- Opener: “Life asked death; “Why do people love me but hate you?” Death responded; “Because you are a beautiful lie and I am a painful truth.”
- Thesis with 2 subtopics: Dealing with a close death was very challenging; it caused me much pain, along with finding a way to cope with it, and I came to realize how even people in my own family were great hypocrites.
- Subtopic Paragraphs: 3 Subtopic paragraphs
- Topic sentences for each paragraph: “Dealing with the death of someone so close to me really cause me to in great pain.” “Of course I couldn’t go on acting like that, so I had to find ways to deal with her being gone.” “The worst part of my Grandmother’s death was seeing how people in my family could be so hypocritical.”
- Transitional words & phrases: “In conclusion.”
- General Edits
- Conclusion: “Love leaves a memory that nobody can steal.”
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