Mentor Text Analysis —Diogo

  • she hook the audiences by describing how college students know how to look someone in the eye and type on their phones at the same time, their split attention undetected
  • She gets her research from a 2015 study by the Pew Research Center, and by asking college student’s experience.
  • She is telling us the amount of time she has been researching on this particle project by stating every little detail
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  • this op-ed has not video or audio
  • The op-ed has 1680 words, 3 pages long
  • the audience would be the people who know how to look someone in the eye and type on their phones at the same time, their split attention undetected because she is describing the issues that relate to this
  • She ends off by saying we have time to make corrections and remember who we are
  • The message is to don’t use electric devices all the time and actually interact with people

2 thoughts on “Mentor Text Analysis —Diogo”

  1. First off, this needs to be in paragraph format, and u have some grammatical errors. Instead of “She hook the audiences” you should change it to “She hooks the audience.” Also, you have some lower-case letters at the beginning of the sentence, when sentences ALWAYS begin with upper-case letters.

    Are you sure that’s the audience?

    Also, you forgot to add if the author included any imagery in their writing.

  2. You start this HW in a very confused way: Who is the author? What is the title of the article? What Genre are you studying?

    • You write: the audience would be the people who know how to look someone in the eye and type on their phones at the same time, their split attention undetected because she is describing the issues that relate to this — REALLY? This is the audience?

    Jemel gives you good feedback. Look at his comments.

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