PAPER FORMATTING
INNER/OUTER DIALOGUES:
Your next assignment is a formal submission of those Inner/Outer Dialogues that you have been transcribing in your portable notebooks. You can decide which ones to include, as long as they meet our word count requirement. Most important: You’ll want your dialogues to be easily read. Hence, I suggest using a few words of location or setting–this can be very brief–using italics. As long as your format is consistent, the reader will understand and be able to hear the different “voices” (whether they are inner or outer). There are a number of ways you can do this. Most will make the dialogue you are transcribing look a little bit like a play. Here are some examples to get you started. (All were taken from actual dialogues read aloud in my class. These are snippets. Yours may be much longer.)
Dialogue Example:

Number 4 Train. Sept. 9. 4:00 PM exactly.

An older black woman gets on the train. She begins to interact with a younger man, in his 20s, who is travelling with me. The young man offers the lady a seat.

YOUNG MAN: Would you like to sit, Miss?

OLDER WOMAN: Thank you so much, young man. I hope you are blessed today.

[pause]

Are you getting ready for G-d’s return?

YOUNG MAN: I’m not sure if I agree with you now.

OLDER WOMAN: [Looks puzzled] What do you mean? You don’t believe in G-d?

YOUNG MAN: How do you know I’m not Jesus?

Oh my G-d, not again! (I am grinning to myself). This always happens with him.

YM: I fit the description, don’t I?

OW: And what description is that, young man? Enlighten me.

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The Train. #2. 3:56PM. The train is full, but no one is speaking. Only sounds can be heard.

Swish. [A lady brushes her purse with her hand]

Crackle. [A boy is drinking from a plastic water bottle]

Squeak.

Pop.

Bzzz.

Brrrrrrrrrr. Clack. Ding-Dong.

“Blah, blah, blah.” (That’s all I heard.)

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The #2 Train 3:56PM.

Swish

Crackle Squeak.

Pop!

 Bzzz.

Brrrrrrrrrr.

 Clack.

Ding-Dong!!!

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9:38AM. L Train. First Avenue, going towards Manhattan/Queens.
The train is crowded. An unidentified female speaks.

“Scoot in, these people are just trying to get to work. There’s like, hella space here.”
[No one moves. She goes on speaking to herself, more softly.]
“No one?”
[The crowd still doesn’t move.]
“Okay.”
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Example:
7AM. At the Church Avenue F and G train stations. There are a bunch of upset people who act like they are late for work or school. A man in a suit keeps checking his watch and looking down the tunnel for the train coming.
Man in Suit: “Where the heck is the train?”
Woman In Red Nearby [while staring at me, writing]: “I have no idea what I’m going to do.”
There is a group of children running down to the other side of the platform. They are about 9 or 10 years old, on average.
I hope that the Woman in Red is not getting mad at me.
Now, there is a train arriving. The green reflection of the trains shows that it is a G Train. Everyone returns to their positions, upset.
Man in Suit: “Oh my god, where is this damned train?!” (He yells as if it will make the train come faster.)
Surprisingly, the train is now arriving. Man in Suit rushes to the exact spot where the door will open.
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Example:
7 Train. 7:40PM. A man of around 19 is standing, holding the pole. He talks to another man who appears to be his friend.

First Guy: I broke up with my girlfriend. She flirted with other guys. Basically, cheating on me. I wasted six months with her, and this is what I got.

Second Guy: Damn, I feel bad for you. Wasn’t she your first girlfriend?

etc. etc.

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Example;  The speakers are not identified, but they are always indicated by quotation marks. Interior dialogue is indicated with regular font:
7 Train. 7:40PM. A man of around 19 is standing, holding the pole. He talks to another man who appears to be his friend.
“Only wanted a girlfriend to just have.”

“You picked wrong.”

Gosh, these people are having a tough day. I wish I didn’t have to sit here.
“Why did you even go out with her?”
I wonder what he’s going to say now. Oh no.
“Man, you always choose the wrong girl.”
etc etc.
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Midnight. Starbucks on Madison Avenue and 57th Street, Manhattan.
I wish I’d never left the house. No one is sitting near me, but there are a number of people at the other end of the room. Man, it’s pretty empty. I feel kind of self conscious, writing in the corner. I am drinking tea.
“Hi, could I get a macchiato?”
“Vente or grande?”
“Vente”
Why can I hear the people at the counter, even though I’m so far away? I wonder….
[Music. “Uptown Funk.” Again?!] “Julio, get the stretch!”
“Um, I asked for a vente and this is a grande. Can you please get my order right?”
Wow, this woman is picky. Why is she even ordering a coffee at midnight anyway; doesn’t she ever want to sleep? My herbal tea is getting cold.
“We show up when we show up – smoother than a fresh jar o skippy…”
“Here’s your change.”
“Um, okay.”
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