal Essay Reflection Questions,” and the original guidelines for the assignment and prepare a revised draft in which you integrate all of the suggested changes that you believe would improve the draft. You will be handing in this REVISED draft along with your FIRST draft and the completed QUESTIONNAIRE on Monday, October 6.
1. My essay is more of an informative aspect essay basically informing and addressing different situations in mp which technology has really taken over large amount of the educational system. In the matters of which technology has allowws the concepts of reading and writing to become to simple for the average student.
2.Yes! I do feel the title does capture the readers attention but at the same time it doesn’t reflect much of the content of the essay.
3.The audience form for this essay is would be directed towards myself, fellow classmates, and my professor.
4.I believe what makes this draft unique both in terms of its content and the style of writing because the essay addresses multiple of situations that fall all under one main topic which is the importance of technology and how it has affected the ways of reading and writing.
5.I do believe this draft fulfills my purpose ofor the essay and gets my message across clearly. But I feel what changes I could surely make towards it to make it even better would be changing the title and adding some length to the draft to emphasize on certain aspects.
Old Paragraph: I think the change from first to third person was possibly to add more feeling to the Indian boy learning how to read when younger but still come from a harsh time of Indians being mistreated and in a way looked down upon. It might be hinting to the fact that even though the boy had an outstanding experience and learned about writing that bit, his Indian heritage denied him a fair chance in society. It also mentions and adds an importance to how fast the boy’s reading level increased and was able to evolve quicker due to the experience of realizing words and sentences make up a “fence-like” structure. It also shows that the little boy has grown up and speaks in third person about his past which is done in the final paragraph.
Question 1: It was about making theories to why Alexie made a change from first to third person.
Question 2: The purpose of this paragraph was to give reasons to why Alexie might’ve taken such an approach in her story.
Question 3: I feel the paragraph fulfills its purpose quite well, using a list format to give reasons for such a tactic of switching the POV near the end of the story.
Question 4: One question a reader might have is “couldn’t the switch in POV have just been for personal reasons?”.
Rewritten Paragraph:
Alexie’s switch from first to third person made it seem like he was telling a story in the “present” as in after the events of the story before the final paragraph. It showed the cruel part of racism in those days as he mentions his amazingly quick learning and “fence” analogy didn’t mean much coming from an Indian in these days until time in the last paragraph. One can see that in a way, he has inspired you seeing us from his experience as a child learning to read, he eventually became an adult who wrote stories of his own. His change to third person shows also how he to this day(the present in the end of the story) that he might still have bad feelings about how his people were treated and how maybe, he could’ve turned out better in the end.
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