After reading Ryoya notes very carefully I a lot of work to do. I basically scratched what I had and re edited my entire film. I added a more catching opening to my film opposed to just a title. I removed all of the effects I had for transitions I had and I replaced them with resized footage so that I was able to flow between shots. I also re positioned certain scenes because some elements of the filmed seemed more important and should be ahead of one another. I also added names when I introduce each character into my film. Lastly I added my narration to make a more serious tone so that the audience understands how important this film is to me. After looking at this re edit version of my film I actually enjoy it a lot more then my first cut, I appreciate all the notes my advisor game me.