Dorian’s Re-Vision Process

To me the revision process has helped me exponentially throughout my life. Though, the way it was done in class was a little different. Through our peer revision, getting their opinions was a very smart way to get our writing to improve. My partner for peer review did an excellent job at opening my eyes to an improved way of writing. He told me that I complicate the meaning of a phrase. In other words, I say things and make them longer than they should be or, excessive writing. For example, in my writing about the ā€œI Have a Dreamā€ speech I said, ā€œā€¦written and told by Dr. Martin Luther King Jrā€. I learned that I didnā€™t have to say ā€œwritten and told by Dr. Martin Luther King Jr.ā€, all I had to say was ā€œā€¦written by Dr. Kingā€, lessening the complexity of the sentence.

Another, thing I learned from peer review was that I state things and donā€™t follow up with the complete statement in the same sentence. For example, ā€œā€¦it speaks of a certain issue that needs to be addressed at the time, before it gets worstā€. I didnā€™t state the issues I was talking about in the same sentence. This might lead to confusion for the reader. Say the reader only reads up to this point, the reader will get confused as to what the issues are. Also, if they can lead to the issues getting worst why not immediately state it. Peer review is one of the best strategies to improve your writing.

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