I’ve actually posted most of my comments on your document itself. Let me know if you can’t see them.
This is a good start, but let’s develop it a good deal.
–I want you to make a paragraph out of your questions and also form a thesis that explains how you think Malik’s song comments on the limitations of poverty–of growing up poor–and also how it comments on the importance of following your passion.
–Quote more from the song and explain how the quotations connect to your thesis/interpretation.
–I also want to see you describing the sounds of the music much more.