Jaouad Mouao
- He gave a good opener with a quote from Dylan Thomas
- His thesis was clear and the topics are lost love, memories and death.
- In his subtopics, he is discussing the two poems “Annabel Lee” and “The Raven.
- You can tell where the paragraphs change topics, but could have been separated more.
- His transitions were good. Could use better transitional phrases.
- Most grammar and conventions were good, minor punctuation issues. Quotations were used and placed correctly.
- The conclusion did restate the thesis and flowed through into the lead out sentence. The lead out sentence did involve the two poems and their comparison.