seven points of peer review

Opener- the quote he used to lead into his essay was very motivational

Thesis- he used his thesis very well in order to incorporate his quote

Subtopics- all of the subtopic paragraphs start with a sentence explaining what is going to be discussed in that single paragraph

Quotes- he used his quotes and personal experience in a way that is very emotional

Transitional phrases- not many transitional phrases were mad the essay would be made to flow much easier if they were used

Grammar- I could not see any glaring problems in grammar

Conclusion – the conclusion restated thesis nicely and it closes out very emotionally