The essay that I would like to revise is my Lens essay because, I would like to incorporate and add information or revise the information already provided. I would also like to write/make a stronger claim as in why or how the internet makes us lazier and less effective in education. In other words, I would like to be more specific and make each paragraph lengthier and stronger. I also needed more time to organize my thoughts to write a well developed essay where I can express my full well organized thoughts and incorporate my ideas and stick to ONE claim. Furthermore, after this revision my paper should be much stronger and more realistic within the topic of its own.