When you have completed your Project 1 report and revised it according to the feedback that you receive on your writing, you may send it to Professor Ellis before our next class meets. Follow these directions for submitting Project 1.
- Login to your Google Drive account
- Open your report and verify that it is exactly how you would like it to be for grading
- Click on File > Download As > Microsoft Word (.docx)
- If you are on a campus computer, you might need to save your work to a flash drive. If you are at home, it might be saved in your /Downloads folder.
- Open your school email
- Create a new, professional email to jellis at citytech.cuny.edu (change the “at”)
- Use this subject for your email: ENG2570, Project 1
- Write a brief, professional email to Professor Ellis along these lines: Dear Professor Ellis, Please find my Project 1 Workplace Report attached. Sincerely, Your name
- Attach your downloaded report in Microsoft Word (.docx) format to this email
- Look over the email again and verify it is addressed correctly and your report is attached
- Send your email to Professor Ellis
- I will reply to your email with a notification of receipt as soon as possible
To: Kangyi Liu
From: Kazi Maoya
Date: 3/16/2017
Subject: Peer-review
Comments about peer-review
Need more detail on introduction
Grammar mistake
Make result short
Give some graph for better understand.
TO: Leonardo Calegare
FROM: Steven Rivera
DATE: 16 March 2017
SUBJECT: Peer Review Feedback on Project One
General:
Spelling and grammar checker
Your day in the life of a lawyer not reflected
Abstract:
daily basis; plus = seems wrong, double check grammar
Introduction:
First two sentences seem like filler. Redo or remove
All of its steps necessary that begin = rephrase, check spelling
Method:
“How did the laywer get there” – grammar?
Library website = database maybe? Rephrase
“Even when i choose” is wrong at the end of the second to last sentence
Results:
Any bachelor’s degree = any really true? Maybe rephrase to a bachelors in any field?
Let me know that i need to enter law school. You casually dropped that. Some people really dont know
It is true… = long run-on sentence
“Lawyers master,” = remove comma?
You mention a plethora or areas. Maybe say lawyers can specialize in many areas, rephrase this sentence.
Discussion:
No quotes or citations in the Discussion section
You dont really make a connection to “people’s lives” being changed
Same for future, about seeing yourself in 10 years
TO: Daniel Lawrence
FROM: Steven Rivera
DATE: 16 March 2017
SUBJECT: Peer Review Feedback on Project One
General:
Spelling and grammar checker needed
Structure not in place
Lots of opinions expressed throughout document: belongs in Discussion section
How does DC Electronic load and aeronautics connect with an engineering path? How does all that connect to your paper titled: electrical engineering of 2009?
Abstract:
Feels like how the introduction/methods section supposed to be
Method:
Not fleshed out, no information
Interview:
Q & A approach not fitting for this.
Questions presented are not of quality
Bibliography:
Information on sources not needed
TO: Kazi Maoya
FROM: Kangyi Liu
DATE: 3/16/17
SUBJECT: Project 1, peer review
I am providing feedback on my super impressive title about a career by Kazi Maoya
You have to insert the page number and your career at the top of each pages. For abstract, you did not include the question who is it for? For method, you want to write about what did you set out to learn. For result, using the information from your interview memo, library-sourced article memo, and Occupational Outlook Handbook memo, factually report what you learned about your selected career. Don’t just copy the informations, write about what you learn from this project. For the references, using the format for references you can search on purdue owl such as,Brown, M. (Jan. 2017). Google wifi: mesh networking made easy. PC World, 35(1), 59-66.
TO: Adrian Valarezo
FROM: Kangyi Liu
DATE: 3/16/17
SUBJECT: Project 1, peer review
I am providing feedback on The Legal Profeession by Adrian Valarezo
Top of each page should print clearly.
Need the titles for each topics. Such as, Introduction, Method, Results …
I think you missed one paragraph either introduction or Method, or you combine them together.
You don’t have introduction paragraph for result that telling what it is about.
For second citation, you need correct your apa format from purdue owl.
TO: Ronald C. Hinds
FROM: Doneek Drumgo (doneek.drumgo@mail.citytech.cuny.edu)
DATE: March 17, 2017
SUBJECT: Peer Review
The purpose of this memo is to provide feedback on “Embarking on a new career as a freelancer” document by Ronald C. Hinds
Put the abstract on a separate page
Include the targeted audience in your abstract
Include the purpose of this report in your introduction
Give details on information you researched from the Occupational Outlook Handbook as part of your results.
This report is in the right direction. It just need more information as I pointed out.
TO: Daniel.O.L
FROM: Doneek Drumgo (doneek.drumgo@mail.citytech.cuny.edu)
DATE: March 16, 2017
SUBJECT: Peer Review
The purpose of this memo is to provide feedback on “Electrical Engineering Of 2019” by Daniel.O.L.
For your introduction, include the targeted audience for this report
For your discussion, include what you specifically need to do to prepare for your field
Mention why you feel the career is right or wrong for you and the reasons behind your choice as part of your discussion
Include the targeted audience in your abstract as well
There is a typo in your introduction. Change the word beginning to begin