With the magazine article that you brought to today’s class, we will discuss how to write a letter to the editor in response to the article. Then you will have the first phase of class to write and post your letter as a comment made to this blog post. Of course, remember to save your letter on Google Drive, flash drive, or elsewhere before posting it to OpenLab–always protect your deliverables!
ENG1133 Specialized Communication for Technology Students, FA2017
ENG1133 with Prof. Ellis
555 Nowhere Ln.
Somewhere, SW 12345
nikka.rosenstein@mail.citytech.cuny.edu
(555) 555-5555
September 5, 2017
Ryan DâAgostino, Editor in Chief
Hearst Communications, Inc.
300 West 57th Street
New York, NY 10019-3797
Dear Mr. DâAgostino,
As a professional copy and technical writer, Iâd like to express my disappointment with your interview of Casey Neistat (âThe Most Trusted Name in News,â October 2017).
I have spent many hours writing copy to fill blog posts, comment boxes, and articles that say nothing but fill space with convincing content. I would never call these writings news, no matter how much they pretended to say something newsworthy. They are paid-for word count, nothing more.
Mr. Neistatâs work, from the descriptions given, seem to be the same in video form. As he himself admits, thereâs nothing of journalism behind his content aside from choices of topics. Heâs correct in equating his work to the empty noise of an average news panel, but he also doesnât justify why his channel or application provide anything more substantial. He may be accruing views, but his content seems no more valuable than the comment section of any news article, and I feel it was very lax of Mr. Belloni as an interviewer not to press that point.
It would be fantastic if somehow Mr. Neistatâs work eventually provoked the evolution of professional news media that we sorely need. But to present a video-sharing app as the future of journalism is deeply misleading and makes your article feel as empty as my commissioned content-less articles.
Sincerely,
Nikka Rosenstein
123 Something Place
Brooklyn, NY / 00000
preston.isolani@mail.citytech.cuny.edu
(123) 456-789
September 5th, 2017
Samuel Roberts , Editor
Future Publishing Ltd.
One Lombard Street, Suite 200
San Francisco, CA / 94111
Dear Mr. Roberts,
As an avid gamer that puts in a minimum of 30 hours a week throughout different platforms, I would like to say the coverage in your interview with Sega Europeâs John Clark in the PC GAMER October 2017 issue was refreshing. Itâs a topic that should be talked about more in a positive light.
The importance of the games of the past are greatly overlooked, even if they be only 5-10 years old. As long as they are of high quality and are behind the at the time technology thatâs available to developers then it should be no problem to recreate the experience to remove any past issues, technical limitations, or exclusivity deals.
I believe it would be a great idea to continue this type of discussion with others companies representatives to see their comprehension of their market. They can deliver the same experiences again in a whole new package that fans would love to see such as franchises like Halo, Uncharted, and the very recent Crash Bandicoot. People often give the stigma that remakes are lazy and simply cash grabs but they can be regarded as essential. It can provide players playing on only one platform an experience theyâve never had before. An instance that comes to mind is Rockstarâs Red Dead Redemption not being available on the PC platform. Itâs important to remind these companies that itâs essential to remember the great games they created in the past can still be enjoyed today in brand new ways.
Sincerely,
Preston T. Isolani
521 5th Avenue
New York, NY 10175
donovan.valle@mail.citytech.cuny.edu
(212) 575-3000
September 5, 2017
Joe Brown, Editor-in-Chief
Popular Science
P.O. Box 6364
Harlan, IA 51593-1864
Dear Mr. Brown,
As a college student and part-time retail worker living in New York City, I wanted to write in agreement with the recent article written by Leslie Kaufman (âYour Schedule Could Be Killing You,â October 2017). Growing up in the inner cities and having to work a part-time job while trying to maintain a high GPA, as well as hunting and scouting for internships in a relative field, it can be difficult to manage your time when there hardly is any.
While I fully agree with the stance the author takes, I would have wished that Kaufman focused some more on the younger generation who stress to keep up with the rising costs of living, while trying to balance all the things I previously mentioned that comes with being a full-time student.
It is an issue we must really look to solve, because if it is a health issue as Kaufman goes on to explain in the article, then we are potentially dealing with an entire generation of young people that are already one step behind when it comes to physical and mental health. While Kaufman does shed some light on occupations like truck drivers and overnight shifts, I wish the author went a little more in depth, seeing as these are the occupations that most of middle and low class Americans occupy, thus highlighting a huge problem when it comes to those same Americans trying to find the time to maintain a healthy lifestyle. Iâd like for this article to maybe address some possible solutions, whether it be lifestyle choices, a change in the status quo, or policy changes.
As a full-time student with a job, I can whole-heartedly agree that the issues this article raises are important and severely under looked by Americans. In the future, I would love to see some more discussion of this issue and hopefully see some possible solutions raised so that we can address this problem and become a healthier society.
Sincerely,
Donovan Valle
123 Address St.
New York, NY 10000
james.mitchell@email.citytech.cuny.edu
(916) 555-1234
September 5, 2017
James Ledbetter, Editor
Inc. Magazine
7 World Trade Center
New York, NY 10007-2195
Dear Mr. Ledbetter (Editor),
As an avid musician and entrepreneur that has exhausted methods for buying and selling instruments, I wanted to offer some additional insight into the article written by David Kalt (âThis Company Rocks,â September 2017).
In my experience, the hardest part about buying instruments is finding one that channels the comfort and tone of my creative individuality. The next biggest upset in finding gear is when the functionality of that instrument is cumbersome, or temporary. It was disappointing to not see mention of either in your article. As the music business takes passion, so should reflecting on the quality of that business. Likewise, the hardest part about selling instruments is knowing the personal and sentimental value go far above the market value. While you mention some of these exchange rates, the business requires passion for the art. It seems careless to disregard this element when investigating this business. I would be curious to know how Reverb.com connects with its users, and how buyers rate their experience.
In conclusion, prosperity in the music business relies on the satisfaction of musicians connecting with the right gear that fits their individual passion. How does Reverb.com connect with users and allow buyers a valuable exchange?
Sincerely,
James Mitchell
63-40 85th Place
Middle Village, NY 11385
paulina.nawiesniak@icloud.com
(347) 355-1432
September 5th, 2017
Elizabeth Goodman Artis, Editor in Chief
Meredith Corporation
805 Third Avenue
New York, NY 10022
Dear Ms. Goodman Artis,
As a current student at City College of Technology, studying Biology, and in particular Human Anatomy and Physiology topic, I wanted to write in a disagreement with the recent article written by Lesley Rotchford (â Scar Fix,â July/August 2017).
All of the examples given by Ms. Rotchford regarding scars, and how to erase them from the body caused me to write you this letter. Treatments that the author mentions in this article are mainly unhealthy to someone’s body. What I am referring to exactly are the laser treatments that are suppose efficiently help with uneven tissue. Laser treatment isnât healthy for the skin tissue, as they can cause different damage overtime, which isnât mentioned here in this article. Since our DNA changes every time we go to the tanning salon, does this laser treatment has a similar effect? I would guess maybe it does, but not as broad as the UV light. I am worried that maybe overtime those who used those laser treatments might have problem with their skin. Just something to look forward to.
Lastly, I would like all readers to understand that treating scars might not always require laser treatment, there are a few natural remedies that might play a role in this case. Therefore, I appeal for either more detail about the side effects of laser treatment or maybe not mention them in this article.
With Sincerest Regards,
Paulina Nawiesniak
1234 Rosecroft Street
Richmond, VA 23225
jennifer.travinski@mail.citytech.cuny.edu
804.999.7777
September 5, 2017
Nicholas Thompson, Editor-In-Chief
WIRED Magazine
P.O. Box 37706
Boone, IA 50037-0706
Dear Mr. Thompson,
As a New York City College of Technology Student, tech geek and a concerned human being more skeptical of other humans than robots, I wanted to write to you in disagreement to the recent article written by Lexi Pandell (âShould We Worry: Will AI Turn Against Me?â).
I enjoyed the article by Ms. Pandell, but I believe the question posed isnât the exact one we should be asking ourselves. Perhaps âWhich Humans Are Qualified to Make Certain AI Wonât Turn Against Me?â would be more apt (albeit less catchy). The article jokingly contemplates whether AI will spiral out of control and morph our human world into an evil quagmire, and then assures us that engineers for Google and Oxford are âon it, just in caseâ. Thatâs not super comforting in and of itself. The real issue, per the article, is whether AI might diverge from âourâ intended goals. My concern is, who is researching the researchers, and what are their goals? Who deems the ethics of these programmers to be morally sound, worthy of policing potentially destructive AI?
My contention is that the real issue is ensuring that these programmers, so intent on shaping and monitoring the moral compass of AI, are equally vetted as moral. Just in case not all humans are âinherently goodâ as the article suggested.
Sincerely,
Jennifer L. Travinski
836 East 48st
Brooklyn ,NY 11203
Creunis.Lors@mail.citytech.cuny.edu
(347) 845-7315
September 5, 2017
Elizabeth E. (Liz) Pohland, editior
9401 Lee Highway, Suite 300
Fairfax, VA 22031-1803
Dear Ms. Elizabeth ,
As a soon to graduate technical writing student , i want to write in my comments of the impression the recent article written by richard rabil jr. ( âhow to be an amazing tech comm job applicant: tips from a tech comm hiring manager â, may 2017) made upon me .
This article provided much needed insight into how to navigate job searching and hot to approach it . As a student I have been trying to figure out how to apply my skills , market them to employers and where to focus my energy on as student and this article has hit the nail on the head on every point it discusses .
The article goes into depth about every possible facet of seeking employment and finding job opportunities. Written in a simplistic and easy to understand manner , I was able to learn a lot about what employers are looking for .Not only does it provide critical information but also critical resources that i can later use for my own self learning where i may have no other wise have known about .
As a student i want to say that i am deeply grateful for this publication and its free access to students. I encourage you and your team to continue to create these articles to provide clarity and what can be a sometimes confusing and difficult to sort through information and field . This article has helped me in many ways and will be useful knowledge for me and future .
Sincerely ,
Creunis lors
235 Address ave
Queens NY 11418
christian.baque@mail.citytech.cuny.edu
(917) 123-4598
September 5, 2017
Vanessa Revelli
PO Box 8623
Ann Arbor, MI 48107-8623,
Dear Ms. Revelli,
As a moderately experienced Mechanical Engineering student, I would like to write in agreeance to the article that was written about Robert âKurtâ Hutchinson (âMolding A New Generation of Engineersâ, January 2017)
As a student that never had that privilege of knowing at a young age what career paths were open and what was my strong suit this article showed me that people are out there helping the youth get prepared. The fact that Robert âKurtâ Hutchinson went from fabricating his own custom designs to teaching shows the passion that every kid needs to feel in order to succeed in their career path.
It would be great to see other schools see how they can provide students with career base classes like these so that kids could see and gain experience in that career path. Those students that get the hands on experience get some advantage into this career.
Sincerely,
Christian Baque
787 Wynn Way
Las Vegas , NV 57008
(917) 288-7878
Edgar.Artiles@mail.citytech.cuny.edu
September 5th, 2017
Dear Editing,
Travel + Leisure Publications
1120 6th Ave #9
New York, NY 10036-9992
Dear Editor,
As an advance student in hospitality at New York City College of Technology ,Your Article âNapa, Off the vineâ (Travel+Leisure, September 2017) supports my theory that Hospitality is a constant evolving world of wonders that re-invents and makes anew that what screams change. A re-invention of one of the world’s most premier Wine destinations helps us understand and comprehend that even the most traditional of places needs a âfaceliftâ.
Napa Valley according to your article has been âsince the beginning of this decade, had started to feel a little too familiarâ , change was needed and the community is galvanizing behind the idea of being âfruitfulâ throughout the whole year. Your article explains the approach different hotels are taking by embodying the idea of wine culture and incorporating it in the architecture and throughout the experience of the guests. The subterranean Tasting rooms at covert Estate shows the craftsmanship and dedication these hoteliers are implementing in their hotels.
Opening the market to making Napa Valley more accessible to those who can’t afford the high roller suites definitely shows the untapped potential Napa Valley holds.
Change is needed in a world that constantly changes, being able to adapt is a key necessary to survive. Unlike Atlantic City, hurried is the community of Napa Valley to re-invent itself before it becomes known as âdry cityâ.
Howard Daley
300 Jay Street
Brooklyn NY 11238 (718) 123 4567 Howarddaley@mail.citytech
September 5, 2017
Janelle Penny Sr. Editor
Buildings PO Box 1888
Cedar Rapids. IA 52406 â 1888
Dear Ms. Penny .
As an avid reader and a long time subscriber to your printed magazine Buildings I feel compelled to address an article printed in your issue on May 05, 2017. By Justin Feit entitled: With Energy Star on its death bed, whatâs next for FM. Facilities Management has been my career for over ten years and during which I have acquired a Bachelorâs degree from The New York College of Technology.
In as much as I agree that there will be changes ahead with the Trump regressive policies and its impact on the commercial building industry, I remain optimistic. The president can roll back that much energy regulation and no more. The ultimate target been the EPA. The agency is facing a 31% budget cut. Though the demise of this exec body may seem inevitable I remain convinced that we in the industry will succeed in our effort to reduce our carbon footprint and beyond the executive orders notwithstanding. Weâve always found a way. This is certainly not the time to cut and run. Instead we double out effort and continue our work.
Your publication remains a valuable tool in this effort and I am indeed optimistic that you will continue the great work that we as Facilities Managers have come to rely upon especially now.
Sincerely
Howard Daley
9623 56Ave
Queens, NY 11373
Huakang.mei@mail.citytech.cuny.edu
(654)-985-785
September 5, 2017
Nicholas Thompson, Editor in Chief
Wired
1 World Trade Center
New York, NY 10007
As a recent undergraduate of Hospitality Management Program in The New York City College of Technology. I wanted write in agreeance to the article that was written by Josh Davis (âWhy Trump Should Welcome Dreamersâ September 2017)
As a student with residency papers, I never need to worry about I will getting deport by the US government. However, not everybody as lucky as me, people are trying so hard to live in this country. The fact that Mr. Davis states in the article is the Congress does act to try to save DACA (Deferred Action for Childhood Arrivals), approximately 800,000 people. I know people they first with no residency papers and end up with them. They all behave very well and contributing to these country.
I am feel happy to see that the government took actions to help those people to stay in this country because when the new president begins to serve the country, he mentioned before that he will deport the undocumented immigrants. In my options if those undocumented immigrants are doing what they supposed to do, they should not be forcing to deport.
Sincerely,
Huakang Mei
2000 Hollow way
Cambridge, NJ 12816
(718) 852-6524
Bonillaleslie70@yahoo.com
September 5, 2017
Philip Campbell, Editor
Springer nature New York
1 New York Plaza STE 4500
New York, NY 10004-1562
Dear Mr. Campbell,
As a student at New York City College Of Technology ,majoring in Professional and Technical Writing and specialising in Biology I read the article â Critical Limb Ischaemia:Artery Repairâ, August 2017, by DAvid Holmes. I wanted to write in agreement with what Mr. David Holmes suggested.
I am in agreement with the article and think there should be more experiments done on the CD34 protein to further find out its functions . There are many people with CDL that aren’t eligible for the limited surgical treatments and have to face death. This revelation of the protein CD34 and its potential future in cell therapy gives hope to those with CLI ( critical Limb Ischaemia).
The CD34 protein can be a game changer in the field of regenerative medicine and can reduce the death rate of individuals with CDL. If the CD34 protein successfully works it can be applied to not only to those who suffer from CLI but also very possibly other health ailments. Thank you for the research you have done and look forward to reading your findings after the clinical trials.
Sincerely,
Leslie M. Bonilla
Shanna Powell
1654 Thompson Street
Douglasville, Georgia 12534
(484) 355-5522
hiredtoday@thebestjobever.com
September 9, 2017
Molly McDonough , Editor
ABA Journal
321 N. Clark St., 20th FL
Chicago, IL 60654
Dear Ms. Molly McDonough,
As a paralegal studies scholar with several critical publications. I wanted to write in agreements with the recent article written by Debra Cassens Weiss (âCops Arrest Nurse After She Says He Needs Warrant or Consent For Blood Draw). It is my option that this article bring to light the issues being faced on the road and in
In this article, a the nurse refused to take blood from an unconscious truck driver brought into the hospital that was involved in a car accident. The police department demanded the nurse draw the blood but she refused. The nurse contacted her supervisor giving evidence to her following the hospital rules and regulations but the officers proceeded to arrest her. This article shows the injustice that can result from police officers not knowing the very law they are to uphold. The case law included in this article is Birchfield v North Dakota, 2016, a case involving a suspected drunk driver, told he would serve time if he refused to take a blood test showing his blood alcohol level. This case proves, it is illegal for law enforcement to force the drawing of a possible suspects blood, which by law is considered intrusive and a violation of a personâs fourth amendment right. It is only legal if the officers obtain a legal and proper warrant from the courts.
This article was and is a view into a lot of incidences where law enforcement over step their rights as officers and try to take the law into their own hands. This also educates the public, who may not be familiar with the law and their rights. It is lawful for an arresting police officer to ask a suspected drunk driver to take a BAC test, which is a blood alcohol concentration test. It is unlawful to force a suspected drunk driver or any suspect to take a blood test without a warrant. Through blood work, more than just the blood alcohol level can be discovered. For example, a personâs medical history like their STD/HIV (AIDS) status, cancer history, or genetic defects. This takes away a personâs right to privacy and anonymity. The information discovered from these tests must be left with the department which requested the test, which anyone can access.
I applaud the author and the proper use of case law within her article. Not only are readers walking away educated in the law but they are also walking away with confidence in their rights as citizens. Lastly this article shows that not all officers are correct in there information of the law. I hope this opens up a conversation of awareness with the heads of police departments across the nation. Hopefully this will get them to investigate the lack of education among their own colleagues. We may never know how many rights have been violated from this unconstitutional act. All that can be done now is be aware. Once you know better, you must do better,
Sincerely,
Shanna Powell
106 Garnett Street
Brooklyn NY 11206
201- 347-2333
Ronald.Hinds@mail.citytech.cuny.edu
September 12, 2017
Ms Susan Hassler, Editor
IEEE Spectrum
3 Park Avenue
New York NY 10016-5997
Dear Editor,
I disagree with the content of the article titled âThe Nuclear Weapons Complexities,â by G. Pascal Zachary, contained in the IEEE Spectrum of August 2017. My disagreement lies in primarily my objection to these weapons which can destroy our planet many times over. The article states, as a concern, that these weapons can âigniteâ a new arms race and continues to talk about its susceptibility to hackers. Thatâs enough to raise my hackles.
I want to clearly promulgate my credentials as a peace maker. Why doesnât the writer propose that the astronomical, associated cost(s), be used as an investment in education, for eradicating disease, feeding the hungry and housing the homeless? The writer talks about an obscene proposal to spend $100 billion on a submarine. He does this without any commentary.
Another point I want to mention is the possibility of human error and even more dangerous the likelihood of the military codes being in the hands of a dangerous and temperamental Commander-in-Chief.
We live in a dangerous world. Let sanity prevail!
Very truly yours,
Ronald C. Hinds
123 Random ST
DesconocĂdo, MIA 09876
(800) UNK-NOWN
Arnold.Lopez@mail.citytech.cuny.edu
September. 05, 2017
Priya Elan, Editor
The Guide
Kingâs Place, 90 York Way,
London N1 9GU
Dear Priya Elan,
I am a great fan of The Guide and I thoroughly enjoy all the articles in your magazine. However, I must say I am in disagreement with some statements made in this weekâs article âAchtung, maybe?â by Peter Robinson. I may agree with the entire topic the article is covering, but the evidence and conclusion deriving from said evidence is completely wrong.
The article Mr. Robinson had written about eras in music made total sense to me, as Iâve probably never heard the term âalbum campaignâ used before this article. However, I donât think album campaigns are disappearing since he himself states they are being called eras now. The only thing disappearing is the name. The second, and biggest disagreement, I have with the article is his reasoning for Katy Perryâs current problems in the music industry. He said, âThe era rulebook is brief â consistent typography, a distinct colour palette and so on â but one law must be followed: never change your hairstyle mid-era.â This is most certainly not the case since the changing of her hair style was the start of a new era. The problems she has donât derive from her choice in hair style, but from the actions sheâs taken on social media and the people attacking her for it.
Katy Perry had lashed out against one of her fans on a live feed when they said they preferred her long, dark locks to which she replied, âOh, do you miss Barack Obama as well? Ok, times change. Bye.â This garnered a lot of heat all while her fans defended her saying she is a huge Obama supporter and that the joke was just âa lame joke.â Soon after, on twitter, @CallMeMano claimed Perry was comfortable calling him âher #nigga,â but that he wasnât. This had people going further back in his posts to see he often claimed she regularly used the word and tweeted âmos privileged white people with cool wealthy blk friends think they can say nigga.â Furthermore, Katy Perry claimed she was going make purposeful pop music and when Swish Swish came out, this was seen as a track against Taylor Swift. This sparked Ruby Rose, friend to Taylor Swift, to speak out against the track along with plenty of her and Swiftâs fans. She claimed Perry had gone against her word to release purposeful pop and said she was low for saying she was going political activist only to ditch it and release Swish Swish. These are the reasons she is facing issues, not a change of hairstyle.
I will continue to remain a fan of the magazine, but be sure to get all the facts before accusing a hairstyle for someoneâs troubles in the industry.
Sincerely,
Arnold Lopez
33 Dove street
Brooklyn, NY 11238
347-304-6969
zina2760@gmail.com
Sepetmber 5, 2017
Editor
Facilities Management Journal
London, UK
Dear Mr. Editor.
As a facilities management student, caught my interest the Energy Management Article that is written by Mr. Alan Luscombe from Uninterruptable Power Supplies (UPS) in (FMJ Volume 25 of May 2017). Explaining the new technology to protect computerized systems in smart building from electronic disturbances and choosing the right UPS solution.
The article raised a very important point by mentioning the factors that determine how to choose the right UPS solution. One main factor is the individual needs of the organization or the facility. In addition the UPS solution system is ideal for short-time blackouts especially in organizations that cannot afford power interruption. However in the case of long-time blackouts is best to support the UPS with a power generator to establish a seamless end-to-end solution.
In conclusion, I believe it’s essential to use such a system in facilities and organizations in order to avoid power interruption.
Sincerely
Zinab S. Adam
Tunde Ogunyemi
696 Saratoga Avenue
Brooklyn NY. 11212
(917) 881-7854
Tunde.Ogunyemi@mail.citytech.cuny.edu
7th October 202017
Michael W. Smith
Chief Medical Editor, WebMD
300 Jay St
Brooklyn, NY. 12345
Dear Mr. Smith,
As a student at New York City College of Technology majoring in Nursing, I read the article âRemote Controlâ, March/April 2017, by Kara Mayer Robinson. I am writing in agreement to what Ms. Kara suggested in the article and at the same time to give my own additional suggestion that could be of help.
The article was all about the remote gym class of fitness, at home streaming and studio. As it was stated that all that one needed to set up a remote and fitness class of studio is to have enough space at home to accommodate every move, equipment that is necessary, device must be working well and the area must be well lighten to allow the instructor to be able to see every move of the streaming at the other end.
In addition, I strongly agree that the individual participant must not miss the time to start in order not to lack behind the group class. There must be adequate supply of internet and camera must be well positioned so that the instructor will be able to see every move of the participant. The individual participant must log into the class earlier than the scheduled time the meeting.
I found out that traveling to the gym is an exercise on its own, but the remote studio class will cut off some exercise aspect of traveling to the studio either by jugging to the jum or driving. However, this article was very informative and any interested participant will have to spend extra dollars to purchase the necessary equipment and must be time conscious and disciplined.
Sincerely
Tunde Ogunyemi