• The revision I will do for unit 1 is revise my thesis since there is like no thesis in my essay I will add one so my reader can understand what I will be solving.
  • also a hook sentence to engage my reader
  • Add more concrete details like actual situations I can mention
  • Focus on the details of the past mentioning that more examples..
  • essay structure
  • Don’t be to repetitive
  • a conclusion