English 1121 Journey

  1. Opener
  • Uses quote and has an attention getter


  1. Thesis 3 sub topics
  • There are all 3 sub topics for each paragraph.
  • Thesis is strong and clear.
  • It’s easy to know what the essay is going to be about.


  1. Paragraphs for subtopics and topic sentence for each
  • Each paragraph mentions the sub topic in the first sentence making it easy to know what each paragraph is going to be about.


  1. Transitional words/phrases
  • Smooth transitions into the next paragraph.
  • Easily connecting the paragraphs onto the conclusion.


  1. References
  • A quote is used in the introduction to grab the reader’s attention


  1. Grammar and conventions
  • Grammar is good but could maybe spice it up with a few challenging words


  1. Conclusion
  • Conclusion is clear and it mentions all three sub topics and main topic.
  • It’s easily transitioned from the third body paragraph.