Thanks for your hard work today.  A few notes:

-Please look over my feedback on Essay 1, and feel free to see me on Wednesday during office hours (1:30-3:30, Pearl 410) if you have further questions.

-Begin writing your draft of Essay 2.

-Complete the Summary and Response: (Re)Shaping Sentences worksheet.

-Bring the Sample Rhetorical Analysis Essay (under Readings), both King readings, and your completed Summary + Response (Re)Shaping Sentences worksheet to class. Reading the Sample RA Essay before class is highly recommended but not required.

-Consider revising Essay 1 and submitting it as a Personal Essay, to the Judith Walter category of the LAF Writing Competition: openlab.citytech.cuny.edu/literaryartsfestival

-Remember, you should expect to spend up to 3-4 hours on homework and prepping for class!

Finally, here’s some notes from our Lab today: the sample Outline on Why We Don’t Write Outlines, and the sample outlines with “bad”/inconsistent Step 2 sentences.

 

Why we don’t outline:

 

• Time constraints

• We think we know what we’re going to say

• As you’re writing, you “think as you go” – the ideas flow better that way

• Outlining is better because… (ensures each paragraph has a point)

 

What’s wrong with the following outlines?  Identify the “wrong” Step 2 sentence.

Oxygen is essential for life.

-It helps keep trees alive.

-People need it to breathe.

-It helps to start fires (OFF-TOPIC – fire threatens life!)

Football practice is exhausting.

-You run until you’re so tired you can hardly move.

-You drive people out of the way until your legs feel like rubber.

-Afterwards you’re so tired you don’t feel like doing homework.  (CAUSE IS NOT EFFECT)

Painting a Room requires care.

-Preparing the room for painting requires care.

-Cleaning up afterward requires care.  (Not about the CENTRAL ACTION; WRONG SEQUENCE)

-Applying the paint requires care.

 

Best,

Professor Kwong