15 thoughts on “Feedback for Nazarah Celestine”

  1. Your essay was very clear and understand, I think there could have been more detail added. Something else from your essay that could have more detail is the conclusion. I think you started a sentence and didn’t finish it off.

  2. Your essay was very relatable especially since I have struggled with math as well.  I like how you continued to work hard in this subject without giving up and I’m glad that you have improved in this subject throughout the years. I think you could have used more details but, Overall I liked your essay.

  3. Your essay is relatable which is something I really like cause I can understand struggling when it comes to math; I also liked how you didn’t give up just cause it was hard, but, I think you can add a bit more detail as well as add more to your conclusion cause it seems to sorta end abruptly.

  4. Your essay was relatable and I like how even though it was hard you still didn’t give up.  Something you can do to improve your essay is add more details.

  5. Your essay was relatable as I too struggle with math and found it difficult. I thought you showed good determination with not giving up. An improvement is adding more details but other than that, everything was good.

  6. I really enjoyed your essay because I also struggled with math as well, I still struggle with it up to this day but I continually practice in order to get better.i love how you working harder and you didn’t  let a couple failures

  7. Personally, your essay was something a lot of people can relate to and so can I. I also enjoyed how motivated you were and it was consistent. Something you could have worked on more was your conclusion.

  8. Your essay was really relatable and I liked that you showed a lot of determination through your struggles. However, some things you can improve on are grammatical errors and elaborating on your experiences.

  9. I liked reading your essay because i could relate. I feel like you should add more details with your class experiences and just school in general. Also fix some grammar mistakes and work on the conclusion a bit more.

  10. I liked reading your essay because i could relate. I feel like you should add more details with your class experiences and just school in general. Also fix some grammar mistakes and work on the conclusion a bit more.

  11. I really liked reading your essay, it was clear to understand. I also I liked what you said on the last paragraph the first sentence, also I liked that  you didn’t give up.

  12. I really liked reading your essay, it was clear to understand. I also I liked what you said on the last paragraph the first sentence, also I liked that  you didn’t give up.

  13. Your essay is a piece that I can relate to in seconds. I really love how you talked about yourself and how you found motivation throughout your experience. But, I hope you just fix some grammatical mistakes you made and add more details.

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