Although change can be good, the English language should stay the same with no exceptions.
Practice Final Thesis Rewrite by: Angel Vallejo
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The Penalty Of Death & Execution By: Angel Vallejo
Reading through both articles you can sense the author’s strong arguments. I must admit though that Quindlen’s argument was clearer than Mencken’s. She argued how the death penalty is never equal to the murderer’s victim. Menken basically argued that the death penalty is useless and it wouldn’t affect the murderer at all.
One compelling moment is when Quindlen says “Our most profound emotional response is to want criminals to suffer as their victims did”. I agree with that one hundred percent because if you throw someone off a roof and your penalty is to die by an electrical chair; Those are two different types of pain.
Another compelling moment is how Menken repeatedly uses the katharis to prove his point throughout his piece.
Both authors purpose were to convince their audience that the death penalty does not make anything better, but more importantly that a death of a human will never be forgotten no matter how the murderer dies.
Did any of the author’s know anybody close to them that has been murdered?
Shitty First Drafts By Angel Vallejo
This article was very relatable and well written. I love how in the beginning says even great writers write bad first drafts. It makes you want to read more because instantly you realize that even the best writer can make little mistakes just like you. She even uses her own experiences writing food reviews and explained how it would take a bunch of crossing out before she’s actually done.
One compelling moment was when she said “The first draft is the child’s draft”. Another compelling moment is when she says “I’d try to write a lead, but instead I’d write a couple of dreadful sentences, XX them out, try again, XX everything out, and then feel despair and worry settle on my chest like an x-ray apron”.
The author’s purpose was to bring the reader’s self esteem up and make them feel confident about their writing no matter how many mistakes you make. One question I do have is who is she talking about when she says “Not one of them writes elegant first drafts. All right, one of them does,…”?
Peak Performance By: Angel Vallejo
The article is about records, but that’s not all. It goes in depth of how it takes a certain type of mentality to break a record. He uses dedication and attitude as reasons for why records are broken. One compelling moment was how he described chess masters memorizing their boards as a mental tactic. Another compelling moment was how college students had to hear 102 random digits with 50 hours of practice and one student was able to remember all 102. The author purpose for the article was to enlighten the reader that practice makes perfect.
Thesis
Applicants shouldn’t be judged off lack of grammar, but judged off job requirements and character.
Times Square: Times Square is the first thing that comes to mind when someone says New York City. It’s constantly filled with tourists and busy sidewalks. The atmosphere just gives you life. The big advertisements on the buildings, and even the people dressed up in cartoons trying to take pictures with little kids and adults. Its like a never ending experience. Stores seem to always be open. It’s a very fun place to be whenever
Bedford Stuyvesant: My neighborhood is very quiet and ordinary. There’s a bodega in like every corner and a park in every block. It’s a good place to jog or run because the sidewalks are never crowded. It could seem lonely at times because the streets can get really empty during the late hours. You could buy lunch without spending more than five dollars. Everything is really affordable, and who can forget the lovely sound of the ice cream truck during the summer time.
Remembering My Childhood on th Continent of Africa By Angel Vallejo
In the story the author David Sedaris showed comparing and contrasting at it’s finest. He compared his childhood in North Carolina with another boy named Hugh from Africa. While reading the story you can sense that they go through very similar stuff but the other character experiences are a little more exciting. Hugh went through stuff that kids usually don’t go through like going to a slaughter house! Who takes kids to a slaughter house?! It made David jealous in a way because he felt like he lived an ordinary life with no excitement. He even mentioned “Hugh’s family was hobnobbing with chefs and sultans while I ate hush puppies at the Sanitary Fish Market..”. In every paragraph you can just see how he makes Hugh seem so superior to him, and how badly he wants to liv his life. In the end of the story he even tells the readers how he’s having a dream going on an adventure with Hugh.
Mother Tounge Response By Angel Vallejo
This passage was very well written and described. I love how in the beginning she talks about the love she has for the English language, and slowly she transitions to her mom’s trouble. Throughout the story she speaks about how the public has trouble understanding her mom. It seems like at first she’s embarrassed at the fact, but when you get towards the end you can sense her gradditude and appreciating her mom for what she is.
One compelling moment was when she mentioned how her mom made her talk on the phone for her. It seemed like she wasn’t fond about it but did it anyway for her mother’s sake. Another interesting moment was the whole story ! I give the author a big thumbs up. She made the story interesting and very relatable. Growing up I thought the same about my mom’s lack of English.
The author’s purpose was very broad and simple. It seems like she wanted to let the reader know how her mom’s English really affected her and the things she to go through. I wonder what was the author’s mood while writing the piece ? Was she happy and relieved ? Did her mom improve her English ?
I Have A Dream Response By Angel Vallejo
A couple sentences into the reading and I felt the mood of the speaker’s message as if he was yelling right at me. The message behind the whole speech was very powerful. He constantly reminded us through out the speech how badly he wanted African Americans to have the same equal rights like the Caucasians. He used various examples throughout the speech about how badly the colored people have been mistreated through out history.
One line I found very compelling is when he said “I have a dream that my four little children will one day live in a nation where they will not be judged by the color of their skin but by the context of their character”. I found that one very interesting because he brought his family into the mix. He didn’t want his kids to have to deal with not fitting in with the other crowd for the rest of their life’s loke he did.he wanted the best for them.
Another thing I found very compelling was the amount of repetition he used. He constantly used “I have a dream” throughout the whole speech. It makes it easy for the reader to identify the writers purpose.
I wonder how the speaker got the courage to speak his mind to a whole crowd.Did he think about it for a long time before he made that decision? Did he regret saying what he said because of the consequences that he could’ve faced later on? A lot can be asked about his state of mind during the speech.
I feel like the author’s purpose was for everyone to envision his dream. He wanted everyone to know how badly he wanted discrimination to end. He wanted us all to not be judged by our skin color but be judged of our character.
Senioritis by Angel Vallejo
Once upon a time there was this boy named Angel. He had senioritis his last year of high school. Going into your last year of high school most students gets that overwhelming feeling of finally graduating, that they get so lazy and just start to slack off. Angel was one of those students.
Angel was very laid back his final year of highschool. He passed all his regents and he only needed to worry about two classes, so it was basically a cake walk if you asked him. He often got to school late because his lazy behind did not want to get up in the morning. You would think that this is going to catch up with with him, but boy are we wrong.
Angel’s final year was actually a success report card wise. He barely did homework but seen his average increase each and every marking period. He was shocked because he felt like he didn’t deserve such high grades, but like a normal student he did not question it and instead appreciated it.
How can you forget about the complaining ? The amount of times the sentence “I can’t wait to graduate” was said by Angel , the mathematicians would have to come to come up with a new number. He was just so anxious to leave, he felt like he was in highschool for such a long time. Months past and graduation finally came. Angel couldn’t believe it. A part of him felt like he was going to miss high school, but he got what he wished for.
