Thanks for your hard work today. Â A few notes:
-Please look over my feedback on Essay 1, and feel free to see me on Wednesday during office hours (1:30-3:30, Pearl 410) if you have further questions.
-Begin writing your draft of Essay 2.
-Complete the Summary and Response: (Re)Shaping Sentences worksheet.
-Bring the Sample Rhetorical Analysis Essay (under Readings), both King readings, and your completed Summary + Response (Re)Shaping Sentences worksheet to class. Reading the Sample RA Essay before class is highly recommended but not required.
-Consider revising Essay 1 and submitting it as a Personal Essay, to the Judith Walter category of the LAF Writing Competition: openlab.citytech.cuny.edu/literaryartsfestival
-Remember, you should expect to spend up to 3-4 hours on homework and prepping for class!
Finally, here’s some notes from our Lab today: the sample Outline on Why We Don’t Write Outlines, and the sample outlines with “bad”/inconsistent Step 2 sentences.
Why we donât outline:
- We think we know what weâre going to say
- As youâre writing, you âthink as you goâ – the ideas flow better that way
- Outlining is better because⌠(ensures each paragraph has a point)
Whatâs wrong with the following outlines? Â Identify the âwrongâ Step 2 sentence.
Oxygen is essential for life.
-It helps keep trees alive.
-People need it to breathe.
-It helps to start fires (OFF-TOPIC – fire threatens life!)
Football practice is exhausting.
-You run until youâre so tired you can hardly move.
-You drive people out of the way until your legs feel like rubber.
-Afterwards youâre so tired you donât feel like doing homework. Â (CAUSE IS NOT EFFECT)
Painting a Room requires care.
-Preparing the room for painting requires care.
-Cleaning up afterward requires care. Â (Not about the CENTRAL ACTION; WRONG SEQUENCE)
-Applying the paint requires care.
Best,
Professor Kwong