Fight For Your Rights

Hall English 1101 Fall 2020

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Draft

Well we have reached the end of semester, YAY!!! This semester has been really difficult being that this was my first year of college for me I didn’t have a normal experience like all students who finish high school will have. Nevertheless, it helped me grow both as a scholar and writer this term. Well to start of I had to cope with studying online it was something very difficult if I’m being totally honest sometimes it was hard to pay attention even though it can be like that when we go regular to school. However, this time teacher’s wouldn’t know if we are there or pay attention at all. Another thing is teacher’s aren’t really at your disposal to help you right there and then. When I was at school personally I could easily go up to them and ask but remotely is something that can’t be done so comfortably. However, it also taught me other ways to learn the material we are being taught , activities we can do so the lesson won’t be so boring and no slacking off handing everything at time even at a specific time. Making me having to learn to be punctual. When it comes to writing  I learned the different ways to write, using articles that were given to us. That we have similar problems with previous writers when it comes to quoting and making drafts etc.

I can use what I have used this term and transfer that knowledge to my other writing situations. One example is in my law class I’ll have a lot of writing to do that with the help of the articles that where presented to me it really helped me with how I should write for our readers, how to organized, words I should use, tone and so much more. An example is the article, Annoying Ways People Use Sources by Kyle Stedman , Kyle Stedman said “The easiest way to effectively massage in quotations is by purposefully returning to each one in your draft to see if you set the stage for your readers—often, by signaling that a quote is about to come, stating who the quote came from, and showing how your readers should interpret it. In the above example, that could be done by introducing the quotation with something like this (new text bolded).” This was one quote that sticked with me how I should always introduced  my quote, tell my reader who said the  quote and then interpret it. Which is what I do every time from now on and with my previous drafts.

I also said in a previous post “One example is a paragraph beginning with a quote or closed with a quote this can be said as having no guidance to whoever is reading your writing. The writer doesn’t elaborate what they meant with that specific quote and why they choose it for their topic.” I don’t want my reader to be confused with what they have read and more importantly with what they have read of mines. I want them to understand why I chose the quote I did and placed it in my writing, also elaborating to clarify my reader of any doubts they can possibly have.

Unit one revised

 

To revise my unit one writing I had to listen to the comments made by Ms hall to know what needed to be changed. I was told that I gave too much details which I didn’t notice when I reread my writing.I took off a good amount of unnecessary details and separated my writing into paragraphs because in my original writing it was just one big paragraph, I was glad that she helped me notice that because If I saw one big paragraph I would not be interested to read it either. 

On one spring/summer transitioning day I  woke up tired wishing there was no school or at least that my math teacher would be absent. Not only did I not want to go to school but my room was cold because it was still spring. And the coldest part of the day was when the sun was just starting to rise. It was about 54 degrees according to channel 11 news which my grandma listened to when she is getting ready for work . And that makes it colder for the workers. As I finally got up from bed  I did my morning prayers and told my grandmother good morning as she was rushing for work leaving me $5 lunch money and my favorite breakfast eggs and cheese with french fries on the side ( i know it’s weird lol!).

 As I was getting ready I realized that time was going by fast so i had to eat the food quickly so that i could leave to walk to school and also buy lunch before i go in . I left the house at 7:15 am wanting lunch but not knowing what to buy. So I decided to get a turkey sandwich and a pina colada Arizona juice at the local Mexican deli. 

 

 That day I was wearing my blue polo shirt and black skirt because that was my school uniform school for eighth graders . Then my sandwich was finally done and as I was walking to school I saw parents passing by me with their kids walking in the opposite direction .As they were passing by I was reminiscing my elementary school days and wishing that these kids would enjoy themselves because junior high is a bit more tense.   Eventually I finally reached the junction. It was like a hudde reunion hall where all of my school mates meet coming from different places to go to school. As I stood waiting for the light to change I saw my group of friends shouting my name and out of excitement I ran to them to give them a hug.Then we walked to school and finally reached,  we parted ways and my joy went away because I knew my first class was math class which I dread.

 

 When I finally reached the cool sparkling wooden floored  room I saw my classmates getting themselves situated in their assigned seats, So I  walked to my seat and got myself situated.  The lesson began and as the lesson was going on my mind wandered off out of boredom and that’s when my teacher decided to ask me a question that I couldn’t answer and because I couldn’t answer the question my teacher said something that really hurt my feelings which was to “go wash my mouth in the bathroom because that’s where my words were coming from”.

 

 when I looked to my left and right the students kept their heads down because they knew how embarrassed i was. I kept quiet for the remaining time and couldn’t wait to go home. I finally got home and I prayed because that’s what I do when I feel down. I decided to call my godmother and she told me to not worry and that she would help me with my math class. Any question that I got wrong from any of my assignments she helped me with them.  I was progressing so well that  now I was helping my classmates. As the school year went on I realized that what I went through was wrong but if I didn’t go through it I would not have been humble enough to have the patience to help my classmates because some of them didn’t have the patience to help me. 

 

Through this my perspective in education changed  and it made me realize that everyone learns differently some quicker than others but regardless of it as a student you should keep on going because even if all else fails you still need to be different and make a change for yourself,family and the generations to come. This experience didn’t break me but made me new and see the importance of education from another level. I wrote my experience to tell my peers to keep their heads up especially during this pandemic because if you don’t do what’s best for yourself you’re only going to drag in life. And this experience also made me realize that education isn’t only  something that is being taught inside of a classroom but also is something that is being taught through your obstacles in life and it’s your choice on if you want to learn or not and giving up is not an option. You must go on. One thing that I think I’ll need help with is giving more concrete information because I feel like I don’t give enough and also this is my first college essay draft. On another note I’m also very proud because this is my first essay with 1051 word count. LOL

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