The purpose of this is two-fold: First, you will introduce your sources to your audience (title, author, source). Second, you will compare and contrast the purpose, tone and style of the three sources.
Here is one sample from Nicole Waite, who was a student in my ENG1101 course in the Spring, 2014 semester. Nicole made the decision to list her sources first and then discuss and refer to them. If she had had time to write a second draft of this discussion of her sources, I suspect she may have been able to introduce the sources AS she was discussing them. I HAVE MADE A FEW COMMENTS IN ALL CAPS WHERE SHE COULD HAVE DONE THIS:
GA11: Nicole Waite:
MY SOURCES:
(1) Denhart, Chris. “How the $1.2 Trillion College Debt is Crippling Students, Parents and the Economy.” Forbes 7 Aug. 2013. Forbes, Inc. Web. http://www.forbes/sites/specialfeatures/2013/08/07/how-the-college-debt-is-crippling- students-parents-and-the-economy
(2) Hiltonsmith, Robert, and Tamara Draut. “The Great Cost Shift Continues: State Higher Education Funding After the Recession.” Demos 6 March 2014.
http://www.demos.org//publication/great-cost-shift-continues-state-higher-education- funding-after-recession
(3) Bidwell, Allie. “The Rise in Tuition is Slowing, But College Still Costs More.” U.S. World & News Report 24 October 2013. http://www.usnews.com/news/articles/2013/10/24/the- rise-in-tuition-is-slowing-but-college-still-costs-more
Each of my sources addresses the rising cost of tuition and fees that have occurred on a national level, as the result of budgetary cuts to education. Each also speaks to the fact that students are graduating with enormous debt because of loans that they take in order to pay for school. The tone of each of the pieces seems to be educational in that they are informing the reader about the crisis and why it exists. I feel that the audience for each of the articles are students/parents and anyone that is affected by the economy; the latter because student debt has a direct effect on financial matters such as state budgeting, national interest rates, and tax burdens on the community.
The article written by Hiltonsmith and Draut ENTITLED “The Great Cost Shift Continues: State Higher Education Funding After the Recession” (DEMOS2014) is longer and more formal than the other two pieces; it includes both statistics and charts. Bidwell’s article, “The Rise in Tuition is Slowing, But College Still Costs More.” (U.S. World & News Report 2013) explains how and why the tuition rate has been increasing even though tuition rates have slackened, while Denhart’s article “How the $1.2 Trillion College Debt is Crippling Students, Parents and the Economy” (FORBES 2013) focuses more on paying for college and the consequences of taking out loans. But each of the writings have similar summations – the rising cost of attending a public college, or private institution for that matter, has become so unaffordable that students are amassing huge [loan] debt in order to pay for their higher education.
The sources I have are:
1. Essentials of Psychology Fifth edition by: Stephen Franzoi, Ebook
2. Technology enhanced learning and cognition edited by Itiel E. Dror, Ebook
3. http://www.all-about-psychology.com/gary-small.html, Interview. By: David Webb.
The purpose for all these sources is to gather information from different perspectives and have them support and represent my research questions. Each of these sources has a different tone and style, simply because of the difference in source and each contain there own style meaning they brought different information and express it differently but somehow come together for the same purpose of the explanation of how the brain re-programs itself in relation to technology.
Nina, Overall this looks very good. Here are a few comments and questions: 1/ You do not list a publisher or date for your first bibliographic citation. Ebooks, like print books, have publishers. Please add one and include the date of publication. 2/ same questions for your second bibliographic citation. 3/ You need to format your third bibliographic citation according to MLA guidelines. Could you look those up? I’ve posted a “cheat sheet” on our course blog, so you can certainly use that as a starting point. However, I’d like you to have a “go to” reference source for looking up the guidelines for bibliographic citations in MLA format. Are you using a print or online English handbook? Either is fine.
Your paragraph describing your sources is an excellent draft. However, it needs to be rewritten to address the purpose of this paragraph as assigned. For instance, while I cannot tell you how much I admire your topic sentence as written as a statement of what this assignment is about, this paragraph is not about the assignment, but about your sources. You end this paragraph with a sentence that appears to be the topic sentence for THAT paragraph. Please post the revision of this paragraph as a separate post. I’ll look forward to seeing it!
1. The publisher for my first source is Richard Scholield @copyright 2014
2. The publisher for my second source is John Benjamin, January 26,2011
3. I have the print english handbook
Revision paragraph:
The purpose for all these sources is to gather information from different perspectives and have them support and represent my research questions. For my first source “Essentials of Technology”, it gives insight to how the brain functions and how the brain acts as a computer. It also goes into detail on how we interpret and distribute information. My second source it shows us how technology in learning has increased dramtically, as well as enhancements towards learning that promotes the formation of effective mental representations and works with the human cognitive system. My last source is an interview with Gary Small who is an icon with psychology and they ask him questions on concerning overrall about his persepctive on technoology and how he views it as improving for us to be able to acquire information more efficiently and also how it makes us remember how we learn it and how its then used.
These all influence and support my research question,” What part of the brain reprograms itslf to adapt to how the Web gives information?” and show many reliable claims on doing so.
Three sources
1: Meyer, Robinson. "To Remember a Lecture Better, Take Notes by Hand."The Atlantic. Atlantic Media Company, 01 May 2014. Web. 20 Nov. 2014.
2: Schacter, John. The Impact of Education Technology on Student Achievement. Rep. Milken Exchange, n.d. Web. 17 Nov. 2014.
3: Medina, J.. “Reading, writing and special attention in queens.” New York Times (1923-Current File) Retrieved from http://search.proquest.com/docview/92554767?accountid=28313
These sources show that technology’s positive and negative effects on education. The first source “To Remember a Lecture Better, Take Notes by Hand” is an experiment that shows students who take notes by hand perform better in the exams than students who take notes by computer. The second source The Impact of Education Technology on Student Achievement is a report from the U.S Department of Education. It shows the positive and negative findings by using technology to teach students. The third one is “Reading, writing and special attention in queens.” This article shows that students enjoy class more and pay more attention when teachers use technology instead of writing.
These three sources can show technology’s positive and negative effects in education. Readers can compare both sides and obtain different perspectives from these sources. These sources’ purpose is to tell the readers how technology affects our education. Their styles are analysis and the tones are informative.
Dear Ping,
For anyone looking for a model of the MLA guidelines for bibliographic citations, I hope EVERYONE will take a look at these! They are excellent!!!!!! I’m also impressed by the reliability and range of sources that you have located. I’m particularly intrigued by this one:
“The second source ‘The Impact of Education Technology on Student Achievement’ is a report from the U.S Department of Education. It shows the positive and negative findings by using technology to teach students.”
This looks like a very important and interesting source for ALL OF US TO KNOW ABOUT. Could you post the link to this? Also, please re-check the author of this source. Since it is published by the U.S. Department of Education, it may or may not have a named author. It also may or may not have a single author. We’ll talk about how to handle both issues in our next class, so for now, please just post the link and do your best trying to figure out who the author it.
Finally, content-wise, the paragraph your wrote is really excellent. I’m also impressed by how most of the sentences in it are complete according to the guidelines of SWE! There are a few issues related to writing about texts that I’d like to point out to you, but I think it is best to do this in class or when we meet in person. Finally, I would like you to re-write the following sentences and, as you do, please make a note of what the SWE issues are in each sentence that make it necessary to rewrite it. Here are the sentences:
1/ These sources show that technology’s positive and negative effects on education.
2/ Their styles are analysis and the tones are informative.
1. Michael Oliveira, “Is technology hurting us by making life easier?”, TheStar, Published on Thu Dec 27 2012, accessed 11/21/14
2. Matthew Casey, “Has technology ruined handwriting?”, Sun July 28, 2013, accessed 11/21/14
3. Stuart Wolpert, “Is technology producing a decline in critical thinking and analysis?”, January 27, 2009, accessed 11/21/14
All my sources give slightly different views on the negative effects of technology on our reading and writing skills. Michael Oliveria attacks the sole purpose of technology which is said to be making our lives easier and says it in fact is making us lazier. Tools such as search engines, GPS and spellcheck as in her view, pacifying our minds instead of elevating it in skills like critical thinking. Matthew Casey gives information on the actual process of writing on hand and says that writing was a complex process which involved more use of mental activities but due to texting and it’s prominence, typing has been about making things as simple as possible. Stuart Wolpert talks on the important topic of visual stimulation and how due to it’s incredible speed of rapid succession of images which doesn’t give us enough time to think critically of what we’re watching.
Wow! What an amazing topic sentence you have crafted to begin the paragraph describing and discussing your sources!!! I hope everyone will take a look at this :).
Your sources all look great and very promising as sources for this project. Your bibliographic citations, however, need a bit of work. Where were your #2 and #3 sources published? Please take a look at the models for MLA bibliographic citations (or look at Ping’s list of sources above or the “cheat sheet” that I posted) and fix these.
I’d also like you to re-write a few sentences in your description of our sources. I’ve made edits and/or noted issues to look up in ALL CAPS IN PARENTHESES below:
All my sources give slightly different views on the negative effects of technology on our reading and writing skills (FIVE STAR SENTENCE!!!!). IN HIS ARTICLE “___,”Michael Oliveria attacks the sole purpose of technology which is said to be making our lives easier and says it in fact is making us lazier (I TOTALLY GET WHAT YOU ARE SAYING HERE, BUT I’M WONDERING IF YOU CAN SAY IT MORE CLEARLY. IS THIS A COMPOUND OR COMPLEX SENTENCE? IT SEEMS TO COMBINE ATTRIBUTES OF BOTH TYPES AND I THINK IT WILL MAKE MORE SENSE IF YOU CHOOSE ONLY ONE MODEL FOR IT). Tools such as search engines, GPS and spellcheck as in her (I THOUGHT YOU WERE WRITING ABOUT MICHAEL?) view, pacifying our minds instead of elevating it in skills like critical thinking (SENTENCE FRAGMENT). Matthew Casey gives information on the actual process of writing BY hand and says that writing was (TENSE NEEDS TO AGREE WITH EARLIER VERB) a complex process which (CHECK RELATIVE PRONOUN USE. HERE AND ABOVE THE USAGE IS CREATING CONFUSION IN YOUR WRITING) involved more use of mental activities but due to texting and it’s prominence, typing has been about making things as simple as possible (MY SENSE IS THAT YOU ARE TRYING TO SIMPLY CRAM TOO MUCH INTO THIS SENTENCE. DON’T WORRY ABOUT LENGTH: WRITE AS MUCH AS YOU NEED TO AND MAKE SURE WHAT YOU WRITE IS AN ACCURATE DESCRIPTION OF WHAT YOUR SOURCE ARGUES). Stuart Wolpert talks on (ABOUT) the important topic of visual stimulation and how due to it’s incredible speed of rapid succession of images which (SEE RELATIVE PRONOUN COMMENT ABOVE) doesn’t give us enough time to think critically of what we’re watching (THIS SENTENCE IS VERY CLEAR BUT IT IS ALSO INCOMPLETE ACCORDING TO SWE GUIDELINES).
On a sidenote Professor, I’d like to ask if openlab does maintenance at 6-8am? I always have problems in these hours and my comment for last week’s assignment didn’t go through either.
I had the same issue professor. Sometimes my comments dosen’t go through even though i did do them
I’ve been having the same issues! I don’t have any information to share with you about OL maintenance, but please know I am aware of this issue. As a result of this, I will extend the deadline for this and future GAs to Saturday morning.
Thanks a lot professor, and thanks for the lesson on how to improve, to be honest I had to do it twice due to the shutting down of the website and I think my original was better.
1.Richtel, Matt. “Attached to Technology and Paying a Price.” The New York Times. The New York Times, 06 June 2010. Web. 19 Nov. 2014.
2. Tancockreadingonline, Susan M. “Reading Online.” Reading Online. Reading Online, n.d. Web. 21 Nov. 2014.
3. “Technology in Education.” – Education Week Research Center. Education Week, 1 Sept. 2011. Web. 21 Nov. 2014.
Each of my sources focuses on the main points of our technological advancements and how it has aided us in the classroom and in our social life. The New York Times article expresses one of the main concerns of our age, being too attached to our techs. That is supposed to represent the opposing sides points in our current age of technology. I wanted to introduce something different that the other side may point out and refute against my claims. Both of my other two sources speaks or my claims, that technology has in fact been a major contributor and game changer in our society.
Barry, This looks very good overall. However, I’m a bit confused by this bibliographic citation:
Tancockreadingonline, Susan M. “Reading Online.” Reading Online. Reading Online, n.d. Web. 21 Nov. 2014.
Is the author’s last name really “Tancockreadingonline”?
If you could also read through your paragraph again and make sure that 1/subjects and verbs are in agreement throughout your sentences, 2/ all pronouns agree with the nouns they refer to, and 3/ every sentence is complete according to the guidelines of SWE, I would greatly appreciate it. I’m looking forward to seeing the edited paragraph. Please post that separately. Thanks!
It was a typo, my apologies, it wasn’t supposed to be repeated 3 times. I dont know why it did that
Dear Barry, Eddie, Ping, and Nina,
I can’t thank you enough for these posts. I am really impressed with all of them and I’ll look forward to seeing the revised versions. Don’t hesitate to e-mail me if you have any questions.
All best,
Prof. Rodgers
Sources:
1. Schwartz, Katrina. “How Do Tech Tools Affect the Way Students Write?” MindShift. N.p., 16 July 2013. Web. 20 Nov. 2014.
2. Admin. “The Impact of Digital Tools on Student Writing and How Writing Is Taught in Schools.” Pew Research Centers Internet American Life Project RSS. N.p., 12 Mar. 2014. Web. 19 Nov. 2014.
3. O’Hara, Susan. “What Is the Impact of Technology on Learning?” Education.com. Pearson Allyn Bacon Prentice Hall, 13 Apr. 2014. Web. 21 Nov. 2014.
The sources I’ve gathered shows the affect of technology on reading and writing. The purpose of these sources are to evaluate my research question from different perspectives. This will allow me to get a wider scope as to how technology has an affect on reading/writing. There are major differences in purpose, tone, and style between the three sources I chose. For example, the second source presents many statistics as a means of demonstrating the affect of technology, whereas the first source discusses the use of tech tools in our reading and writing. The styles of all three sources are technical and informative.
Thanks, Cordeelia. These sources look great. Your description of the sources is also solid. Here are a few suggestions: 1/ please look up the usage of EFFECT and AFFECT (just FYI: I look these up myself at least once a week ;) ); 2/ please check your subject/verb agreement in the first two sentences. Something is off. ; 3/ I like this sentence a lot: “There are major differences in purpose, tone, and style AMONGST the three sources I chose.” However, at the end of the paragraph, you then write that “The styles of all three sources are technical and informative.” Are the styles similar or different? I’d like to know. Thanks.
MY SOURCES
(1) “Communication Changes with Technology, Social Media.” U N I V E R S Web. 20 Nov. 2014.
(2) “How Has Technology Changed Communication?” Brighthub Project Management. Web. 18 Nov. 2014.
http://www.brighthubpm.com/methods-strategies/79052-exploring-how-technology-has-changed-communication/
(3) “IS TECHNOLOGY AFFECTING READING AND WRITING? – Read Blog.” Read Blog. Web. 21 Nov. 2014
http://www.read.org.za/blog/2014/03/technology-affecting-reading-writing/
Each of my sources address how technology is affecting our reading and writing skills and therefore its changing the way we think. Each speaks on how it’s affecting our communication skills through technology with its pros and cons, some say that it will make us more anti social since we will most of the time be depending on speaking to someone through a screen or just by text, while some say it’s a great way to have the world on your finger tips because at any moment you can become familiar with your surroundings by just having a simple device at all times.
1.) Barinka, Alex.”Runway Fashions for Sale, Sooner Than Ever”. Business Week. 18 September 2014. Web. 17 November 2014. http://www.businessweek.com/articles/2014-09-18/rewardstyles-instagram-tool-dispatches-runway-fashions-fast
2.) Clifford, Stephanie. “High Fashion Relents to Web’s Pull”. NY Times. 11 July 2010. Web. 21 November 2014.
3.) Lin, Liza. “Shhh … Luxury Goods Are Discounted in China”. Business Week. 21 August 2014. Web. 17 November 2014.
The articles above share one common topic and that is how luxury fashion companies have had to adjust to technology in order to survive. The first article explains how a start up company, RewardStyle, uses the social media app Instagram to generate high end sales. They are able to deliver high end fashions straight from the runway to their consumers in half the time they would receive it before with their other competitors. the second article shows how luxury fashion houses have had to resort to using their websites to make sales. By doing so, they were able to increase sales of their luxury goods. The last article has less to do with technology than the others listed. The article shows how the wealthy in China purchase more luxury goods from European luxury brand names than that of those in America. Due to new taxes on imported goods, they in turn make trips to Europe to buy the goods they want there. This results in the luxury stores in China having to mark down their prices of their inventory.
3.) http://www.businessweek.com/articles/2014-08-21/in-china-luxury-brands-cut-prices-amid-sales-slowdown
Adia,
Could you re-post your GA11?
Thanks.
Prof. Rodgers
I tried re-posting my GA11 twice but a message attached to my comment says, “your comment is awaiting moderation”. I took a screenshot of the message so I can show it to you tomorrow. I honestly thought it needed to just take some time to upload.
1.) Barinka, Alex.”Runway Fashions for Sale, Sooner Than Ever”. Business Week. 18 September 2014. Web. 17 November 2014. http://www.businessweek.com/articles/2014-09-18/rewardstyles-instagram-tool-dispatches-runway-fashions-fast
2.) Clifford, Stephanie. “High Fashion Relents to Web’s Pull”. NY Times. 11 July 2010. Web. 21 November 2014.
3.) Lin, Liza. “Shhh … Luxury Goods Are Discounted in China”. Business Week. 21 August 2014. Web. 17 November 2014.
http://www.businessweek.com/articles/2014-08-21/in-china-luxury-brands-cut-prices-amid-sales-slowdown
The articles above share one common topic and that is how luxury fashion companies have had to adjust to technology in order to survive. The first article explains how a start up company, RewardStyle, uses the social media app Instagram to generate high end sales. They are able to deliver high end fashions straight from the runway to their consumers in half the time they would receive it before with their other competitors. the second article shows how luxury fashion houses have had to resort to using their websites to make sales. By doing so, they were able to increase sales of their luxury goods. The last article has less to do with technology than the others listed. The article shows how the wealthy in China purchase more luxury goods from European luxury brand names than that of those in America. Due to new taxes on imported goods, they in turn make trips to Europe to buy the goods they want there. This results in the luxury stores in China having to mark down their prices of their inventory.
1.) Barinka, Alex.”Runway Fashions for Sale, Sooner Than Ever”. Business Week. 18 September 2014. Web. 17 November 2014. http://www.businessweek.com/articles/2014-09-18/rewardstyles-instagram-tool-dispatches-runway-fashions-fast
2.) Clifford, Stephanie. “High Fashion Relents to Web’s Pull”. NY Times. 11 July 2010. Web. 21 November 2014.
3.) Lin, Liza. “Shhh … Luxury Goods Are Discounted in China”. Business Week. 21 August 2014. Web. 17 November 2014.
http://www.businessweek.com/articles/2014-08-21/in-china-luxury-brands-cut-prices-amid-sales-slowdown
The articles above share one common topic and that is how luxury fashion companies have had to adjust to technology in order to survive. The first article explains how a start up company, RewardStyle, uses the social media app Instagram to generate high end sales. They are able to deliver high end fashions straight from the runway to their consumers in half the time they would receive it before with their other competitors. the second article shows how luxury fashion houses have had to resort to using their websites to make sales. By doing so, they were able to increase sales of their luxury goods. The last article has less to do with technology than the others listed. The article shows how the wealthy in China purchase more luxury goods from European luxury brand names than that of those in America. Due to new taxes on imported goods, they in turn make trips to Europe to buy the goods they want there. This results in the luxury stores in China having to mark down their prices of their inventory.
Three sources
1:Chelsea Clinton and James P. Steyer, “Is the Internet hurting children?” CNN.COM, published/updated on Monday May 21, 2012. accessed 11-24-14
http://www.cnn.com/2012/05/21/opinion/clinton-steyer-internet-kids/
2: Matt Richtel, “Attached to Technology and Paying a Price.” The New York Times. published on 06 June 2010. accessed 11-24-14
3: Jim Taylor, “How Technology is Changing the Way Children Think and Focus.”
published on December 4, 2012. accessed 11-24-14
http://www.psychologytoday.com/blog/the-power-prime/201212/how-technology-is-changing-the-way-children-think-and-focus
The sources iv gathered all show the positives and as well as negatives impacts of modern day technology on our thinking. there’s major difference in sources, source 2, 3 counter arguments source 1 but over all they present the realities of technology affecting our brain and how to deal with this bliss/curse.
Thanks, Adia! I’m so sorry about not seeing that your comment required moderation. I’ll look for it now.