THE FIX: Essay 1

Today we looked at more beginnings of essays.

We considered pronouns.  The first sample had too many vague pronouns (you, he, and it)

We also considered ways to transition in and out of your ideas and the outside sources.  The second sample needed some rearranging for better flow and conciseness.

Student Samples THE FIX Sept 30

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