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Okay, so you’re writing your research project, right? What do you do if you have sources that don’t agree? Panic? Slam your computer? Delete your research project?

No! Of course, none of these.

Having sources that disagree is a wonderful thing. You must have different viewpoints, right? If all of your sources agreed on something, why would you be writing about it? If you are writing about a topic that everyone agrees on, then the topic is not worth writing about.

However, the trick is weaving your sources into coherent paragraphs so that you can clearly demonstrate how your sources are different. See the example below of a paragraph that shows there are two different sides two an issue:

I am of two minds about whether or not monogamy is “natural” or not. On one hand, religious values dictate that monogamy must be upheld in all marriages. On the other hand, documented research shows that monogamy is not natural to human behavior. As a result, [idea 1] is valuable because… At the same time, [idea 2] is valid because…

All of the text in bold is transitional or signal text that explains how I am linking ideas together. In other words, I am using clear transitions to show that there are two sides to an issue. Instead of ignoring one side of an argument, I am instead putting the disagreement into the spotlight where I can examine it, which makes for interesting reading.

If your paper is not examining a problem, you should reconsider your main argument.

Remember: all writing should create problems! (Scary, right?)

I am going to start posting writing tips based on examples from student essays. I will try to post at least one positive example and one suggestion in each post. I will not post anyone’s name here, but if you see your writing used and you would like it taken down, please let me know and I will do so.

Instead of the static page I’ve created “examples of strong writing,” I am just going to post examples under the category “Writing Tip.”

Unique hooks or attention-getters:

Here are some unique hooks that got my attention for the midterm essay with reasons why I liked these hooks in brackets:

When people hear the word art, they think of portraits and paintings that hang in museums and galleries. [mentions lots of specific objects]

Vibrant pastel colors, heavy bass and high treble, and satisfying smiles on young faces are all characteristics of urban art. [vibrant descriptive image]

In “My Life in Graffiti,” Joseph Anastasio describes tagged subway cars: “Each car was unique. Each one covered with paint, sweat, and life itself.” [begins with a relevant quote]

Hooks that need some work:

In this essay I will explain how urban art can change people’s lives. [don’t announce the topic you are discussing]

Art has existed since the beginning of mankind. [too broad — be more specific!!!]

 

Check out these hooks. Can you see why the top three are more effective than the bottom two versions? What type of hook did you use for the beginning of your essay?

Good night!

Ambient music inspiration of the night:

Laurie Spiegel – “East River Dawn”