When it came to this project, I decided to step a small bit out of my comfort zone, and get slightly personal. I wanted this project to mean something, and to portray me as an individual as transparently as possible. I knew that I would include some details that not very many people know about me, in order to give the reader or anyone else a good impression of who I am and what I pursue. After my first draft, I realized that a lot of what I had written didn’t make too much sense, or didn’t include enough details. I went back and made more clear sense of what I was trying to say, and fixed a few mistakes in grammar and/or run on sentences. However, I didn’t really cut anything from it. I didn’t think it was necessary to eliminate what I had already written, cause I felt I needed every detail I included. I also took my peer editors advice into much consideration, and decided to be more specific in some ideas and thoughts that seemed to vague or confusing. I also, again, fixed sentences and paragraphs that seemed to prolonged and/or run on. Over all, I spent a considerable amount of time in thinking of what is it that I was going to write, and what exactly was it that I wanted to express. What idea and overall thoughts could I write, that would give the reader the best overall impression of who I am as an individual.
- How did you know what you wanted to include?
I knew, because anime is something that represents me. With out anime, I would most likely would be interested other than art. Also including my childhood of coming here from Japan to United States, and how my English developed over the course of years.
- How did you refine what you included?
I asked my peers to revise what I would add and cross out unnecessary things. By reading over again to make sure I forgot to include, or something that is unnecessary.
- How did you determine what to eliminate?
Things that are too personal, or something that is off topic. Also things that unrelated to my passion in anime or art.
- How did you figure out the project’s organization?
I actually saw someone’s post at first and made me think about how I was going to construct my project. Beginning with introducing my self on how my childhood became who I am now.
- What did your classmate’s feedback do for your work process?
My classmate’s feedback helped me a lot to revise, such as things that I need more explanation which most of people do not understand what anime is.
- What did reading your classmate’s project and giving feedback do for your work process?
It made me wonder if I missed anything in my project while giving feed backs. Made me go back and check my project over and over.
- How much time did you spend brainstorming? outlining? drafting? revising? Polishing?
Not much, I knew what I needed to include and not to include. Also, because of the help from my classmate’s feed backs, it made it much easier and smoother for me to work on.
After reading through my first draft I’ve noticed that it was good but it could be better. With my draft I needed to explain in more detail on some parts. I refined my essay by rewording some sentences that sounded a little funny to make it more clearer. Also I’ve added different adjectives instead so my sentences won’t sound redundant. I’ve noticed I kept on using “I love” a lot so I eliminated that by rewording it in different ways. I split up my first paragraph into 2 since it was too big in structure. With every alterations I read the sentence over to make sure that it made sense. My paragraph about others misinterpretations on my avatar I kind of took it in a way that people could misinterpret me since my avatar conveyed who I am. With that paragraph I had to make sure the misinterpretations was set more on the avatar and less about myself. With the feedback I got from my classmate I got encouraged to put more into my essay since she was really interested in some parts of it. By reading my classmate’s project and providing feedback it help me in my revision since in that scenario I had to be focused on what to eliminate or add. I took about 20 minuets brainstorming and outlining. The draft itself took about 2 hours and 30 minutes to do. Revising and polishing took about 2 hours.
Sometimes I wonder to myself, what are people’s usual first impressions about me upon meeting me? What do people assume and infer about me as an individual at a glance? I am a Freshmen here at City Tech. I am 18 years old and I am of Ecuadorian and Salvadorian descent. I live in the Bronx (6 line) and I’ve had a passion for visual arts for as long as I can remember. Ever since I could even speak, I used to always tell my parents how much I wanted to be an “art-teeest” as I used to say it. Growing up I became more and more fascinated in the way art was used to decorate the world around me, and how important it was to so many people in being able to express ideas and imagination. I began to draw and paint every single day. I used to carry my mini sketchbook with me everywhere I went. In it I would have such childish but imaginative and crazy drawings, which till this day, I still possess that free style in my work. I used to beg my parents to take me to the MOMA almost every weekend, after my first time visiting it when i was in first grade. I continued to grow more and more inspired, although when I reached high school, I had dropped my passion for it due to an unexpected tragedy in my family, which was the loss of my grandmother. My grandmother was a huge inspiration to me when it came to following my passion. She used to always push me and give me lectures about me getting an education and pursuing a true career. Losing her was one of the hardest things I’ve ever endured. However, I decided to continue to pursue what I have always known and loved, and decided to make it my major in college and re-ignite that passion I’ve always had, with the mentality that I will make my grandmother above and the rest of my family proud. I aspire to be an animator or a concept artist in the future, and pursue making a living out of what I love to do. I can imagine myself in the future creating beautiful and complex works of concept art, that can potentially be brought to life through a video game or a feature film. THAT is what I want to do, and be successful at. A few years from now, when technology advances even more than it already has, I wish to see my name in the credits of the newest blockbuster film or the hottest new video game release. Some words that describe me as a person are Timid, Stubborn, and Adventurous. Though I can be hard headed over small things sometimes, I’m pretty likeable and easy to get along with. I’m always the type to be very timid to speak when I’m around new people, but once you get to know me, I could talk about just about anything for days. I also love to discover and travel, and explore new things. Some things I’m into are baseball, DC comic heroes, drawing/creating/writing, anime, science fiction, horror and fantasy books, and traveling. I am more specifically a huge fan of the hunger games series,the Dragonball series, and Halo. I’m also really into Music and the performing arts (more specifically Broadway musicals), as I went to a performing arts high school, where I did many amazing things like be a part of huge concerts and shows, and met many famous music artists, performers, and actors.
There are many reasons and aspects as to why I chose this Avatar for my profile. My avatar consists of a piece of concept art created by Bungie Studios, for a video game called Destiny. Its almost like a design or blueprint, so to speak. A concept artist created this character and designed him, before creating it digitally through the game. Looking at the avatar, you can see the detail and information the artist input into these “blueprints”, and the very image he had in his head for this particular character. Not only am I a vivid player of the Destiny video game, but the art and character design in the game are simply fascinating to me. The aesthetic care and imagination that went into creating this “world” is mind blowing. Every time I play i can’t help but think of how amazing it would be to one day create such vivid and fantastical worlds and characters, and have them come to life in such a way. I aspire to be the one to create such concept art, after being inspired for so many years through movies, TV shows and other entertainment media.
Though my Avatar to me is a symbol of the passion I wish to pursue, there can be all types of interpretations as to why I chose it. Knowing a lot of people who are fans of the Destiny video game, anyone of those or other individuals could simply assume I just love the game. There could also be inferences that i have a pinpointed passion for just video games, which is not the case at all. Yes, I do love the game, but my main perspective is the art and passion that went into creating every single aspect of that game. Especially the concept art, which like I mentioned before, is something I’m pursuing to do. Through my entire profile, I wish to convey and make clear what I pursue, and how I plan to get there. I aspire to be the one to create such beautiful and fantastical worlds and characters, and make them come to life. I will continue to pursue this goal through education in the graphic arts.
My name is Brandy I am a freshman here at Citytech. I graduated from Celia Cruz High School of Music, and while attending there I played percussion. I’m a pretty shy person at first, but eventually I open up the more familiar I get with the person. When I do open up I am a funny, bubbly, weird individual who is pretty open minded to new ideas. My passions lie in learning, creating, animation and imagination. I love learning not only new artistic techniques, but more about the world in general. There’s still so much I don’t know, and finding the answers to those unraveling questions is really satisfying. With creating, being able to bring out imagination to real life whether it’s from mine or someone else’s vision is fascinating, because a lot of interesting ideas dwells within people’s mind. I enjoy animation because this form of expression can be really effective when it comes to creating a great story. In animation I find there’s more life being put into the characters development, plotline and conflicts. Animation really engages me to want to know what will happen next and to make me feel what my favorite characters are feeling.
With imagination I love wandering into my own world, taking a break from reality at times. Being able to come up with ideas that seem pretty unreal and having a feel for that fantasy is something that I can’t get bored from. I am still discovering my design aesthetic but I would say I really like to put my focus on color. Color brings about a reaction from people and depending on the color or shade I use, I can give out the most accurate atmosphere for my piece. To me the color blue is bold yet gentle, and by that statement I mean that it has balance in the way it shows itself which is why many people including myself enjoy it’s presence. In five to ten years I see myself enjoying whatever career I’m in, still exploring the world and having new experiences.
I would say that my avatar portrays my carefree,adventurous personality. The way the petals carry off into the wind conveys being free to explore the world which is something I always look forward to in life.The petals also represent I’m a go with the flow type of person. The various sceneries depict the beauty I see in the vast world we live in. The different landscapes shows the adventures I wish to have in the future. This image really sets the way I like to imagine by the way the colors come together and make this image feel like a dream.
Some misinterpretations people could get from my avatar is that it is spiritual. This reason can be due to the fact it the woman seen in the picture looks like she is praying or practicing a ritual of some sort. People could interpret that she could be a farmer because of her possession of the petals, and pots that seem to resemble having wheat inside. Another interpretation someone might have when looking at my avatar is that the woman is killing the flowers by pulling them of their stems.
My profile conveys that I’m a laid back, adventurous person that is just fascinated by what the world has to offer. Also that I have a very whimsical vision when it comes to imagination. This matters to me because imagination is what makes me optimistic for the future, which is an necessity. It is necessity because I can see myself working in a field where it requires thinking outside the box. It can show that I am approachable and have various interests. And finally, my profile can represent on what I can offer the world.
My name is Tyler Santiago I am 18 years old, I am Puerto Rican but I was born and raised in New York. Sadly I do not know how to speak Spanish wish I did. I’m a very active and athletic person, my favorite sport is basketball but I also play a little bit of football and baseball for fun and I also play softball with my father on his team on Sundays. I am pretty tall my height is 6 feet 4 inches; my friends say I’m a funny guy and fun to be around. Putting a smile on someone’s face or making a person laugh or even making them feel better makes me happy. I was born on April 13th, 1997, I have one older brother by 6 years he’s 24 years old. My family is pretty big. I’m into video games, hanging out with friends, and going to the movies. I like to listen to music, most types of music but mostly old school rap and R&B. I want to get into the advertisement business and I am looking forward for what I am going to learn and take in for these classes and hope it all pays off in the future.
As you can see my picture for my profile is pink, first of all pink is not my favorite color if that’s what you’re thinking from my profile picture. The reason why my picture is all pink is because I went on vacation to Cancun this summer and I went with about 26 people friends and family and since my mother is a home based travel agent she makes these shirts which happened to be pink this year that has all her business information on it and I liked how the picture came out so I edited it to have pink borders to match the shirt and that’s why my the picture is so pink. But I love to travel its like my top favorite thing to do besides playing basketball. I’ve been to so many places like Cancun Mexico, Florida, Puerto Rico, Dominican Republic, Jamaica, and more and even more to come, the top 3 places I would love to visit is Australia, Japan, and England, I don’t really know why I want to go to those places but I just feel those would be some nice vacation spots and nice memories to be made. Another thing about me is that I love to smile and laugh if I’m not doing one of those things you already know there is something wrong with me.
My plan for my future if everything works out in college and I keep up and succeed and graduate is to become an advertising designer for a big company like Sony, Microsoft, or Samsung. It would be even better if I can get a job for one of my favorite gaming companies like Naughty Dog, or Ubisoft. The reason why I want to join these companies in the future are because I love the content and products these companies create, I use most of their products that they create. I really hope this all works out for me though because it seems like a fun field to be in but a lot of work that I’m willing to do though. If this doesn’t work out I’m going to have to get a job with my brother doing construction and I’m really not trying to do that, it’s a good job and all but since my dad did it and my brothers doing it I want to try something different and I’m trying to be my own person and make a living for myself. I really don’t want too rely on anybody I hate asking people for favors. I also want to get into editing films, videos, and photos because that seems like a fun thing and useful thing to know for my future.
My profile will convey who I am, what I like to do, my interest, and contact information if any of my classmates has a question about the what was taught in class or about the homework and ill give them my best understanding of it and ill try my best to help with the homework if I understand it myself. On an academic standpoint it’s going to have all my work that was assigned to me and that is due for this class ENG1101 or COMD1100. I would also like my profile to convey my imagination the stuff that goes through my head when I get to thinking about something. That is basically it for who I am and what I want in life.
Ayano Morishima was born in Japan and moved to the United States when she was just a 10 years old. Knowing English from her Saturday school in Japan, that opportunity made useful in her life when she moved to the U.S. Since English is her second language, she had to take ESL. It took her about 5 years of special class to pass, because she needed English language for her future. She graduated from the high school, The Global Learning Collaborative (GLC) in the year of 2015. She had no connection in any of the art department other than the ceramics during her high school year. She is now 19 years old and going to college to learn more about art and to be able to move one step closer in life towards her dream.
My passions lie in anime, because it’s what I grew up with. When I was little, my daily Sunday morning was anime day. I remember that the anime was for kids, like Sailor Moon, Ojamajo, Doraemon, Pokemon etc. As I grew up, the variety of anime or should I say genre of anime expanded. The expansion made me watch more teen type of anime such as Black Butler, Fairy Tail, Gintama, Attack on Titan etc. Because of this, it came into my mind that what if I can be able to draw like that and create my own anime which eventually be on T.V.? I eventually started drawing anime as I copied off others and was be able to work from there to make my own. I also like anime because it is almost a fantasy that will never come true in life. Sure, there are shows that turned to live actions. However it’s different because of anime, they could create something beyond. Many of my friends insist on me becoming an manga artist, however I declined. There are two reasons, first I cannot draw the same character and second living as a manga artist is a hard in financial terms. First problem can be solved, if I keep working on my drawing skills, however I cannot go through life which takes a lot of time selling manga and receiving money off of it. Instead, I want work as a character designer by hand and digitally. I’m usually aesthetic about my art work, because I get frustrated when final drawing looks horrible than the one I imaged in my head.Also, when head is too big for the body, etc. I am more into modern style of anime drawings, because old characters are drawn in a simple structure. Such as long face and big shiny eyes. I like to draw more complex and detailed characters which most people are more interested.
Usually I draw most of the time with a single pencil, but I hope I learn how to use various range of pencils. So that I could expand my drawing skills. Recently I am into digital drawing on a tablet. I find digital drawing interesting because there were techniques that I was able to do digitally and not by hand. (*Do not read the profile, it contains the wrong information. But you can check my drawing at: Here)
The avatar that I chose was a character from the BGM that I recently found on YouTube. (If interested, the music is from this link: Here) I fell in love with it, because of the catchy lyrics and the awesome beat grabbed my heart instantly. After that started to go to its official website where I encountered with the avatar. Before knowing it, the character itself matches my personality and the features. As I looked closely, his sharp eyes and angry eyebrows shows a powerful and smart mentally. However his one hand is covered over his chest, this action makes the connection that I also have the weak side and doesn’t always acts strong. We both have a same length of hair, however the difference of the avatar is that I don’t have a white hair and my gender is a girl.
My avatar can mislead people into thinking that I am mean or cold to people, because of the facial expression. Also, the characters that are written in the paper might mislead people that it is in Chinese characters rather than Japanese. Many people say that they are the same, however they are not. In history that these characters came from China. However, when it came across to Japan those characters changed a little to a simple character which people could understand more. In addition where the characters looks more girl like than the guy.
My profile conveys that I am a hard worker, and an amazing person who has a passion for anime. My imagination can go beyond the world, and always have a creative story that I can just make a book about it. Hoping that my creative imagination will become real in animation and my creativity would be acknowledge. This profile matters to me because this is who I am and always will be. After 10 or 20 years, I would still be interested in anime and have a creative mindset. If I changed, it will most likely be that I’ve become a boring person who only thinks about reality. Its good to have a time to be in your own world.
My name is Eftekar but I would prefer to be called Efy. I am 18 years old and a freshman in college. I live in Brooklyn and I used to attend the High School Of Telecommunication Arts and Technology. My major is Art and Advertising design. I chose this major because I’m really interested in art. Most of the time when I’m not busy and have nothing to do I turn to art. My personal aesthetic or artistic style is drawing with a pencil and a journal size sketchbook. I don’t mind drawing on a bigger canvas but I prefer to draw on a regular size canvas. Usually, my drawings are simple but can have positive feedback. When I draw I rarely use color because my style of art is more realistic then cartoonist, so I leave the sketch with its shading/contouring. In the future, I hope to see my self as a famous artist/ advertising person working for a famous company or even better owning one of the biggest/famous companies.
The picture I chose for my avatar is a sketch that I’ve drawn my self, It’s called “growing without knowing”. The way to describe it would be a rose growing in the shape of a question mark, and the rose’ roots are wrapped around a heart, also the rose looks very bright and full of color. I chose this to describe me as a person because I’m interested in art and this is a piece of my work. To go in deeper meaning, this sketch describes me because as I was growing older, year by year adults like teachers or my parents would always ask me “what do you want to be when you grow up” and my answer would always be different or not really relating to what I really want. This is because I really didn’t know what to do when I grow up but I knew what I like to do as a hobby an that is to draw.
When looking at my avatar people might see differently then what I intend to portray. The viewer might think of their own deeper meaning of what the picture is. They might think I didn’t know what to chose as my avatar because of the question mark and they would think that I’m a hard person to get along with because of the thorns on the rose or they might be just confused because the avatar isn’t straight forward to the viewer.
I feel like my profile would help others know more about me as a person. It would show what I’m interested in, what my aesthetic is and what I hope to become. My profile would also help me meet new people that are interested in the same things I’m in.
English 1101 Project #1 Process
In this project I know what I wanted to include by reading the instructions. I knew from there as our goal of this project is to introduce ourselves and also interpreted our OPENLAB avatar. I realized there were a few things I had to eliminate such as some personal private information. Enthusiastic to promote our own is not wrong, but it would be much better if we could be more temperate. I didn’t take much care of the composition because of everything already said in the instruction. It told us we need 4 paragraphs and what should we wrote about in each paragraph. I had let my classmate Efy to check my draft and I got a few good suggestions from her properly. She told me to add in some details of how people would misinterpret my avatar and how. As I read my classmate’s project and giving feedback I also got inspirations for my own project as well. We are always improving by absorbing others ideas. I spend 10 mins for both brainstorming and outlining, the time had increasing to two hours when I did drafting and revising, and for the last step polishing I spend only 20 mins. It took me a long time to finish up this project, but I also learned a lot as well when I wrote it. This project helps to introduce myself to others and also gave me a chance to recognizing more about what I was thinking about myself.
Hey, My name is Xingfu, but I prefer people call me Ruky! I’m from ZheJiang, China, 18 years old. I came to N.Y. 4 years ago, still learning English. My major is graphic design, I haven’t decide what I want to be in future yet. currently I’m interest post videos on YouTube. I like to listen electrical and instrument music. I spend most of my free time playing games and making videos of game play, such like GTA v, Minecraft, and League of legends. I also watch anime, my favorite anime is one piece, Fairy tail, and Pokemon. Sometime I like to draw my own anime character.
The avatar of mine is one of my drawing, I hope people can see me from this drawing. In my avatar, the boy has red hair which is my favorite color. The halo means sometime I’m act silly. Hand covering mouth, I’m very shy when first meet people, but when we become good friends, I will show more of my self and they will be thinking “oh! so this is his ultimate form!” The wings, people some time think I have two different personality, because sometime I made people feel I’m a very friendly and peaceful person, nice to talk with. But some time I make them feel like I’m ruthless and a careless man, this is because I felt boring. Anyway, the point is I don’t have two personality. The poor looking clothes means that i’m not born in a wealthy family, but not that poor. The drawing is exaggerated.
People might think my avatar differently. The wings, I think most people will think that the wings means i have multiple personality, or double standard of my mind. The halo, people might think that i’m good person, but actually I’m not.
My profile will convey that my personality is not exactly like how my avatar have shown. This matter because I don’t want people think how I truly am by looking my avatar. And I hope people can know more about me by reading my profile.