Alex Chao
7 Points of Peer Review
- Opener
- Opener included a quote with the name of the person who wrote it.
- Thesis w/ 3 subtopics
- Thesis was clear on topic and the three subtopics.
- 3 subtopic paragraphs
- The body paragraphs were separated by the three subtopics.
- Topic sentences
- Each subtopic paragraph started off with the topic sentence.
- Transitional phrases
- Was clear on each topic, but could have had better transition into each one.
- Grammar and Conventions
- There were a good amount of punctuation errors. Run-on sentences and some sentences needed to be reworded.
- Conclusion w/ restated thesis and a lead-out
- In the conclusion, he restated his thesis, but the paragraph was too short. He needs to add more to it. The lead-out sentence needs to also be reworded, it doesn’t tie into the paper so much.