Ways to revise
- Eliminate the introduction and use the first body paragraph as the intro because it introduces the word “loca/o” better and the intro I have now.
- In this new intro, I will add a missing piece that I included in the rest of the text which is that the word can be used in a disrespectful way to others.
- Before wrapping up my writing I will elaborate more on the idea of how the word “loca/o” can be disrespectful to older people.
- I might change up the title for something different because I want it to get the attention of the reader better than the original one
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