The essay that I would like to revise is my Lens essay. I would like to add more information to each paragraphs and revising one more time will make me find errors that would be corrected. I would also like to write a strong controversy In the essay. Furthermore, I would like to specify and give more evidence for each weak paragraph. I also needed more time to organize my thoughts to write a well developed essay. I need to do more research about my Exhibit that connects to my lens.

The internet has made our life easier, less time taking and effective. Besides the addiction to the net or the mal use, the internet has big effects on our society.  In addition, new technologies bring new methods and effective stuff to the society for example before to be able to know what is going around in the world, you had to go make lots of researches. However, now a days the idea of the media is to give the faciltity to know what is going around just using the network, it creates enormous positive effects.Shirky showed me something that i never knew, there is more freedom in the net , the freedpm of speech and press. The internet doesnt make you smarter however, it makes the future worth.

In my rough draft of R.A i had some troubles with quotes and putting proper details as well. The weakness while writing the essay is writing important information that grabs the audience attention. In addition, the hardest part is grammar and also run outs sentences. The positive side of my writing is organizing. there is more negative features in my writing , that i have to fix for the final draft.

” I have a dream” by Martin luther king jr speech deliver us about the injustices of segregation and discrimination of African American people that took place in united states. Dr. kings “i have a dream” speech interests me because the speech was for the people that needed to fight for equal rights, which made gathered them together and strong. A rhetorical analysis he uses in the speech is promises. African American were tired of promises which led them to believe that time was gonna give them freedom. Dr. king’s did not believe in promises because it was all about actions. Non violent actions. The promise of the constitution that gives equal rights to everyone, was only given to white folks.

Author Sherman J. Alexie, a young native amererican is influenced by the superman comic bookto improve his living standard. The book teaches him to be optimistic, to breakdown doors of struggle. He lived in a native american reservation, where they were isolated from others. However, he tried to see things further, he learned to read and write at young age. In the society he lived it was fine to fail in school as a indian however he was smart and he never failed. His perseverance led him to become a writer, and teach others from the reservation. Terry MacMillan had a tough life growing up.  She grew up in a small industrial town in Michigan. She and her family where very poor and unhappy. The first time she watched the movie “the wizard of oz” was in white and black color. The movie changed her life, it made her thought about escaping from the chaotic and isolated place to find happiness. She never saw people around her happy , the only time was when they were drunk. Her mother was domineering , she could not never question her. further more many times she felt helpless and powerless because she had no control over her situation. the movie made her want to leave the unhappy place and go to the other side of the world. It influenced her to move on that there are better things out there, She knew  how unfairly things can be but somehow always turn out good. In her life negativity had turn into optimistic.

Both Alexie and McMlillan both talk about dealing with struggles growing up. They both use nonfiction dramas, such as the superman comic book and “the wizard of oz”. It helps them to   break down doors from poverty, and racism. The superman comic book helps the young indian to be a hero and save all of their lives to become better by reading and writing and also teaching. McMillan shows us how unhappy she grew up, through out all the movie changed her view of living. To move on and find a place where she can feel happy. In addition, they are different because super and me is about education and learning to overcome obstacles with education. In the other hand McMillan talks about poverty, and how she free her self not depending on nobody, all the courage was obtained from the movie.