During the re-vision exercise, I found out there are a lot of things I need to correct. Peer review is a good idea because I can saw how was my partner’s essay different form mine, and I realize there are so much stuff I can write about. So much ideas are hard to think up, but when look at others it is become so easy and I keep thinking why I can’t think that up before. When I got back my essay, I saw so many mistakes that I never realize. Of course, it is my own writing, I understand what I am write about. But other who read my essay may not. So I need to make sure my writing is clear and understandable. It is kind of short of my easy, so I need to make sure I did develop my idea as much as I can. First, I know that I need to check my grammar again and again. Second, I need to think deeply to the choice I choose. Last, I need to revise my essay again. Also, in my peer’s comment I know I writed  to much specific details. That may look like a summary. For the positive part of my writing are the explanation of the metaphot, it was well written.