During the re-vision exercise, I found out there are a lot of things I need to correct. Peer review is a good idea because I can saw how was my partner’s essay different form mine, and I realize there are so much stuff I can write about. So much ideas are hard to think up, but when look at others it is become so easy and I keep thinking why I can’t think that up before. When I got back my essay, I saw so many mistakes that I never realize. Of course, it is my own writing, I understand what I am write about. But other who read my essay may not. So I need to make sure my writing is clear and understandable. It is kind of short of my easy, so I need to make sure I did develop my idea as much as I can. First, I know that I need to check my grammar again and again. Second, I need to think deeply to the choice I choose. Last, I need to revise my essay again. Also, in my peer’s comment I know I writed  to much specific details. That may look like a summary. For the positive part of my writing are the explanation of the metaphot, it was well written.

The revision process brought a new perspective into the light for my essay. It allowed me to see the weak and strong points of my essay to see where improvement is needed most. The negative feature that my partner helped me look through was that my ideas were going off from one rhetorical feature to another and that they could use a better transition. In my draft, I had started off by talking about religious allusions but in then I start to talk about historical allusions. I had mistaken Dr. King when he talks about Nazism, as a religious illusion, but in fact, that was historical allusions and therefore didn’t fall under the rhetorical feature of religious allusions. I also realized that the structure of my essay could use some improvement to as I lay out the information for the reader and It should be easy to follow through. This was helpful since the whole essay is based on the rhetorical features that Dr. Martin Luther King uses in his letter from Birmingham jail to break through to the audience. If my partner had not pointed out this mistake, it would have led to me writing the essay in which the central point of the essay would not have been clear for the audience. These exercises allow a reader to improve their writing because there is always room for improvement.

As a writer mistakes aren’t seen until you make some edits, even then you might not see any because it’s you’re writing. My peer edits have taught me that I no transition words and unclear statements. For example the beginning is hard to understand because it is hard to understand what is the main point I am trying to get across to the reader. Also I did not quote correctly, giving the page number from where I got this quote. I know that when I am writing I move very fast not thinking about the flow of my sentences. When I am writing to many thoughts are going on in my head I am thinking about every paragraph and what is going to be put into it. I know that I need to take one step at a time, which make writing much easier.  There are some positives in my writing, I give good quotes that goes along with what I am talking about. My grammar is decent. I have some things to work on but that takes practice and sometimes it is the inpatients that gets to me. There are many ways to help by asking teachers for extra help or seek out different tutors to get a general idea of what your specific writing style can be. I feel as if grammar and sentence structure is my greatest defeat when it comes to writing.  This is hard skill to work on but hopefully with some practice comes perfect.

Throughout the re-vision process, I was able to see a few positive and negative features of my own writing skills. When you are writing you must be patient and make sure that everything you are writing is clear. This is to ensure that the reader will be able follow your ideas smoothly. One of my positive features of writing is organization. I thought that I introduced my ideas well and explained them carefully enough so that people can read and stay on track. When an essay is organized it is clear, focus and effective so that the reader has an understanding of the thesis. Even though I am good with the sequence of my essays, I still need to improve on my grammar and proofreading. Grammar must always be correct in order to clearly communicate your message to others. If your grammar is incorrect, you may begin to make things unclear and confuse the reader. As a result, you may want to look back and do some proof reading. This helps you look over everything you are writing in order to find any mistakes or errors you might not have seen the first time you were writing. Using the re-vision process is good for a many number of reasons. You are able to see what strengths you have in writing, as well as the weaknesses. It is very helpful to know and be aware of the weaknesses you have so than you can work on improving them for the future.

After looking at the revision made on my work I realized my strong and weak point when it comes to writing. I notice that I need to stay focus on a main topic and build on it. I tend to be all over the place in my writing and I need to be more chronological instead of bring information from all over the text. When I give too much information at once it causes the reader to be confused and possibly not understand the rest of my essay. I also, need a better understanding of rhetorical analysis. My interpretation of it was that I am to help the reader understand what Dr. King is trying to say indirectly. I was confused with this because I didn’t understand the references Dr. King was trying to make. It reflected in my writing but I did seem to done a good job explaining the overall points Dr. King was trying to make. I faulted when failed to explain the rhetorical choices he used. Without the revision I wouldn’t have noticed that I have a tendency to join complete sentence, confuse the reader and make careless grammar mistakes. The revision helped me realize that I’m good at collecting important information I just need to work on applying the right way and play close attention to my grammar. To overcome this obstacle I’m going to make a checklist that I can use to review my work and continuously reread my writing.