15 thoughts on “Feedback for Iverson Figueroa”

  1. It’s hard to adjust in an environment that your not used to being in.  Or adjusting to new people/ family members. It makes you feel out of place.  You should reread your essays to check for grammar mistakes and try wording things differently.  Good job on your essay.

  2. Iverson, I loved how your perspective changes throughout your story. You reflected and learned from it. Watch for grammatical errors but, overall you had an amazing educational experience.

  3. Iverson, I can definitely relate to you story I think that a lot of people can be a little conceited sometimes and they don’t even realize how their actions makes them look to others. I too know a few people who treat others like they are inferior to them, which I find to be absurd. Your essay was great but you would have to fix a few grammatical errors.

  4. The structure or wording of the essay can be fixed a little. There were a few grammatical errors but other than that it was good.You learned a great lesson and the story was good .

  5. Loved your journey and learning experience. Very few grammatical mistakes but overall essay was very inspirational in my opinion, if you just added a little more detail your essay would’ve been even better.

  6. Reading your essay gave me personal flashbacks of my older grandmother and how snotty she was bout the things she use to do so it help me understand you point of view and how you changed as a person. All in all, the essay is very personal and relatable only a few of grammatical errors but great job!

     

  7. I like your essay but I’d suggest focusing on your grammar. Maybe you can read it a few times over or out loud to notice your mistakes, if not have someone else read it.

  8. I loved your story and it was somewhat relatable for me. You should’ve added a few more dialogues in the story and I wish you would’ve ended the story as to how you feel about your step mom in the present. Very few grammar mistakes overall very enjoyable story

  9. I understand the feeling of having to live with someone who you have no choice but to obey every order they tell you to do.I would say this essay relates to a lot of people and I think you should give a bit more details on how you felt this affected you growing up and how you would react if someone outside your home would give you orders.

  10. Thank you for sharing this man. It was a great essay. I can say a lot of people will relate to this. Sometimes the hope doesn’t really go the way we want it and that’s when we find the other side of the hope. Great structure i will just say check over some of the grammar.

  11. Not everyone likes being ordered around. I sure don’t. I’m pretty sure if I were in ur shoes I would have snapped in a week. Reliable and energetic story, but had quite a few grammatical errors.

  12. Not everyone likes being ordered around. I sure don’t. I’m pretty sure if I were in ur shoes I would have snapped in a week. Reliable and energetic story, but had quite a few grammatical errors.

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