ENG 1121 Composition 2, Fall 2024, Section D533

Author: S Prado

S Prado’s PSA

October 16, 2024 / / 0 Comments

Week 2

Brainstorm idea:

Safety improvements in motorsports. Even to this day severe accidents still occur in motorsports. Every year a driver is severely injured or forced to retire or even worse. Safety in motorsports has come along way, now we have designed computers and computer models, testing, and much more. But wouldn’t it be even better if AI can help improve, not only these tools, but also safety in motorsports.

Topic ideas:

With the power of AI we can still improve if not add a new dimension to these categories;

  • Improved vehicle design/safety
  • Helmet and headgear safety
  • Predictive crash prevention
  • Driver biometric monitoring
  • Improved training and development

Two PSAs

Two articles about safety in motorsports

Week 3
Title: Motorsports and a new perspective with AI


Version 1 – My own handwriting

Motorsports is thrilling. The speed, the skill, the, story, the competitive nature, it’s what makes races exciting to witness. But behind all the glitz and glamour and prestige, there’s a lot going on behind the scenes to keep the show running safe and smoothly. As an example, the helmets aren’t just designed to protect anymore, now, it’s designed using AI simulations to predict impacts and improve overall build and construction as best as possible. The cars themselves now monitor every minute detail in real time to see the health of the car. Even the drivers health is tracked as well using biometrics sensors that can detect if a driver is injured or as some sort of bodily problem. Safety in motorsports isn’t stagnating anymore, with the help of AI we can continue to innovate and improve the sport as a whole.

Version 2

Prompt: Rewrite the following PSA to be grammatically correct, as well as being smoother, and correct any other mistakes as well.

Motorsports are thrilling. The speed, the skill, the stories, and the competitive spirit make races exciting to witness. But behind all the glitz, glamour, and prestige, there’s a lot happening behind the scenes to keep everything running safely and smoothly. For example, helmets are no longer just designed to protect—they’re now developed using AI simulations to predict impacts and optimize their construction. Cars themselves monitor every minute detail in real time to assess their mechanical health. Even drivers’ health is tracked through biometric sensors that can detect injuries or other physical issues. Safety in motorsports is no longer stagnant. With the help of AI, we continue to innovate and enhance the sport as a whole.

Version 3

Prompt: Now rewrite this same PSA but this time for an 11th grader with an average understanding of cars and AI.

Motorsports are exciting because of the speed, the skills of the drivers, and the competitive spirit. But behind all the action, there’s a lot of effort to keep everything safe and running smoothly. For example, helmets aren’t just made to protect anymore—they’re designed using AI to predict impacts and make them stronger. The cars also have real-time monitoring to keep track of their condition. Even drivers’ health is checked using sensors that can detect injuries or other problems. Thanks to AI, safety in motorsports keeps improving, making the sport better for everyone.

Reflection

Originally when making this PSA I was just making it to benefit myself as I’m already well known to the world of motorsports. But now looking at things, this would be a great opportunity for me show people my admiration for motorsports as well as show off the technology that the sport has to offer, primarily with its safety. At first I had trouble deciding what I should talk about since I didn’t really have any “concerns” about the world, but I ultimately decided on safety in motorsports using AI, because it’s something I can educate people on and something I am very familiar with.

In regard to my first attempt with ChatGPT, I asked it to basically correct and smooth out my PSA, and it does its job but not in a drastic way. Even in my handwritten PSA I already knew what points I wanted to get across, so when I asked ChatGPT to rewrite my PSA in the prompt I wanted, it changed my PSA very little. But in terms of the stuff it did fix it did a few, for example, it my 5th sentence, the “example”, it made the sentence more professional, using a double hyphen. In addition to this, the final three sentences are well improved in terms of structure and punctuation.

In my opinion, the third attempt had a more impactful difference. I asked the ChatGPT to rewrite the previous PSA to the language of an 11th grader with an average knowledge of cars. This one, I like more, because it makes my PSA a lot more understandable to the average person who doesn’t know much about motorsports and its terminologies. The PSA is also a lot shorter than in my first attempt, making a lot easier to read not only for me but for someone else as well.  The third attempt also gets all the points in the PSA across without being to long nor too short.

Cornerstone articles

Question

What improvements has AI done to the world of motorsports?

Call-to-Action

Did you know? Many safety features in your car—like Traction Control, ESC, and ABS—actually originated from the racetrack. Drive confidently, knowing motorsports innovation is keeping you safe every day!

Week 4: Final PSA

Title: Motorsports and a New Perspective with AI

Key question: What safety features in motorsports has AI improved?

PSA:

Motorsports is thrilling. The speed, the skill, the, story, the competitive nature, it’s what makes races exciting to witness. But behind all the glitz and glamour and prestige, there’s a lot going on behind the scenes to keep the show running safe and smoothly. As an example, the helmets aren’t just designed to protect anymore, now, it’s designed using AI simulations to predict impacts and improve overall build and construction as best as possible. The cars themselves now monitor every minute detail in real time to see the health of the car. Even the drivers health is tracked as well using biometrics sensors that can detect if a driver is injured or as some sort of bodily problem. Safety in motorsports isn’t stagnating anymore, with the help of AI we can continue to innovate and improve the sport as a whole.

Call-to-action: Did you know? Many safety features in your car—like Traction Control, ESC, and ABS—actually originated from the racetrack. Drive confidently, knowing motorsports innovation is keeping you safe every day!

For more information read articles below!

Reflection:

This PSA I did was for the most part, enjoyable but exhausting at the same time, I was already knowledgeable with the subject of motorsports and its safety, given the fact that I’ve been around the sport ever since I was kid, I even had a go kart as a child for a number of years. And I actually attended the 2006, 2007, and 2008 Brazilian Grand Prix, fun fact. The enjoyable parts of the PSA was that I wasn’t lost in terms of what I wanted to talk about, it was very easy for me to do, however, the exhausting part for me was getting all my references and organizing everything.

As previously mentioned, I’m already familiar with motorsports and its safety advancements, so I had no problem researching specific information or even heading in specific direction. However, I did have trouble finding references. AI in motorsports is a relatively new field to research, so I couldn’t find articles like these on the New York Times or other similar newsletters. I actually found my cornerstone articles just by googling “AI improvements in motorsports” and got two good articles, likewise on YouTube for two videos that I liked. In terms of organization, I am a professional procrastinator, I’m in the hall of fame of procrastinators. That was my biggest obstacle in this project was organizing everything I had, I wrote everything first on my notes app and then I would copy and paste everything into Open Labs.

Talking about learning, while researching, I didn’t know that AI improvements in motorsports isn’t just limited to the car, it also is equally advancing along with driver safety. I didn’t think AI was being implemented or used in both car and driver at the same rate.

I think if I had another week I would’ve used it to organize everything properly, that was my biggest headache, I’m not a naturally organized when it comes to work, so having another would’ve given me a lot of breathing room considering the fact that this final week of this project coincides with my mid-term tests.

What I learned about AI is that it works very well at summarizing and organizing text that you present it. I’ve been using AI since September of last year and I’m very satisfied that you can also use the system to answer any question you present it with, regardless of difficulty and length. I was also relieved to find out that when using ChatGPT the system didn’t struggle with extremely long text, like in the triple digits of word counts, and actually got great responses, I kept iterating and kept getting better and clearer responses from the system. Overall, the system greatly surprised me with this project.

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References

 

“Perfect and Unrehearsed” by Stephen Prado

October 10, 2024 / / 1 Comment

In Teju Coles’s photo essay, my favorite picture I would like to say is of “A young Haitian man grieving  at the funeral of his mother in Port-au-Prince, Haiti.” In my opinion, this is a documentary photo, judging by the fact that the photo was taken at the moment a group of people are holding back the grieving man. Something that struck me has more to do with the background, this appears to be taken in a residential area, or at least a public setting, it has a large crowd of people indicating that the grieving man’s mother was very well known to people in that area. And with that, I’d like to represent my narrative of this photo. While yes, I can say that this photo shows the separation of a mother and son, it is correct, but I won’t do that, that’s too easy. How I see this photo is a much more a gathering, it shows that a common death in a group can bring everyone together to remember a great person in their life. The fact that people went out of their way to hold a public funeral for the grieving man’s mom shows the impact that that woman had in their life.

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