To start my revisions I reviewed feedback from Prof. Belli on both unit 1 and 2. I needed to do some reframing and organizing so I started there. Moving parts of my writing to an earlier or later section to better suit the genre. Having to add different transitions as I changed the layout of my writing. I still need to keep revising for other errors in my sentence structure but the bulk of my writing and the main points for the most part I would keep the same. There are some parts where I was told I should take out or change but I liked them so I kept it originally. I am struggling with changing parts of my writing to the readers perspective. During peer edits It was recommended to remove parts of my writing but I am not the best at taking advice or criticism. I need to find a way to change what I wrote in order to better suit the readers even if I like what I wrote and think it sounds good.
I have an outline that I am using to plan my speech, It can be easily filled using the information I already have from our unit two assignment. I am still deciding on the delivery method of the speech, If I am to write it out that would be in another document but if I am to voice record my speech that can be straight from my outline and I would upload the speech.
Informative Speech Outline (Change this to your title)
Name: Neal Ross
General Purpose: To inform
Specific Purpose: To inform the audience on the effects parents have on their LGBTQ+ kids.
For my informative speech I would like to choose the topic of mental health in queer youth. My specific purpose is to inform the audience on the effects parents have on their LGBTQ+ kids mental health. I would be able to relate this to topic myself and use first-hand accounts from others, as well as found sources.
My central idea will reflect on acceptance, or lack thereof, for queer identity from parents and how it directly effects mental health potentially leading to self-harming behaviors. I will be focusing my speech on cause and effect order, starting with acceptance from families, then moving to how mental health has been effected.
Organizational Arrangement: Cause and effect
Gain audience’s attention:
IV. Preview the body: “In this speech I will talk about:”
Main point 1:
- Supporting Point
- Supporting Point
Main point 2:
- Supporting Point
- Supporting Point
Main point 3:
- Supporting Point
- Supporting Point
I. Summarize main points: “Today I have told you about:”
End with “clincher”
There has been very limited reach on what is causing the difference in mental health issues between the LGBTQ+ community and their cis gender heterosexual peers. It is imperative that we create an understanding of why this is happening and discover solutions so this cycle ceases to c continue. I am attempting to reach people who can fund research in this area to create a better understanding of the causes of the mental health disparities and support research as to ways this can stopped. I plan to get started by appealing to their pathos, making them feel an emotional connection to the cause invoking them to want to support the cause. I am going to need to learn how to formulate a proposal as I do not know what goes into one as of yet. I will most likely need to include statistics and accounts that I uses in my annotated bibliography to demonstrate a need. One concern I have is that I don’t know what a grant proposal really is or what goes into it, do I need a specific research project for them to contribute to, I don’t. Should I plan a speech instead of a proposal encouraging people to donate a provide specific organizations in which they can contribute to in order to further this research.
I would like to believe I am a much better writer than I am a driver. The annoyances Kyle Stedman breaks down are some that I have focused on in my writing, especially in this class. Appropriately using quotes, introducing and spending enough time on them. I hadn’t given too much consideration to how many quotes may be too many, avoid over using quotes giving excess information without adequately proving substance to them. How much explanation and analyzing a quote need is never really clear and depend on the quote honestly but it is something I may need to continue working on. Introducing quotes well enough so they are not just hanging in the piece allows the quote to carry more weight and credibility. This semester I feel I have developed on my quote introductions, usually I would use a generic half sentence to introduce but lately I have been trying to add more of an introduction in order to ease into the quotes. Citing information is something I had worked on a bit in previous classes, learning to use in text citations and an alphabetical works cited page especially while doing research where many sources are introduced. I always try to stick to what I have previously learned about citing; different types of citing like APA and MLA, when to use them and how to properly use in text citations.
What can be done to protect queer youth from suffering the mental health issues that have been seen in the queer community for way too long? Understanding the reasoning behind the sheer number of queer mental health issues and ways this can be combated is imperative to protecting young generations and generations to come. We must veer away from the road of unacceptance and denial that we have been on. Michael E. Newcomb, who has extensively analyzed research on such topics, brings to light the how apaulingly limited the action has been to stop this cycle of mental health disparities between the LGBTQ+ community and their cisgender heterosexual peers. “Understanding the processes that lead to positive outcomes is essential to develop strategies for improving relationships between parents and their LGBTQ youth and mitigating health disparities.” (Newcomb et al.) Newcomb insists that more must be done to help the Queer community from suffering from mental health issues, research needs to be done to understand what is causing these issues and how they can be combated. The LGBTQ+ community has been overlooked for far too long, their mental health is just as important as any other therefore there is no reason we should be seeing the numbers of mental health issues we have been seeing for quite some time now. change starts with understanding, finding the root of these issues and effectively studying ways to combat these disparities.
- Newcomb, Michael E, et al. “The Influence of Families on LGBTQ Youth Health: A Call to Action for Innovation in Research and Intervention Development.” LGBT Health, Mary Ann Liebert, Inc., Publishers, 2019, https://www.ncbi.nlm.nih.gov/pmc/articles/PMC6551980/.
I interviewed a 20-year-old bisexual woman to gauge how the experiences of someone who identifies as bisexual would differ from another member of the community. The individual was an Ecuadorian immigrant currently living at university. She has prior lived with her older brother who identifies as gay a younger sister, mother and father. She recalled the experience of her brother coming out as gay to their family, he was 16 years old and in high school at the time, their father was not happy about his only son being gay but he didn’t outwardly express much. Their mother on the other hand refused to accept her new reality, forcing him to go to church and denying him his sexuality. Eventually he became distant from the family and stopped talking to them all together. Although his sister never expressed anything bad about his sexuality, he became cold and wouldn’t acknowledge their relation outside of the house. The refusal of parents to accept their child’s sexuality leads the child to feel unwanted and into isolation. Seeing how her parents reacted to her brother she had no intention of telling her parents of her own queer identity. For years no one in her family knew, “I couldn’t risk what happened to my brother to happen to me. When I entered college and moved away from home is when I really started experimenting with my sexuality. I was always interested in other girls, but I couldn’t risk my parents finding out. My first semester of college I almost completely stopped eating; I would have one small meal a day. I wanted to be desirable to the other girls and to have those experiences with them that I didn’t have the opportunity to have before. I lost 20 pounds that semester.”(Pineda. C, Nov. 2022) Being closeted, confining yourself to a box that others feel most comfortable around is what may queer youth have to do. This can cause low self image which in this case led to an eating disorder. Fear of rejection can easily spread into a mindset, starting with your family it can transform to all other aspects of your life and cause real damage. “When I went home for Christmas brought the idea of bisexuality up to my mother telling her about my roommate who happened to also be bisexual. Her response was “ I understand being gay and being lesbian but being bisexual … You just want to sleep around; it is just people asking for an excuse to be a slut.”” (Pineda. C, Nov. 2022) Many times bisexuality is not acknowledging and in cases like this people see it as an excuse for sex, slut shaming for it. A person’s sexuality not being acknowledged as a real thing, especially when it is from your own family will caused you to be even more closed off. This can lead to trust issues and not even wanting to confide in people especially your family.
People may believe that the experience of a bisexual person/adolescent may be easier for others to accept or become accustomed to but that is not always the case, there are many different stigmas that come with bisexuality that another member of the queer community does not come across. I wasn’t aware of the extreme sexualization of bisexuality, to view someone’s sexual identity simply as a means of having sex or as them being “slutty” is not something I had thought of before so it was quite shocking to come to the realization that people can view sexuality as just a way of having sex rather than whom a person can find a connection with as well as physical attraction. I would have expected that because there was another sibling who was a part of the Queer community it would be easier to come out to the family, but parent’s views are not easily changed, and their ways of thinking remained the same forcing this young woman to feel she couldn’t share that part of herself with her family. In no way am I an expert interviewer, I was aiming at understanding the experience of bisexuality as it is a part of the LGBTQ+ spectrum that I myself don’t identify under. My aim was to see if a family’s views would be less critical on someone who identifies as bisexual rather than homosexual. This is one example of a bisexual person and a specific family, not all families share the same cultural background and upbringings that would impact acceptance, but this is a first hand circumstance where a young woman feels forced to hide her queer identity and the impacts it has had on her mental health. The number of young LGBTQ+ people who cannot share this important part of themselves with their families for they don’t have understanding families who will accept them and treat them the same is honestly sad and many are not even willing to open that part of themselves up to anyone or even themselves due to the belief’s their families have instilled in them.
What is causing the drastic difference in mental health of queer youth than their cis-het peers. There are many different reasons why people suffer from mental health issues, and we cannot account one factor as the reason for all mental health problems, but as the majority of a child’s the developmental years are spent with their families those opinions and interactions often become some of the most if not the most important and influential. The impact families have on self-esteem and self-worth will lead queer youth to either flourish or suffer mental health issues going into adolescents and adulthood. I was expecting there to be some correlation between families and mental health issues, but the data found in the research study depicts extremely high percentage linking young queer peoples’ experiences with family to their mental health issues. The range of type of trauma I have seen though this research can also be attributed to the severity of mental health and even actions young queer people take. Traumas inflicted by families can simply be misgendering or not believing one’s queer identity, an outward display of unacceptance, or even as extreme as physical violence, abuse and sexual assault. Often the traumas young LGBTQ+ people have from one’s own family lead to self-harming behaviors and ideations. Rejection and unacceptance from family is not something that can be easily overcome, fear of rejection sticks with a person and had harmful effects on self-image. Not being able to be comfortable in your own skin and taking drastic harmful measures to mold yourself to fit the standards of others. There is an overall lack of education and knowledge on the queer community within family units especially from those who don’t identify as LGBTQ+. This Lack of knowledge leads to not knowing how to properly accept a queer child or family member causing unnecessary mental health issues stemming from trauma. There is an overall lack of research as to why there is such mental health issues within the LGBTQ+ community and how they can be combatted. It is important that there becomes an awareness on how serious this issue is an many more research initiatives devoted to stopping this trend. The families of queer youth often neglect to consider the implications of their own actions on their children. It is imperative that families learn the proper way to cope with and accept their Childs LGBTQ+ identity or they face losing them all together.
Newcomb, Michael E, et al. “The Influence of Families on LGBTQ Youth Health: A Call to Action for Innovation in Research and Intervention Development.” LGBT Health, Mary Ann Liebert, Inc., Publishers, 2019, https://www.ncbi.nlm.nih.gov/pmc/articles/PMC6551980/.
Recognition is the first step to understanding and solving an issue within our society. Michale E Newcomb understands the gap between the health of LGBTQ+ youth and their cisgender – heterosexual (cis-het) peers including mental health. He acknowledges the fact that families have a significant influence on adolescents health and calls out upon the lack of research and evidence for the reasoning behind the differences presented in LGBTQ+ youth. This article serves as a call to action for more extensive research in the field of LGBTQ+ health, how families are involved and what can be done to promote healthier parent child relationships. Newcomb hits upon the topic of strained relationships with families that many queer youth experience and expresses the important of those relationships on health, how thy can heavily influence queer youth to negative health outcomes, one of the lesser studied being that of mental health. The limited Research on the link between family rejection / being expelled from the home and mental health and suicidal tendencies is concerning. Newcomb clearly states, “parental rejection has also been linked to increased depression, suicidality, and substance use among LGBTQ youth”(Newcomb et al.). LGBTQ+ youth are burdened with hoping for the acceptance of their parents and families. Queer youth become predisposed to mental health issues as many youth are rejected by their families for their gender identity and sexual orientation. On top of general acceptance, it becomes clear that little has been done to investigate cultural differences and how they effect a families acceptance and influence on queer youths mental health. This article brings to light that the little research that has been conducted on cultural implications does not account for many outside factors, using a broad generalization of culture, intertwining race and ethnicity differenced, ignoring factors such as religion, urbanity / rurality and geographic location. Newcomb suggests research must be diversified within the queer community to provide a thorough understanding of a families response to queer identity and how mental health is impacted. Factors such as sex assigned at birth, gender identity and sexuality orientation elicit different responses from parents. Newcomb believes equipping parents with better understanding of these processes will in turn have positive effects on acceptance in turn improving health of LGBTQ+ community.
It is not eye opening information that not all parents and families would welcome the idea of a Queer child. What is shocking is the lack of research and studies in identifying why family rejection is such a major issue and ways to minimize health disparities stemming from such rejections. If there is a clear link between suicide rate, self harming behaviors, mental health issues and parental rejection why is there not more being done to protect the youth of the queer community from going through such things putting them as much greater risk than their cis-het peers. Newcomb makes proposals on what areas of research need improvement and how they can combat the LGBTQ health issues but how are they going to be achieved. Not many people have been dedicated to solving these issues and providing sound results on methods of improvement. How is more extensive research and overall improvements going to be implemented to support the queer community.
This is a call to action article therefore it is specifically highlighting many issues within the research systems currently in place and aims at improving such issues. The author strives for better results and is dedicated to providing a safer space for queer youth.
- “Understanding the processes that lead to positive outcomes is essential to develop strategies for improving relationships between parents and their LGBTQ youth and mitigating health disparities.”