Hall English 1101 Fall 2020

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Student Survey

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am interested in talking about relationships because teenagers have a tendency to mistake lust for love. As we all know, according to https://www.aconsciousrethink.com on google, “ Love is a deep feeling of affection that you have for another person. It’s a lasting attraction that goes beyond the surface and turns into emotional attachment. Lust, on the other hand, is basically a physical attraction that leads to an overwhelming feeling of sexual desire thanks to a rush of hormones.” Love and lust can be balanced in a relationship but just don’t let lust take the lead. And I feel like in that teenagers lack the maturity and experience to differentiate between love and lust. I often see teenagers get into relationships and I wonder if it’s just a phase or is it the  beginning of a disaster. In other words, the misconception of love and lust may be a simple experience or a tremendous mistake that can scar for life.

After concluding my research I expect to gain the understanding to assist my fellow teenagers by helping them in their decisions prior to a relationship. Relationship is not something that you jump into, it is  something that requires wisdom, time and patience it’s not something you jump into just for fun. Once you enter a relationship  for entertainment, your emotion begins to get attached with the person and you will end up getting hurt. I also expect to find the reason why teens feel like they are ready to engage in such commitment without a clue as to where it may lead. I am an example of a bad decision made by my mother and father. I suffered the consequences of their bad decision. I am well and in college by God’s grace. Unlike other teenagers who did not have that opportunity.

If I do find information that goes completely against what I had expected to find, I will be happy to learn things from a different aspect. I am willing to learn, since one of my goals is to share and assist people with the knowledge that I gained. I intend to enlighten others with the truth even if it means that I have to challenge my own assumptions. The best way to assist others is to collect factual information and real life experiences, which will encourage the reader to think otherwise and to be convinced.

I intend on using non fiction articles, television shows,  books brochures, pamphlets  and newspapers to obtain information as well as real life experience by interviewing others. Those genres will be great assets to obtain information and support the findings to my question.

I am interested in this topic because teenagers have a tendency to mistake lust for love. As we all know, according to google, “ Love is a deep feeling of affection that you have for another person. It’s a lasting attraction that goes beyond the surface and turns into emotional attachment. Lust, on the other hand, is basically a physical attraction that leads to an overwhelming feeling of sexual desire thanks to a rush of hormones.” Teenagers lack the maturity and experience to differentiate between love and lust. I often see teenagers get into relationships and I wonder if it’s just a phase or is it the  beginning of a disaster. In other words, the misconception of love and lust may be a simple experience or a tremendous mistake that can scar for life.

After concluding my research I expect to gain the understanding to assist my fellow teenagers by helping them in their decisions prior to a relationship. Relationship is not something that you jump into. It is  something that requires wisdom, time and patience. It’s not something you jump into just for fun. Once you enter a relationship  for entertainment, your emotion begins to get attached with the person and you will end up getting hurt. I also expect to find the reason why teens feel like they are ready to engage in such commitment without a clue as to where it may lead. I am an example of a bad decision made by my mother and father. I suffered the consequences of their bad decision. I am well and in college by God’s grace. Unlike other teenagers who did not have that opportunity.

If I do find information that goes completely against what I had expected to find, I will be happy to learn things from a different aspect. I am willing to learn, since one of my goals is to share and assist people with the knowledge that I gained. I intend to enlighten others with the truth even if it means that I have to challenge my own assumptions. The best way to assist others is to collect factual information and real life experiences, which will encourage the reader to think otherwise and to be convinced.

I intend on using non fiction articles, television shows,  books brochures, pamphlets  and newspapers to obtain information as well as real life experience by interviewing others. Those genres will be great assets to obtain information and support the findings to my question.

My  First Source: Terri Orbuch, “Is it lust or Is it love”,TEDxOaklandUniversity,(September 14,2014)

Terri Orbuch does a ted talk where she speaks about differentiating love and lust in a relationship.In the ted talk she explains the signs of love and lust step by step. And I believe that her main point is that love and lust can be in a healthy relationship. It’s just that there are things that naturally have to grow in a relationship in order for it to be maintained within a relationship. For example in the video she says “ It’s love when you both use the word “we” in the relationship and It’s like you guys are intertwined and they are no longer just focusing on themselves but one another.” And she also says “ To rekindle lust into a love oriented relationship you need to do the things you used to do in the beginning of the relationship which is to go out new places to keep the surprises and mystery alive which brings lust”.

When I  watched the video I was a bit skeptical about it because I was afraid that I wasn’t going to get the response or information that I wanted to get which was straight forward details on how to differentiate love and lust and to tell which one is taking the lead in the relationship. But as I finished watching the video she made me realize how much teens can easily get blinded by lust thinking that it’s love. I was able to do my own sort of comparisons between lust and love while watching the video being that I am a teenager myself.

Terri in the video said that “ It’s love when you want to show the person off to the people that are most important in your lives.” Now I remember when I was in high school and my friends would be in their relationships and i would ask does your parents know and they would tell me no because they knew that their parents weren’t going to agree with what was going on but somehow they still believed that they were in love and that they would end up getting married after college. I used to tell them I hope their dreams come to existence, then a month later they broke up because they realized that those dreams of getting married were only temporary and that they didn’t really have the maturity to actually maintain a relationship. My main point is that a true relationship that has true love is something that should not be hidden. And I just really like how Terri properly showed the signs of love and lust in a relationship.

My second source: https://childmind.org/article/how-to-help-kids-have-good-romantic-relationships/

Rachel Ehmke Writes an article called “Teens and Romantic Relationships” as she shares the do’s and don’ts that parents should share with their teens and that teens should take for themselves . In the beginning of the article Rachel explains how prickly teenagers can be when it comes to their privacy. As she continues to write she states that “ Teenagers do look to us for guidance, though—even when they’d rather die than acknowledge that they are—and we can often have more influence than we realize.”  She is speaking in reference to the parents and to be quite frank with you I can absolutely agree with what she is saying being that I am a teenager myself and I do look up to my mom for guidance especially when it comes to my love life, I feel comfortable telling her about boys that I’ve had crushes on and she would give me advice on how to observe the person to see their flaws to know if the person is worth my liking.

As the article continues Rachel begins to explain the do’s in a relationship. And the one that popped out to me is when she said “ Being comfortable with someone means: You aren’t pressured to do things you don’t want to do. (This definitely includes sexual things, but also other things, like going somewhere you don’t want to go, or wearing something you don’t want to wear.)” And I feel like this applies to a lot of teenagers because a lot of them fall into the peer pressure of having to have sex in order for the relationship to be cool or successful. I have seen videos and actual people break up because of that and sometimes it hurts because the other person in the relationship wanted things to work out but just didn’t have the gut to give what was asked for which to me its ok because at least you left with your moral and sanity. But what hurts me the most is the people who gave in and were dumped after the fact. Its as if they were cheated.

 

One example that I can use is this girl that I used to go to school with in high school and she came to me looking very sad and she was explaining to me how her boyfriend kept on abusing her emotionally asking for oral sex and she gave it to him only to get maltreatment after wards once again emotion wise and as a friend I had to let her know that he doesnt love her. As you read the article you can see that there are more do’s in the article and then comes the don’ts as Rachel is explaining she states how teens should not forget their friends and this makes me think of the amount of relationships that have broken friendships and even family. I have seen my mom abandon her family over her boyfriend, she even abandoned me. We were no longer her priority. She would always be out with him, even sleep out without a care in the world until they broke up. And to heal she needed the family to be there. Luckily she found the support that she needed.And because of that experience I felt like I should speak out and try to help my fellow youths to not make that mistake so that our future generations can grow healthy through us. But overall this article helped me have a clearer view on relationships especially when it comes to the do’s and don’ts of the parent.

My Third source entry : “Counseling through your bible handbook” by June Hunt.

June Hunt wrote this book to talk about all of the things a person may go to counseling for. This book was mainly made for christians who like to do counseling using the bible. To relate to the topic of my annotated bibliography she makes a particular section where she talks about dating. She explains “ The Delights and Dangers of dating”. She explains the do’s and don’ts of dating, how to break off a dating relationship and also how to maintain purity over passion. What attracted me most about the do’s and don’ts “ Don’t focus on romance, Do focus on cultivating a friendship”. When I read this part it made me think about the relationships that have revolved around romance and that have broken up because they lack understanding for one another. Some people it’s in the middle of the relationship they realize that they dont know whats the other companions favorite color. As you read further Jane explains how to maintain purity over passion in a relationship. She Says “ Make purity in the dating relationship a top priority. Otherwise, it is too far easy to be misled by looks, propelled by insecurity, or lured by lust, and end up with a used body, a guilty conscience and a broken heart.” Personally I feel like if teens like myself were being told about purity then a lot of teens would have kept their innocence (virginity). Not that i’m saying that the ones that gave it away were bad but at least they would have known the big importance of it. Your virginity is something that you can never get back, so when you give it away you basically gave that person a piece of you. If some people who were in a relationship and were virgins knew and thought deeply about the value of their virginity I doubt they would have given it away (not that i’m discriminating against those who are no longer virgins once again).

I really like how Jane put everything in sections and she gives a good amount of details for each point. In the book Jane explains how to handle a breakup if you are the initiator or recipient of the break up on a T chart. And one of the points made for both sides made me think of an experience that I had when I was younger and what Jane said on the initiator side was “ Be honest and direct. Don’t lie about the reasons. The other person might try to fix any of your phantoms, made up excuses.” That made me think of a person who is not interested anymore but doesn’t want to hurt the other person’s feelings . And then one the recipient side Jane also says “ Listen but don’t take everything that is said literally. Look at the bigger picture. Evaluate the validity of the reasons given.” This reminds me of someone who is deeply rooted in the relationship. The reason why this reminded me of my past was because there was this boy that I was in a “Relationship” with and throughout this relationship I was the person who was deeply rooted and he wasn’t. I was in denial and wondered if it was just my mind playing with me. Valentines day came and he didn’t get me anything. I let that pass because we were young and money did not grow on trees. Then there was a day after lunch we were leaving the lunchroom and his friend came to me asking if I wanted to break up with the boy and I said it was his choice and as his friend went to him he said fine cause I already have someone else in mind. I was so vexed because all along he wasn’t interested in the relationship. I let bygones be bygones and we are still friends till this day.  Overall this section of the book was well written and added to the clearer view that I have on relationships.

 Conclusion: To conclude this annotated bibliography I feel like the research that was done for this essay outdid me. Honestly I thought that the point of view that I had for relationships was clear but based on the research that was made my point of view was nothing compared to this and I’m so compelled by the sources that I might share this info with my friends. Now I see why people say to wait for the one. I also feel like now I’m able to save myself from a heart break because all four sources taught me how to differentiate love from lust. Each source gave me something deeper to think about, Terri from Ted talk made me realize that lust can be brought up in a love oriented relationship without it having to be brought up by sex. Love is something that is intertwined between two people. They become one. My second source from Rachel she taught me that just because you are in a relationship doesn’t mean that you have to neglect your friends. You can still maintain them and be in a relationship at the same time. My third source from Jane Hunt taught me how to maintain purity over passion in a relationship because it can leave me with a used body, broken heart, and a guilty conscience. Over all I now know that we have enough resources to help us differentiate love from lust  

I am interested in talking about relationships because teenagers have a tendency to mistake lust for love. As we all know, according to https://www.aconsciousrethink.com on google, “ Love is a deep feeling of affection that you have for another person. It’s a lasting attraction that goes beyond the surface and turns into emotional attachment. Lust, on the other hand, is basically a physical attraction that leads to an overwhelming feeling of sexual desire thanks to a rush of hormones.” Love and lust can be balanced in a relationship but just don’t let lust take the lead. And I feel like in that teenagers lack the maturity and experience to differentiate between love and lust. I often see teenagers get into relationships and I wonder if it’s just a phase or is it the  beginning of a disaster. In other words, the misconception of love and lust may be a simple experience or a tremendous mistake that can scar for life.

After concluding my research I expect to gain the understanding to assist my fellow teenagers by helping them in their decisions prior to a relationship. Relationship is not something that you jump into, it is  something that requires wisdom, time and patience it’s not something you jump into just for fun. Once you enter a relationship  for entertainment, your emotion begins to get attached with the person and you will end up getting hurt. I also expect to find the reason why teens feel like they are ready to engage in such commitment without a clue as to where it may lead. I am an example of a bad decision made by my mother and father. I suffered the consequences of their bad decision. I am well and in college by God’s grace. Unlike other teenagers who did not have that opportunity.

If I do find information that goes completely against what I had expected to find, I will be happy to learn things from a different aspect. I am willing to learn, since one of my goals is to share and assist people with the knowledge that I gained. I intend to enlighten others with the truth even if it means that I have to challenge my own assumptions. The best way to assist others is to collect factual information and real life experiences, which will encourage the reader to think otherwise and to be convinced.

I intend on using non fiction articles, television shows,  books brochures, pamphlets  and newspapers to obtain information as well as real life experience by interviewing others. Those genres will be great assets to obtain information and support the findings to my question.

I am interested in this topic because teenagers have a tendency to mistake lust for love. As we all know, according to google, “ Love is a deep feeling of affection that you have for another person. It’s a lasting attraction that goes beyond the surface and turns into emotional attachment. Lust, on the other hand, is basically a physical attraction that leads to an overwhelming feeling of sexual desire thanks to a rush of hormones.” Teenagers lack the maturity and experience to differentiate between love and lust. I often see teenagers get into relationships and I wonder if it’s just a phase or is it the  beginning of a disaster. In other words, the misconception of love and lust may be a simple experience or a tremendous mistake that can scar for life.

After concluding my research I expect to gain the understanding to assist my fellow teenagers by helping them in their decisions prior to a relationship. Relationship is not something that you jump into. It is  something that requires wisdom, time and patience. It’s not something you jump into just for fun. Once you enter a relationship  for entertainment, your emotion begins to get attached with the person and you will end up getting hurt. I also expect to find the reason why teens feel like they are ready to engage in such commitment without a clue as to where it may lead. I am an example of a bad decision made by my mother and father. I suffered the consequences of their bad decision. I am well and in college by God’s grace. Unlike other teenagers who did not have that opportunity.

If I do find information that goes completely against what I had expected to find, I will be happy to learn things from a different aspect. I am willing to learn, since one of my goals is to share and assist people with the knowledge that I gained. I intend to enlighten others with the truth even if it means that I have to challenge my own assumptions. The best way to assist others is to collect factual information and real life experiences, which will encourage the reader to think otherwise and to be convinced.

I intend on using non fiction articles, television shows,  books brochures, pamphlets  and newspapers to obtain information as well as real life experience by interviewing others. Those genres will be great assets to obtain information and support the findings to my question.

My  First Source: Terri Orbuch, “Is it lust or Is it love”,TEDxOaklandUniversity,(September 14,2014)

Terri Orbuch does a ted talk where she speaks about differentiating love and lust in a relationship.In the ted talk she explains the signs of love and lust step by step. And I believe that her main point is that love and lust can be in a healthy relationship. It’s just that there are things that naturally have to grow in a relationship in order for it to be maintained within a relationship. For example in the video she says “ It’s love when you both use the word “we” in the relationship and It’s like you guys are intertwined and they are no longer just focusing on themselves but one another.” And she also says “ To rekindle lust into a love oriented relationship you need to do the things you used to do in the beginning of the relationship which is to go out new places to keep the surprises and mystery alive which brings lust”.

When I  watched the video I was a bit skeptical about it because I was afraid that I wasn’t going to get the response or information that I wanted to get which was straight forward details on how to differentiate love and lust and to tell which one is taking the lead in the relationship. But as I finished watching the video she made me realize how much teens can easily get blinded by lust thinking that it’s love. I was able to do my own sort of comparisons between lust and love while watching the video being that I am a teenager myself.

Terri in the video said that “ It’s love when you want to show the person off to the people that are most important in your lives.” Now I remember when I was in high school and my friends would be in their relationships and i would ask does your parents know and they would tell me no because they knew that their parents weren’t going to agree with what was going on but somehow they still believed that they were in love and that they would end up getting married after college. I used to tell them I hope their dreams come to existence, then a month later they broke up because they realized that those dreams of getting married were only temporary and that they didn’t really have the maturity to actually maintain a relationship. My main point is that a true relationship that has true love is something that should not be hidden. And I just really like how Terri properly showed the signs of love and lust in a relationship.

My second source: https://childmind.org/article/how-to-help-kids-have-good-romantic-relationships/

Rachel Ehmke Writes an article called “Teens and Romantic Relationships” as she shares the do’s and don’ts that parents should share with their teens and that teens should take for themselves . In the beginning of the article Rachel explains how prickly teenagers can be when it comes to their privacy. As she continues to write she states that “ Teenagers do look to us for guidance, though—even when they’d rather die than acknowledge that they are—and we can often have more influence than we realize.”  She is speaking in reference to the parents and to be quite frank with you I can absolutely agree with what she is saying being that I am a teenager myself and I do look up to my mom for guidance especially when it comes to my love life, I feel comfortable telling her about boys that I’ve had crushes on and she would give me advice on how to observe the person to see their flaws to know if the person is worth my liking.

As the article continues Rachel begins to explain the do’s in a relationship. And the one that popped out to me is when she said “ Being comfortable with someone means: You aren’t pressured to do things you don’t want to do. (This definitely includes sexual things, but also other things, like going somewhere you don’t want to go, or wearing something you don’t want to wear.)” And I feel like this applies to a lot of teenagers because a lot of them fall into the peer pressure of having to have sex in order for the relationship to be cool or successful. I have seen videos and actual people break up because of that and sometimes it hurts because the other person in the relationship wanted things to work out but just didn’t have the gut to give what was asked for which to me its ok because at least you left with your moral and sanity. But what hurts me the most is the people who gave in and were dumped after the fact. Its as if they were cheated.

 

One example that I can use is this girl that I used to go to school with in high school and she came to me looking very sad and she was explaining to me how her boyfriend kept on abusing her emotionally asking for oral sex and she gave it to him only to get maltreatment after wards once again emotion wise and as a friend I had to let her know that he doesnt love her. As you read the article you can see that there are more do’s in the article and then comes the don’ts as Rachel is explaining she states how teens should not forget their friends and this makes me think of the amount of relationships that have broken friendships and even family. I have seen my mom abandon her family over her boyfriend, she even abandoned me. We were no longer her priority. She would always be out with him, even sleep out without a care in the world until they broke up. And to heal she needed the family to be there. Luckily she found the support that she needed.And because of that experience I felt like I should speak out and try to help my fellow youths to not make that mistake so that our future generations can grow healthy through us. But overall this article helped me have a clearer view on relationships especially when it comes to the do’s and don’ts of the parent.

My Third source entry : “Counseling through your bible handbook” by June Hunt.

June Hunt wrote this book to talk about all of the things a person may go to counseling for. This book was mainly made for christians who like to do counseling using the bible. To relate to the topic of my annotated bibliography she makes a particular section where she talks about dating. She explains “ The Delights and Dangers of dating”. She explains the do’s and don’ts of dating, how to break off a dating relationship and also how to maintain purity over passion. What attracted me most about the do’s and don’ts “ Don’t focus on romance, Do focus on cultivating a friendship”. When I read this part it made me think about the relationships that have revolved around romance and that have broken up because they lack understanding for one another. Some people it’s in the middle of the relationship they realize that they dont know whats the other companions favorite color. As you read further Jane explains how to maintain purity over passion in a relationship. She Says “ Make purity in the dating relationship a top priority. Otherwise, it is too far easy to be misled by looks, propelled by insecurity, or lured by lust, and end up with a used body, a guilty conscience and a broken heart.” Personally I feel like if teens like myself were being told about purity then a lot of teens would have kept their innocence (virginity). Not that i’m saying that the ones that gave it away were bad but at least they would have known the big importance of it. Your virginity is something that you can never get back, so when you give it away you basically gave that person a piece of you. If some people who were in a relationship and were virgins knew and thought deeply about the value of their virginity I doubt they would have given it away (not that i’m discriminating against those who are no longer virgins once again).

I really like how Jane put everything in sections and she gives a good amount of details for each point. In the book Jane explains how to handle a breakup if you are the initiator or recipient of the break up on a T chart. And one of the points made for both sides made me think of an experience that I had when I was younger and what Jane said on the initiator side was “ Be honest and direct. Don’t lie about the reasons. The other person might try to fix any of your phantoms, made up excuses.” That made me think of a person who is not interested anymore but doesn’t want to hurt the other person’s feelings . And then one the recipient side Jane also says “ Listen but don’t take everything that is said literally. Look at the bigger picture. Evaluate the validity of the reasons given.” This reminds me of someone who is deeply rooted in the relationship. The reason why this reminded me of my past was because there was this boy that I was in a “Relationship” with and throughout this relationship I was the person who was deeply rooted and he wasn’t. I was in denial and wondered if it was just my mind playing with me. Valentines day came and he didn’t get me anything. I let that pass because we were young and money did not grow on trees. Then there was a day after lunch we were leaving the lunchroom and his friend came to me asking if I wanted to break up with the boy and I said it was his choice and as his friend went to him he said fine cause I already have someone else in mind. I was so vexed because all along he wasn’t interested in the relationship. I let bygones be bygones and we are still friends till this day.  Overall this section of the book was well written and added to the clearer view that I have on relationships.

Conclusion: To conclude this annotated bibliography I feel like the research that was done for this essay outdid me. Honestly I thought that the point of view that I had for relationships was clear but based on the research that was made my point of view was nothing compared to this and I’m so compelled by the sources that I might share this info with my friends. Now I see why people say to wait for the one. I also feel like now I’m able to save myself from a heart break because all four sources taught me how to differentiate love from lust. Each source gave me something deeper to think about, Terri from Ted talk made me realize that lust can be brought up in a love oriented relationship without it having to be brought up by sex. Love is something that is intertwined between two people. They become one. My second source from Rachel she taught me that just because you are in a relationship doesn’t mean that you have to neglect your friends. You can still maintain them and be in a relationship at the same time. My third source from Jane Hunt taught me how to maintain purity over passion in a relationship because it can leave me with a used body, broken heart, and a guilty conscience. Over all I now know that we have enough resources to help us differentiate love from lust

Unit one revised

 

To revise my unit one writing I had to listen to the comments made by Ms hall to know what needed to be changed. I was told that I gave too much details which I didn’t notice when I reread my writing.I took off a good amount of unnecessary details and separated my writing into paragraphs because in my original writing it was just one big paragraph, I was glad that she helped me notice that because If I saw one big paragraph I would not be interested to read it either. 

On one spring/summer transitioning day I  woke up tired wishing there was no school or at least that my math teacher would be absent. Not only did I not want to go to school but my room was cold because it was still spring. And the coldest part of the day was when the sun was just starting to rise. It was about 54 degrees according to channel 11 news which my grandma listened to when she is getting ready for work . And that makes it colder for the workers. As I finally got up from bed  I did my morning prayers and told my grandmother good morning as she was rushing for work leaving me $5 lunch money and my favorite breakfast eggs and cheese with french fries on the side ( i know it’s weird lol!).

 As I was getting ready I realized that time was going by fast so i had to eat the food quickly so that i could leave to walk to school and also buy lunch before i go in . I left the house at 7:15 am wanting lunch but not knowing what to buy. So I decided to get a turkey sandwich and a pina colada Arizona juice at the local Mexican deli. 

 

 That day I was wearing my blue polo shirt and black skirt because that was my school uniform school for eighth graders . Then my sandwich was finally done and as I was walking to school I saw parents passing by me with their kids walking in the opposite direction .As they were passing by I was reminiscing my elementary school days and wishing that these kids would enjoy themselves because junior high is a bit more tense.   Eventually I finally reached the junction. It was like a hudde reunion hall where all of my school mates meet coming from different places to go to school. As I stood waiting for the light to change I saw my group of friends shouting my name and out of excitement I ran to them to give them a hug.Then we walked to school and finally reached,  we parted ways and my joy went away because I knew my first class was math class which I dread.

 

 When I finally reached the cool sparkling wooden floored  room I saw my classmates getting themselves situated in their assigned seats, So I  walked to my seat and got myself situated.  The lesson began and as the lesson was going on my mind wandered off out of boredom and that’s when my teacher decided to ask me a question that I couldn’t answer and because I couldn’t answer the question my teacher said something that really hurt my feelings which was to “go wash my mouth in the bathroom because that’s where my words were coming from”.

 

 when I looked to my left and right the students kept their heads down because they knew how embarrassed i was. I kept quiet for the remaining time and couldn’t wait to go home. I finally got home and I prayed because that’s what I do when I feel down. I decided to call my godmother and she told me to not worry and that she would help me with my math class. Any question that I got wrong from any of my assignments she helped me with them.  I was progressing so well that  now I was helping my classmates. As the school year went on I realized that what I went through was wrong but if I didn’t go through it I would not have been humble enough to have the patience to help my classmates because some of them didn’t have the patience to help me. 

 

Through this my perspective in education changed  and it made me realize that everyone learns differently some quicker than others but regardless of it as a student you should keep on going because even if all else fails you still need to be different and make a change for yourself,family and the generations to come. This experience didn’t break me but made me new and see the importance of education from another level. I wrote my experience to tell my peers to keep their heads up especially during this pandemic because if you don’t do what’s best for yourself you’re only going to drag in life. And this experience also made me realize that education isn’t only  something that is being taught inside of a classroom but also is something that is being taught through your obstacles in life and it’s your choice on if you want to learn or not and giving up is not an option. You must go on. One thing that I think I’ll need help with is giving more concrete information because I feel like I don’t give enough and also this is my first college essay draft. On another note I’m also very proud because this is my first essay with 1051 word count. LOL

Element

The element that I  used to revise my work is checking my work that is it according to the questions that have been asked. In addition, I will rearrange some of my work into a perfect format. I will try to write on specific accurate and interesting information furthermore I will try to form an appropriate subject to the audience and which carry the information to the reader. When I will rewrite my work I will see things that will be appropriate and especially according to the reader for what he is looking for. I have chosen this element because I think that’s the significant element that I missed in my draft work therefore I want to improve it so that whoever read it find it perfect. 

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