The re-vision process is showing me how to improve my writing skills going forward with both positive and negative features.  A couple of positive features was giving a lot of evidence, being very descriptive. My partner said I provided sufficient background to my central topic and delivered logical organization throughout the paper. I was very detailed and was told that I grabbed his attention making him want to read more because of how well he was able to fully understand what I was trying to deliver. Although it was nice to hear my amazing feedback I was also fortunate enough to receive some criticism to help better my writing skills for the future. I summarized too much in my first paragraph and some of my sentences were too detailed, jumbled together without taking any breaks. It was also a bit too confusing when I kept quoting and did not cite where I got the information from. Also my rhetorical device was mistaken because I did not make it clear in my first paragraph. When I write I sometimes get so overwhelmed in making sure I include all the information that my work ends up containing too much information it is even overpowering for the reader making it unclear. I found the rhetorical analysis peer review to be very helpful and will take this criticism into consideration and apply it to my work. For my final draft I will make sure I add the corrections needed in order to ensure my essay is the best version of itself.

After the peer review last class, the advice that my partner gave was really helped me a lot. I realized that the mistakes that I made weren’t major, but they were definitely mistakes that shouldn’t have happened. That’s why it’s a positive to revise your work and have other go over your work as well. It’s all to make your work better so you can get a better grade. Also it’s to help you learn from your mistakes so you make the same mistakes in other essays. The process also helps you look at your strengths and your weaknesses. During the process, some strengths my partner pointed out was that I provided a background of the central topic and made it clear on which rhetorical choice I chose, He told me that it wasn’t a bad essay at all but the mistakes that were made could have made the essay a lot better. A weakness that my partner pointed out to me was that some ideas in the essay weren’t clear and/or incomplete.Another weakness was that I didn’t organize my paragraphs and I didn’t include my opinion in the essay. Just small mistakes that shouldn’t have happened. Those suggestions should help my essay better and that’s why i don’t really find this process to have any negatives. It’s not to bash you or to change your ideas, it’s just to give you ideas on how to make your essay perfect. We all can improve our work and make our essays better by revising our essays and getting opinions and ideas frpm others.

In my rough draft of R.A i had some troubles with quotes and putting proper details as well. The weakness while writing the essay is writing important information that grabs the audience attention. In addition, the hardest part is grammar and also run outs sentences. The positive side of my writing is organizing. there is more negative features in my writing , that i have to fix for the final draft.

To me the revision process has helped me exponentially throughout my life. Though, the way it was done in class was a little different. Through our peer revision, getting their opinions was a very smart way to get our writing to improve. My partner for peer review did an excellent job at opening my eyes to an improved way of writing. He told me that I complicate the meaning of a phrase. In other words, I say things and make them longer than they should be or, excessive writing. For example, in my writing about the “I Have a Dream” speech I said, “…written and told by Dr. Martin Luther King Jr”. I learned that I didn’t have to say “written and told by Dr. Martin Luther King Jr.”, all I had to say was “…written by Dr. King”, lessening the complexity of the sentence.

Another, thing I learned from peer review was that I state things and don’t follow up with the complete statement in the same sentence. For example, “…it speaks of a certain issue that needs to be addressed at the time, before it gets worst”. I didn’t state the issues I was talking about in the same sentence. This might lead to confusion for the reader. Say the reader only reads up to this point, the reader will get confused as to what the issues are. Also, if they can lead to the issues getting worst why not immediately state it. Peer review is one of the best strategies to improve your writing.

The re-vision process has helped me to see my strength in writing, yet I am also learning about some existing weaknesses as well. A particular, positive feature I’ve noticed about my writing through the re-vision process is the ability to make an outline that contains key points of what I am about to write. Before rushing into writing an essay, I would take a step back, and compile my ideas together. I Picture an outline being like a skeleton, and the essay or the information being like the meat or tissue of the outline or skeleton. At the end, it all comes to life. The re-vision process has also helped me to detect a couple of weaknesses within my writing, but for the sake of time, I will consider just one thing that I can improve on, that being unpacking. In other words, I could be more specific or detailed in my summary about someone or something. I need to improve in elaborating in fine detail what it is I am referring to. This being brought to my attention has helped me to ask myself questions such as, who, why, what and where. Doing this has assisted me in incorporating the necessary details or unpacking, which affords the reader the opportunity to have a clearer understanding of my essay. Overall, the re-vision process has been nothing but enlightening. Not only has it helped me to sharpen my writing skills, but it has also increased my appreciation for the writers and the value that comes along with their words.